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Mar 12, 2012
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Man I'm Talking to You
Player playing
isolate mind eye
fluid body politics
conflict columns compass
upon altar
strange crooked beings
acquire quakes akin to mine
one needed a beloved
less wane jewels to freaks
man . . .
you were once the perfect whim
tender enormous rhythms, polemics & birdie Haiku
happy with the Motown sound
set in old wax; newly found
soft-pedaling down memory lane
"Ooh-oo child" up the 5 Stairsteps
ascend empyrean
Ooo-oo . . . soulful real
frequent obscurity
awaiting lavender morning's
I resent a box kisser
did you not understand
man . . . a request for an unwrinkled smooch
© 2012 Lepadah
— Lepadah, Mar 12, 2012
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Style/Type: Free verse
Editing Stage: Rough draft
Critiques
Willy
14 years 4 months ago
man I'm talking to you
something had me reading this poem over and over again.......up to now i can't seem to place my finger on it..........it is just appealing to me. if have to quote it will be the whole piece.....so i will just say i loved it....
always
willy
Lepadah
14 years 4 months ago
comment
Hello Willy,
Truly humble by your comment/read.
Thanks peace Lepadah
Eduardo Cruz
14 years 4 months ago
girl
you went old school on us. i am starting to become a fan.
"Ooo-oo child, things are going to get easier"
great use of the classic music.
Eddie
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Lepadah
14 years 3 months ago
re: comment
Hello Eddie,
lol . . . likewise sir. Happy you enjoyed this one.
Peace 1 Lepadah
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