Race_9togo

Member since December 4, 2007

Member for 18 years, 6 months

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An Audience Of One

Posted Sep 21, 2023 · 30 lines · 6 critiques

It occurred to me
as I came across another
interminable entertainment slaughter
unfolding on my so-called smart TV

That the carefully crafted
blood and pain and fear I saw
was the same identical engulfing maw

of hatred murder rape and torture
that fills almost every media item
in our despairing poisoned broken land.

How much violence do they want
to pollute our daily lives with,
How much horror is enough
to sate the brutality of profit?

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How much more innocence do I have to see
butchered by another empty thing
born human, but now just gleeful monster
filled with pleasure and satisfaction
at another’s painful, brutal death?

And as an afterthought,
some punctuation ending the trail
of screaming human wreckage
is an occasional thing called ‘justice’,
placed as if it solves all problems,
makes carnage worth the agony
of watching others beaten, burned, shot and stabbed to death...

Fuck it.
As the lines between reality and
entertainment further blur,
I think I’ll just stop fucking watching.

Race_9togo’s timeline

September 2023
23 Sat

Received a critique
on An Audience Of One from @Triskelion
"...to the man behind the curtain! Lol...as much as I'd like to argue the concept of ai, I don't think it warrants the attention, although there are millions of people who should feel threatened by it. You are not one of…"
22 Fri

Received a critique
on An Audience Of One from @Triskelion
"...the ai missed the biggest point in this (rant). It looks like frustration spurred a response not genuinely welcomed. Driving home tonight, I was pondering a like thought, so this inspired my comment. I don't see any…"
21 Thu

Posted a poem
An Audience Of One
"It occurred to me"
Open thread 30 lines
March 2023
19 Sun

Received a critique
on Finality of limit from @swamp-witch
"that's a doozy of a phrase, Race. Good to see you here. I am freshly back. It's been a while! Would you consider more commas in the following line? tiny spinning rocky ball, --> tiny, spinning, rocky ball, The flow of t…"
February 2023
22 Wed

Critiqued
"Understanding Eve" by @Lavender
"Eve was tempted...Adam was stupid."
22 Wed

Received a critique
on Finality of limit from @Candlewitch
"it s so good to see you again. I always hang on your every word... I feel that you are my spokes person! you always say what I cannot and so beautifully, too! I love you,dear boy! *love, Cat & eddy...you made me laugh…"
21 Tue

Critiqued
"Forget" by @Indivisible_Origin
"I read 'forget me not' and thought to myself, 'okay, here comes another overdone, overworked poetic subject'... Please forgive me, I was completely wrong. I have read this a dozen times, now, and I can find no fault at…"
21 Tue

Critiqued
"Understanding Eve" by @Lavender
"You know, I almost never comment on or criticize poems where the author wants 'moderate constructive criticism'. I figure if that's all they want, its not worth my time or theirs, or worth their anger and upset when I s…"
21 Tue

Received a critique
on Finality of limit from @Seren
"Firstly I hope you're blessedly well and your world spins smoothly. It's so damn good to see you back. The edit can wait, I'm so absolutely chuffed you're back. Our family is coming home. we all gravitate away with life…"
21 Tue

Critiqued
"Victoria Street " by @Seren
"A good piece of work. We humans have such high hopes for the future, especially when neighborhoods and communities first come into being, but in the end, such places always seem to crumble, as we lose focus on what's im…"
05 Sun

Critiqued
"Through The Lens Of Life" by @William Lynn
"This is good. The rhymes are consistent, the phrasing and cadence are generally good. So is the subject matter. It is obvious that you have beeing writing poetry for a bit. Only one criticism: Verse 6 last line: "Does y…"
January 2023
09 Mon

Received a critique
on Finality of limit from @Candlewitch
"give Jim all my best? I am worried! thank you. *love and hugs, Cat"
09 Mon

Received a critique
on Finality of limit from @Seren
"He hadn't been well last time we spoke I will message him and see how he is (HUGS) I miss him too!!!"
09 Mon

Received a critique
on Finality of limit from @Candlewitch
"You just spun my head around! *love, Cat *ever, eddy"
December 2022
03 Sat

Anniversary
15 years of membership
November 2022
12 Sat

Critiqued
"A Miracle In Breath" by @Depressed 1
"Only problem is the word 'calls' in L4 Perhaps something like "I hear it in every LONELY bird CALL" instead? or maybe 'echoing' instead or 'lonely', or perhaps 'far off'? Something like that."
12 Sat

Critiqued
"THIS LEAF FALLS (HERBSTSTURM)" by @Entend2u
"When I read this it reminded me very strongly of the bodies of the poor KIA soldiers of both sides of the Ukraine-Russia war, already flattened and buried by shelling and the boots of those still fighting, and the so-ca…"
12 Sat

Critiqued
"SUBMISSION" by @Ladymac
"Welcome to Neopoet. You'll find us a pretty welcoming bunch, fairly easy to get along with. The rules? Just remember "courtesy costs nothing", and you won't have any problems! We don't publish or post other people's poe…"
05 Sat

Posted a poem
Finality of limit
"Petty fights erupt on the film skin"
Open thread 21 lines
October 2022
27 Thu

Posted a poem
The Original One
"Steel blossoms rise delicate"
Open thread 22 lines
24 Mon

New follower
@Geezer
15 Sat

Posted a poem
Appreciation
"I was once immortal,"
Open thread 32 lines
May 2022
16 Mon

Posted a poem
On the Brink
"The painful part,"
Open thread 47 lines
05 Thu

Posted a poem
Secret Places
"In the frantic movements of fractured space"
Open thread 49 lines
April 2022
10 Sun

Posted a poem
Light of Dawn
"Standing in the Sacred Light"
Open thread 19 lines
March 2022
24 Thu

New follower
@One
21 Mon

Posted a poem
Defilement
"When a great leader’s falsehood is revealed"
Open thread 19 lines
February 2022
04 Fri

Posted a poem
Such Peace Descending On The River (villanelle)
"Such peace descending on the river"
Open thread 19 lines
02 Wed

Posted a poem
On a day of Snowstorm (haiku)
"The world turns silent"
Open thread 3 lines
January 2022
22 Sat

Posted a poem
I need to recharge
"Run down, as tired as all hell,"
Open thread 20 lines
May 2021
24 Mon

New follower
@K.S Snow
22 Sat

New follower
@lovedly
April 2021
20 Tue

Posted a poem
Modern Day Merlin
"I did not have a choice this time,"
Open thread 36 lines
December 2017
03 Sun

Anniversary
10 years of membership
December 2012
03 Mon

Anniversary
5 years of membership
November 2010
15 Mon

Highest posting month
November 2010 — 23 poems
06 Sat

Posting milestone
100 poems posted
June 2010
19 Sat

Critique milestone
1,000 critiques given
March 2009
18 Wed

Most-discussed work
What Have I Lost

34 critiques to date.
December 2008
03 Wed

Anniversary
One year of membership
December 2007
04 Tue

First critique offered
on "Voices Seen" by @IKnowNoBox
04 Tue

First publication
You, Me And Old Winter
03 Mon

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 1 days later.

About Me

About me

Stressed-filled mother-loving very-married ex-homeschooling scotch-drinking technology-ridden fast-driving food-loving home-cooking heart-diseased gardening fishing winter-loving tree-hugging christian debt-ridden poem-writing computer-programming life-loving drug-overloaded prog-rock-jamming amateur-drumming family-oriented honest-to god (honest, God!) human being who still believes, in spite of our species' best efforts, that homo sapiens are worth saving.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=a2WaD_KqLp8 <- This is Unitopia, from OZ; they ROCK

I love this place, the only briar patch on the web where I feel completely at home. I'm a poet because of the people here - a GOOD poet, many people tell me - and there are no words to express how I feel about that, and them.

'Call me ageless,
Call me ghost;
The diamond dude behind the shades,
The sunflower beneath the skyline,
Swaying in the land of snakes,
Hey I used to be a king,
Now I’m just a king of laughter,
Put my faith in anything,
Anything that’s close to wonder...'
I Am The Sun by The Flower Kings (Swedish)
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oWahVEaiaLc

A list of living proofs that God exists:

Clair d'Lune by Claude Debussey
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CvFH_6DNRCY

Hela Good by No Doubt (American)
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QtTj4cramPM

The Miracle of Being by Capercaillie (Scottish)
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=R8OB6yI5f3E

Kitty Cat by Beyonce (American)
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=x-pWibZB-ww

Hello Its Me by Todd Rundgren (American)
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lLeCB7Kn-VE

The Sorcerer's Apprentice by Paul Dukas (French)
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=U4yH4B9deok

Recycled Waste by Waste Lagoon (Norwegian)
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fmDPUeP7dNQ

Raja Raja by Red Budda (German)....Can anyone please tell me which Kabir song/poem this is? Or can you translate it for me?
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EAtDlAFH7Nw

The Sense In Sanity by IQ (British)
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=NoPeuBRI_1M

Mandrake by Gong (English/French - a bit of master5y from 1975)
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ks9YscGny8g

We Were Born To Be Loved by King's X (American)
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Q0cEtyQjz7g

What You Won't Do For Love by Go West (American)
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TpCqRTG7ckg

Come Alive by Planet Funk
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=h1lHTQGUqIw
"Come Alive," she said,
"Don't go, don't leave before you know,
Don't get it wrong just when you could have got it right...."

The Fire Inside by Steve Hillage (English - classic Hillage; dance to THIS if you dare!))
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4w-o4zw_B6s

The Bonnie Yew Tree by The Battlefield Band (Scottish)
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-Uri_RpWzq8

Toys by Frost (English)
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MJk61r6iUX8

Crown Royale by Jill Scott (American - This lady SERIOUSLY rocks)
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6-2LJ_z0XbQ

Over You by Robin Trower (English)
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QG4P2w2YSeg
'Whether sorrow lives,
Whether time forgives,
Don't forget, that I'm dying, here inside,
Over you...."

Heart of Gold by Neil Young (a bit of magic from the master songwriter)
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Eh44QPT1mPE

Steve Vai and Tony MacAlpine - live in OZ (Two of the best rock guitarists on Planet Earth)
Not only does God exist...HE ROCKS.
SO glad I lived long enough to hear THIS

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UIenY-zNR5k (Part 1)
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AEgTXu9D-HQ (Part 2)

The Roving Journeyman by The Corries (Scottish)
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_5LzHSci1Lg

Unravel Your Soul by Moonrise (Polish)
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uvLuyjRAbLY

Serious Dreamers by The Flower Kings (Swedish)
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3N7AivCpuic

Baila me Hermana (Dance, Sister, Dance) by Santana
I dance so hard to this (and have for fifty years) that my heart hurts
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QWfb7edKeOA

Lament For The Fisherman's Wife by Silly Wizard (Scottish)
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=iC1ZY8SC4ew

Finally...
This song says it all:

You and I,
we are strangers by one chromosome
Slave to the hormone, body and soul
In a struggle to be happy and free
Swimming in a primitive sea

You and I,
we must dive below the surface
A world of red neon and ultramarine
Shining bridges on the ocean floor
Reaching to the alien shore

For you and me, sex is not a competition
For you and me, sex is not a job description
For you and me
We agree

You and I,
we are pressed into these solitudes
Color and culture, language and race
Just variations on a theme
Islands in a much larger stream

For you and me, race is not a competition
For you and me, race is not a definition
For you and me
We agree

But that's just us...
Reaching for the alien shore

You and I,
we reject these narrow attitudes
We add to each other, like a coral reef
Building bridges on the ocean floor
Reaching for the alien shore

For you and me, sex is not a competition
For you and me, race is not a definition
For you and me, we hold these truths to be self-evident
For you and me, we'd elect each other president
For you and me
We might agree

But that's just us...
Reaching for the alien shore

~Alien Shore by Rush (Canadian - arguably the best progressive rock band of the 20th and 21st centuries)
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7f5Mb6_35jM

Location: Earth Vicinity (within a five light-year radius), ZZC

Favorite Poets

John Donne

T.S. Eliot

Serendipity

Emily Dickenson

Kailashana

Charles Bukowski

Kabir

Rett

Dalton

W. B. Yeats

William Blake

Rainer Maria Rilke

and many other Neopoet poets; Neopoet has heavily influenced my poetry and my ability to write it well.

Contest Wins

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Workshops

		Skill level:
IMAGERY IN POETRY( ready to start?)	(syllabus)	Splash Pool	Started 2017-06-24	Concluded
More Meter	(syllabus)	Shark Pool, Plunge Pool	Started 2012-01-11	Concluded
Rhyme- use, variations and forms.	(syllabus)	Shark Pool, Plunge Pool	Started 2011-10-12	Concluded
Cliches and their use	(syllabus)	Olympic Pool	Started 2011-06-20	Concluded
Olympic Pool (initial workshop)	(syllabus)	Olympic Pool	Started 2011-05-16	Concluded