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Rhiannon1010
Member since July 1, 2011
Member for 14 years, 11 months
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Portrait of a Man
This portrait
Spread out before me
Of a man,
What a man could be.
Arms outspread in adulation,
In a radiant embrace
Of the world, the sky and sea.
Blistering sun and wind,
Cracked earthen cheeks
Receive teardrops of rain
A sacrifice of pain.
This fatted calf,
This wolf-in-sheeps-clothing.
Not lion, but jackal
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Stealing babies in the night
Not lamb, but still a victim of industrialized slaughter.
The circle turns again.
Held up with
Nails he hammered in.
An appetite for his own
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Rhiannon1010’s timeline
- March 2024
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03 SunReceived a critique
on Portrait of a Man from @Geezer
"may yet reach the heights we aspire to, but we must realize that this little ball of mud in our galaxy, is our only home at the moment; and we need to share it, not fight over the rewards of it. If we don't, we will lik…" -
03 Sun
- July 2021
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01 ThuAnniversary
10 years of membership
- May 2018
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24 ThuReceived a critique
on Blue Ridge from @OriginalRhyku
"Speaking as a humble native of the land of the mighty Himalayas, your evocative poem paints a poignant picture and mountains make for majestic, mystical, magical memories. Well expressed." - March 2018
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30 FriReceived a critique
on Et tu, Brute? from @Eumolpus
"and motion. I want to express 2 thoughts- The first is JC, whom everyone will immediately think is Jesus, so rather than create a distraction just say, Julius, or Ceasar. The other is a suggestion by Pound, who once sai…" - December 2017
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04 MonReceived a critique
on Cobbler from @swamp-witch
"We always have a few cold days around Thanksgiving and Christmas here, but without fail Thanksgiving day and Christmas day when I am stuck in a hot kitchen all day, there is no relief when opening a window! I distinctly…" - November 2017
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22 Wed
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09 ThuReceived a critique
on Erosion from @themoonman
"I agree with Eumolpus, a fun read, loved the alliteration and you pulled it off nicely so that even my country voice didn't sound too awful reading it aloud (alliteration can feel too forced, not a problem with this sho…" -
08 Wed
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08 WedReceived a critique
on Erosion from @chevyvent
"You know who inspires me to write its you my fam on Neopoet An excellent collaboration of voices that work with each other. The influences of our peers can take us far in this life. Hearts are tender and warm when they…" -
08 WedReceived a critique
on Erosion from @scribbler
"I agree with Gee in that it Could be misconstrued which is doing the erosion. But what an unusual form you have displayed......stan" -
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- October 2017
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26 ThuCritiqued
"Space's Omission" by @fink555
"I'm not quite sure what is going on here but I love the powerful imagery. My favorite line is "The oil fell as tapioca from my eyes." I liked the use of enjambment." -
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- August 2017
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25 Fri
- July 2017
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27 ThuCritiqued
"E-mailing my OLD friend, the Roman poet Catullus (Revised)" by @Ali Zonach
"Thank you. I agree that there is often significant literary merit in translations themselves." -
24 MonCritiqued
"E-mailing my OLD friend, the Roman poet Catullus (Revised)" by @Ali Zonach
"Though I prefer his Metamorphoses for the fantastical frame narratives." -
23 SunCritiqued
"E-mailing my OLD friend, the Roman poet Catullus (Revised)" by @Ali Zonach
"As an English major, I've only ever encountered Catullus under the sterile fluorescent lights of the classroom. This is a fresh and playful take on his work that brings much-needed life to his passionate poems." -
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11 TueCritiqued
"All in the golden afternoon" by @Duck2001
"Welcome to Neopoet! I think this is by Lewis Carroll. Please make sure to give credit to the original author." -
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- June 2017
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29 Thu
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26 MonPosted a poem
Stones (imagery workshop)
"The tangible weight of centuries nestled in the palm of your hand." - May 2017
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21 SunNew follower
@Captain
- April 2017
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03 MonCritiqued
"The Never Starting 60 Seconds" by @scooby
"I really liked the innocence in this poem. For me, it is almost childlike in the way the speaker believes in 6:60. I noticed a few typos. "can't" in line 7 needs an apostrophe between the n and t. "Purge" in line 8 shou…" - March 2017
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31 FriCritiqued
"ARBORETUM" by @Eumolpus
"For a formal critique, I have only three small points. 1. I'm not entirely sure if the word "toilet" is directly connected to hair loss. I love the idea behind it, but maybe you could rework that line to have a bit more…" -
29 WedCritiqued
"aging guys all edit" by @lovedly
"I believe your poem here is certainly lovely and well thought out. I was just wondering if I were missing out on some hidden mystery." - September 2016
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23 FriNew follower
@Sparrow
- July 2016
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01 FriAnniversary
5 years of membership
- October 2015
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14 WedNew follower
@Esker
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14 WedNew follower
@lovedly
- July 2012
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01 SunAnniversary
One year of membership
- November 2011
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14 Mon
- August 2011
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15 MonFirst critique offered
on "Helpless" (since unpublished) by @violet
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15 MonHighest posting month
August 2011 — 7 poems
- July 2011
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02 SatFirst publication
The Woman in the grass (since unpublished)
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01 FriJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 1 days later.
About Me
About me
Location: North Carolina, USA, USA
Favorite Poets
Alfred Noyes
T. S. Eliot
Lewis Carroll
Samuel Taylor Coleridge
William Wordsworth
William Blake
Seamus Heaney
Robert Herrick
Recent Work
Portrait of a Man
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Cobbler
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Erosion
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Terror
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Marlboro
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Impermanence
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Sand Hill
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Blue Ridge
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Workshops
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| Poets first poems | (syllabus) | Splash Pool | Started 2017-06-23 | Concluded |
| IMAGERY IN POETRY( ready to start?) | (syllabus) | Splash Pool | Started 2017-06-24 | Concluded |
| Meter... The Workshop. | (syllabus) | Olympic Pool | Started 2017-04-29 | Concluded |
| Naked Emotion, Truth and Originality | (syllabus) | Splash Pool, Olympic Pool, Shark Pool, Plunge Pool | Started 2013-07-30 | Concluded |
| fixed verse – it's not a curse | (syllabus) | Olympic Pool, Plunge Pool | Started 2012-10-28 | Concluded |
| More Meter | (syllabus) | Shark Pool, Plunge Pool | Started 2012-01-11 | Concluded |
| Critique Quickie | (syllabus) | Shark Pool | Started 2011-11-11 | Concluded |
| Expanding Your Perspective | (syllabus) | Splash Pool | Started 2011-08-31 | Concluded |