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nomad collapse
Member since July 8, 2010
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The Final Hour
i heard
the banal cry
of a fallen angel
as he rose slowly
upon the cross
in the blank darkness
it was finished
a second angel
ascended on high
weeping in anguish
and gently kissing
the wounds
that had saved humanity
the soldiers
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His detractors
falling heavily
upon their knees
His executioners
the unbelieving horde
shook in abject terror
His mother
and two disciples
beneath His feet
He said woman
do not weep for Me
but behold
I shall make all things new
then from above
the angelic symphony
they knew
the passion, the horror
and the sweet annihilation
so with it the purchase
of total salvation
He raised His head
upon the heavens
upon the crown of thorns
and once again
He cried in a loud voice
Father it is finished
nomad collapse’s timeline
- July 2025
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07 MonAnniversary
15 years of membership
- July 2020
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07 TueAnniversary
10 years of membership
- July 2015
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07 TueAnniversary
5 years of membership
- July 2011
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07 ThuAnniversary
One year of membership
- July 2010
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19 MonReceived a critique
on The Final Hour from @xena465
"I love this very much, like Raskin said, passionate. Brilliant, well done. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell" -
19 MonReceived a critique
on travels with myself (and no one else) 1 from @xena465
"It's not the apostrophe you need, all you need to do is to make a space with the space bar after the commas in your lines that have the commas. PS. Sorry, silly me. You've already done that, but not with all of them in…" -
18 SunReceived a critique
on The Final Hour from @raskin
"This is very good on the passion story. Yes the purchase of salvation. I thought when I read the small passage of the mother how difficult to watch. As a mother I would want to sit there until the end. It's interesting…" -
18 Sun
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18 SunReceived a critique
on travels with myself (and no one else) 1 from @xena465
"When you write sentences like this ... Manhattan early summer,late evening the east village,St. Marks place double espresso,no cream ...with no spaces they’re all stuck together like one continuous word. If you write it…" -
18 SunReceived a critique
on travels with myself (and no one else) 1 from @xena465
"Fabulous edit and what a big difference to the read, you already had/have a great write, but there are just a few more things I hope you don’t mind me mentioning... Your need spaces after your commas, and these lines…" -
17 SatCritiqued
"Retail therapy." by @robinbanks
"after reading of so much despair in poetry it is refreshing to read of despair in a humorous light.it made me pay more attention.well done." -
17 SatCritiqued
"The Yeti" by @xena465
"if this work does not deserve 5 stars then none on this site do!i tip my hat." -
16 FriCritiqued
"RED" by @jorge abou
"as I first read this it seemed juvenile and and just plain bad.then i read it again nd it took on a quality of its own. after letting it swim in my brain for awhile it became bett- er and better.it is what it is and say…" -
13 TueReceived a critique
on travels with myself (and no one else) 1 from @xena465
"This is a really great write, but it needs some revision, e.g. places, cities, names etc; needs to have a capital letter and you need spacing between your commas. If you’d like some help, I’d gladly do this for you. Xen…" -
13 Tue
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10 SatReceived a critique
on the queen of maybe and the prince of perhaps from @seabhac
"Don't normally give stars on a first poem but I think this is a very cleverly written piece. Great rhythm and flow and lots of little nuances...I love it and I am happy to nominate it too. Well done Seabhac" -
08 ThuCritiqued
"I Desire" by @DimondDivinity
"this work spoke volumes with an economy of words.the imagery and the message came across with clarity.it was like a well written song with a strong CLIMAX.well done." -
08 ThuFirst critique offered
on "I Desire" by @DimondDivinity
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08 ThuFirst publication
the queen of maybe and the prince of perhaps
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08 Thu
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07 WedJoined Neopoet
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