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Willy
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Days like that......
Like its one of those days; it’s one of those things;
All mean the same to you:
There is an unseen weight yet still so real
weighing down upon you dampening your spirit
stifling your growth
It’s like you are suspended in mid-air; you are in stasis
With some strange being at your rudder;
You are at its mercy: turned, spun, rolled, rotated, pulled, pushed
your activities are futile but all you feel like doing is nothing
your environment have become this barren
desolate place devoid of its thrills, its hypnotism or even its magnetism.
If only you could be whisked away…..far away
Where your slate could be wiped clean and start afresh!
your once faithful survival strategy – the will to live; the means
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of livening up yourself – is busting at the seams
your broad shoulders ready to buckle under the
the weight of the heavy heart you tote
you have vision yourself on this skyscraper high tightrope
mid-way of its mile long span frozen with fright
you have become so timid that you could
die with shock if touched
days like that….is like it’s one of those days….it’s like one of those things
which instead of being measured by despair
you clean yourself
you anoint yourself
you attire yourself…………..clean and dry
you cast away your gloomy and screwed face
by which time the sure the sun will be shining
days like that…
its’ one of those days…it’s one of those things!
That your bottle comes under test
You know have a good chance to become to know
what metal you’re made up of on days like that!
Willy’s timeline
- April 2026
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12 SunAnniversary
15 years of membership
- April 2021
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12 MonAnniversary
10 years of membership
- April 2016
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12 TueAnniversary
5 years of membership
- April 2012
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12 ThuAnniversary
One year of membership
- March 2012
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28 WedReceived a critique
on Days like that...... from @weirdelf
"Who do you want to get something from it? It's just an attack, a rant. Think about why you write and for who. This can be considered in form and structure, not just content." -
27 TueReceived a critique
on Days like that...... from @China Blue
"firstly it is difficult to read in the format that you use, which tends the reader to overlook many of the words 2nd it's like is used way to often you did not indicate at what intensity you wanted your poem critiqued…" -
27 Tue
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21 WedCritiqued
"Man I'm Talking to You" by @Lepadah
"something had me reading this poem over and over again.......up to now i can't seem to place my finger on it..........it is just appealing to me. if have to quote it will be the whole piece.....so i will just say i love…" -
21 WedReceived a critique
on Mama's Cry from @Nordic cloud
"Christina Dodwell " In Papua New Guinea." Language: Story of the crucifixion: Ol i nail im Jesus long kros, im, i die, na ol plant im bodi daun bilo long groun, e die, tasol un i no die finis, bye i kum up wan taim moa…" -
20 TueReceived a critique
on Life At Dawn from @scribbler
"I read this and then read it again to figure out what was bothering me about it. Then I decided it must be the way you actually used sets of rhyming words in a free verse poem! This is rare enough to deserve praise in a…" -
20 TueReceived a critique
on Life At Dawn from @loved
"we all adorn.... especially the one when we were born . Yes that twas the loveliest morn...." -
20 TueReceived a critique
on Life At Dawn from @Candlewitch
"Life At Dawn. Thank you for allowing me to see life through your eyes. Spring is here for sure! I liked these lines best: The bust of life in the farmyard In its chaos I’m drawn to the harmonies and melodies. Their squa…" -
19 MonReceived a critique
on Mama's Cry from @Cloudthings
"I particularly enjoyed the earlierparts of this writing, there was a very wonderful earthiness & flow, later I lost this a little, that may have been my focus fading though, you will know yourself anyway. Love the senti…" -
19 Mon
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19 MonCritiqued
"I seriously don't know how to use assonance and consonance" by @wesley snow
"whether you can or not understand the concepts to the extent that you know the piece that you wrote is crap you have introduce me to two poetic devices that i may want to explore and utilize in future. Thanks poetic fri…" -
19 MonCritiqued
"Crushed Velvet" by @Candlewitch
"a very enjoyable read...........how i so much wanted to plunge into those clear waters and experience the crushed velvet.....................! Willy" -
19 MonCritiqued
"Witches Pride (Reckoning of the Adversary) eddy styx (updated)" by @Candlewitch
"be rest assured it was my pleasure to read and comment....... understood............i now see the piece in a whole different light. The title now makes sense although i bemoan the idea of losing the integrity of the hum…" -
19 MonReceived a critique
on Indictment Of A Passive People (Pt.1) from @Candlewitch
"Your title is right on! This rant reminds me very much of a letter I just wrote to my Sister. She is one of those who feels the world owes her something just by her very existance. She is very much a material woman. A g…" -
18 SunNew follower
@loved
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18 SunCritiqued
"Witches Pride (Reckoning of the Adversary) eddy styx (updated)" by @Candlewitch
"Hey candlewitch, i loved that piece. There is a serious side to it but there is also this humorous side to it which is what i enjoyed. I like the idea of this loser trying so hard to set traps but which we all know ulti…" -
18 SunCritiqued
"Wow !What Neighbours" by @loved
"Dear Loved, There is this very visible thread of irony in your piece: lovely Neighbours to begin with but by the end they were betrayers.............but if the truth be told the neighbourly bond that once existed (where…" -
17 Sat
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15 ThuHighest posting month
March 2012 — 5 poems
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04 SunCritiqued
"Free Verse Poet" by @loved
"expressions of freedom always carry with them, if not an overt, an under current of arrogance. I think you dealt with your refusal to be constrained by certain conventions while not being offensive. Good piece Always Wi…" -
04 SunCritiqued
"Twas Heaven " by @loved
"loved this piece...... especially the title and the opening line right after it: Twas Heaven i was actually in heaven............... yes it was actually heaven and i was there. How much more forceful can you be. That pi…" -
04 Sun
- February 2012
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29 Wed
- April 2011
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14 ThuFirst publication
Creature of the Night
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14 Thu
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14 Thu
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14 ThuFirst critique offered
on "Drug Addiction" (since unpublished) by @xena465
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12 TueJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 2 days later.
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