vexations10

Member since July 18, 2010

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Dead Tree in the Forest

Posted Oct 22, 2011 · 17 lines · 3 critiques

Stark among the lush of youth

tall, unashamed

no leaves twirl downward

no fertile blanket of rot

to feed saplings

fresh with green sprigs.

Many seasons

they have tasted your nourishment.

Do they regard your wisdom

whispered in the mountain breeze?

Do they believe tales told of

life on the hill,

of cycles of torrents, droughts,

penetrating frosts and mountains

of drifted snow?

Do they devour the lore

falling among the leaves?

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July 2025
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Anniversary
15 years of membership
July 2020
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10 years of membership
July 2015
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5 years of membership
November 2011
04 Fri

Received a critique
on Dead Tree in the Forest from @loved
"like dead trees but still seemingly alive in forests no more of trees but concrete they call it cement and steel ain't it? that's all are we you and me"
October 2011
28 Fri

Critiqued
"Opening Doors" by @Kailashana2
"is a solid line in a very solid poem. I enjoy the view into a woman’s soul. Still I know I will never comprehend the tick and tocs of the sweet gender, so the best I can do is drink their nectar."
26 Wed

Critiqued
"Declarations" by @Kailashana2
"I can see why you were inspired to write such a compelling poem. I got locked in on the line “I picked flowers.” As a boy I gathered all the Tiger Lilies I could carry out of the meadow and brought them home to my mothe…"
23 Sun

Received a critique
on Dead Tree in the Forest from @magics02
"Do they devour the lore falling among the leaves? I like your questions posed to your reader on this metaphoricaly written poem Vex, Just want to say hello to you and wonder where you flew off to? Hope all is well in yo…"
22 Sat

Posted a poem
Dead Tree in the Forest
"Stark among the lush of youth"
Open thread 17 lines
September 2011
04 Sun

Critiqued
"Saturday morning" by @Kailashana2
"Did you ever get any feedback on this poem?"
August 2011
07 Sun

Critiqued
"Creator Of Chaos" by @Lonnie
"and clear work. Hope you are well."
July 2011
25 Mon

Received a critique
on Awareness from @scribbler
"A picture worth 1000 words eh? Some photos are impossible to describe in words. Got a few ideas that you can think on : change awaiting to waiting My humbled glance gathered in so splendid a moment..........just a thoug…"
25 Mon

Critiqued
"REAPER" by @scribbler
"the last verse kicks ass. I wonder if you need as much prelude as you give. Just a thought."
25 Mon

Posted a poem
Awareness
"Her eyes"
Open thread 15 lines
25 Mon

Critiqued
"Nil" by @violet
"I post on another site that has a category for “small poems (ten lines or less)” Your intense short work would qualify! Perhaps we should have a category like that and perhaps short poems would get more attention from s…"
19 Tue

Critiqued
"A PERFECT DAY" by @scribbler
"for a while. I see you have not lost your talents. Be well"
17 Sun

Anniversary
One year of membership
01 Fri

Received a critique
on Drops of Compulsion from @scribbler
"For some reason while reading this Sinatra's song "my way" came to mind. Spotted one typo :either distortions fester or distortion festers. Also in line 3, comparing cup rings to stars seemed a little off to me.Maybe li…"
01 Fri

Critiqued
"Flaming Dummies..." by @Geezer
"riveting to the reader. One little nitpick, drop some of the adjectives. For example you use “just” twice."
June 2011
29 Wed

Received a critique
on Drops of Compulsion from @Geezer
"I like the simplicity of just festers in her mind. You made this poem describe a scene very vividly, and I can relate to it. My father was an alcoholic, and it sounds very familiar. Great descriptive lines! ~ Gee"
29 Wed

Received a critique
on Drops of Compulsion from @Kailashana2
"I like this poem except for the pus/acne line....the poem is too elegant. It would be enough to end with fester in her mind. Let our minds fill in the blank... ~A"
29 Wed

Posted a poem
Drops of Compulsion
"Faded circles of bourbon stains"
Open thread 20 lines
08 Wed

Received a critique
on He Left His Kitten from @Candlewitch
"I found this to be a very sad poem. In the end he left her, so why not leave his kitten,too? It makes sense in a noncommittal way. (She is better off with just the kitten) That's my take on it. always, Cat"
05 Sun

Received a critique
on He Left His Kitten from @scribbler
"I'm going against the flow. This poem boils it all down to the basics.He Left.Why doesn't matter..........stan"
03 Fri

Posted a poem
He Left His Kitten
"Gazing at furry paws"
Open thread 29 lines
01 Wed

Posted a poem
Rejection
"Sounds of skin on silk"
Open thread 9 lines
May 2011
27 Fri

Posted a poem
Unmuffled Fears
"Within stirs a persistent bane"
Open thread 20 lines
24 Tue

Posted a poem
Traces Remain
"Part of her is scarred"
Open thread 19 lines
21 Sat

Posted a poem
Colors on Display
"She paints him"
Open thread 18 lines
18 Wed

Posted a poem
Patches along the Road
"He remembers auburn hair,"
Open thread 28 lines
10 Tue

Posted a poem
Skirt so yellow and bright
"Skirt so yellow and bright"
Open thread 16 lines
03 Tue

Posted a poem
Buried
"Red, white and blue"
Open thread 11 lines
April 2011
23 Sat

Posted a poem
Breakfast
"Your unique omelets"
Open thread 3 lines
15 Fri

Highest posting month
April 2011 — 6 poems
February 2011
15 Tue

Most-discussed work
A Boy with a Hissing Heart

20 critiques to date.
14 Mon

New follower
@Candlewitch
January 2011
03 Mon

First publication
Finding Salvation
December 2010
30 Thu

First critique offered
on ""Happy New Year" " (since unpublished) by @shirley harrison
July 2010
17 Sat

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 170 days later.