Breakfast

Your unique omelets
Fascinate me. Like your sex
Always exotic

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I know this is not a true haiku. Also go ahead and criticize the poem. I thought I would check “please use care” for once to see if anybody notices!

Style/Type: Structured: Eastern

Review Request Intensity: Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Country/Region: USA

Comments

scribbler

15 years ago

hello

I sometimes mark Japanese on a western classic for same reason lol. Not a haiku, but still a very descriptive Japanese. Maybe Senryu?..................scribbler

vexations10

14 years 12 months ago

Thanks Scribbler

I agree that it should be called a Senryu.

Barbara Writes

15 years ago

hi Vexation

omelets and sex never would have thought. lol
nice piece

vexations10

14 years 12 months ago

Thanks Barbara

I’m glad you liked this Senryu (others have told me that is what it is).

CCfire

15 years ago

You could call it a Senryu as

You could call it a Senryu as it involves people :P I think it's interesting to do these a different way.

vexations10

14 years 12 months ago

Oh yes,

I had heard of Senryu but never locked in on it as a variation of the haiku. Thanks much.

raj

15 years ago

a nice expression..i guess

a nice expression..i guess the reference to omelets n sex is due to the sizzling effect of both...

vexations10

14 years 12 months ago

Now I

want to add another verse including the word sizzling. Thanks for the comment

Eduardo Cruz

15 years ago

Vex

haiku" are usaully to compare nature and life's deeper meaning, but this is deep in sex and i lke it.
talk about improving on an omelet, Hahaha!
It's so interesting what you've done here.