xena465

Jul 02, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

The Yeti

On the mountain ice wept

melting snow scaled down its face.

Unnatural life awakened

breaking free from sleeping.

A warm body once cold

felt the heat of the sun

yawned at daybreak

the beast of time, creeping.

It stretched its weary legs

stood tall in the light of day.

Mystified by the sun

blinded by its sightless eyes.

With limbs like heavy lead

it walked like a newborn

the light strong like fire

It faltered from unfamiliar skies.

A myth of superstition

incoherent on the mountains.

You may have your opinions

a giant Polar Bear, he’s not.

He’s a timeless wanderer

afraid of the awakening

a creature of prehistoric times

from an era nature forgot.

Shy, as he doesn’t belong

he dodges our prying curiosity.

Disappearing into the wilderness

leaving a foot-print behind.

Is he our legendary Big-foot?

the Abominable Snowman

an old fable from the past.

a figment of the mind.

— xena465, Jul 02, 2010

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Critiques

Roscoe Lane

16 years ago

Will we,

ever find out, legends are great if you have imagination, which i have in abundance. Mith or truth can we ever say for sure. Great piece. Regards Roscoe..

xena465

16 years ago

I think this one may mystify some readers if they don't know the legend of the Yeti. Thank you so much for appreciating this write. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

mand

16 years ago

Sometimes they show some

Sometimes they show some tantilizing evidence of bigfoot on tv, a little carrot dangling to keep us wondering - all part of the intrigue - who knows maybe there is a creature hidden out there. Great poem Xena, thanks for sharing Love Mand xxx

xena465

16 years ago

Dear Mand

I love these old fables. And I believe that it does exist, but a little shy and confused, which to me implies intelligence. If I was he/she, I’d want to stay in hiding from this new world that he may have awakened to from centuries ago. Our world never learns from the past. Thank you so much Mand. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

Nordic cloud

16 years ago

Ann of NorwayTruly

Ann of Norway Truly fascinating this poem Rosina, Xena, you have departed on another tack and so richly too, I shall be back for a closer look at this with masses of love to you from Ann

xena465

16 years ago

Thank you Ann

I look forward to a closer look. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

xena465

16 years ago

The Snow Queen...

I'm sure I saw that one. There's a lot of people who really believe in `Big Foot`, a creature that was awakened by Global Warming even before we knew that it was a big problem for the future of Earth. But he/she chooses to hide from us. Can you blame it? Thanks a lot Annie. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

faithmairee

16 years ago

Great Poem

Great poem about this legendary creature. Your imagery was really wonderful and made for a fascinating poem. I love it. Faith ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~

xena465

16 years ago

Shucks Thank you Faith

In Scotland, we even have our own wee mythical monster in the lake of Loch Ness, `Nessie`. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

mantiscepter

16 years ago

Xena

as a myth or a story is formed it is taken in by each being's dream's or wants, which in time clarify who we are.either as a species or as an individual,and as we guide our own way in examination. we all must justify our own. well written, I very much enjoyed the journey.. John

xena465

16 years ago

Hiya darling

Nice to see you. I'm so glad you enjoyed the Journey. I do love mysteries. Xena Mrs John x Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

judyanne

16 years ago

you have a wealth of interests rosina

and you keep us interested in them thank you lovely write judy xxxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html

xena465

16 years ago

Thank you Judy

I do love my monster tales, be it fact, fiction or fable. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

hobo

16 years ago

in my backyard

I don't know if you know my friend, but there is supposibly big foots running around the hills in my state of Washington. I don't know if I believe or not but it would be cool. nice write *You can never pick anyone up if you are busy putting them down*

xena465

16 years ago

Really Hobo?

I didn't know that. How exciting. Wouldn’t it be great to see one? Thank you so much Hobo Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

Mari Shine

16 years ago

What a delightfully penned

What a delightfully penned write this is Xena, taking the writer on a journey to meet the legendary Yeti. Filled with superb visual detail, the poem is enchanting to read and is so finely narrated in it's crafting. A topic much spoken about and now so finely turned into a brilliant poem. Enjoyed reading very much Xena and I thank you for so kindly sharing it with me.

xena465

16 years ago

Dear Mari

What a great comment and compliment. Thank you so very much. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

scribbler

16 years ago

yeti

Yeti,Abominable snowman,Sasquatch,Big foot,Skunk ape.If they didn't exist we'd have to invent them LOL.very original work......scribbler

xena465

16 years ago

Thank you Stan

This is so true. I'd hate to think they don't exist. That wouldn't be much fun would it? Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Xena

the aboriginals in australia have a legend .... the creature is called a bunyip here is the link if your interested in finding out more about them http://home.iprimus.com.au/gunnado/bunyip.html its been suggested they are related to yowies love and hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

xena465

16 years ago

Bunyip

I think I've heard this name. I'll check out the site. PS. I've just read all about it. It looks like an alligator type creature. Very fascinating I thoroughly enjoyed learning about it. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

judyanne

16 years ago

a dozen cloves of garlic

mushed up in about 300g honey eat a teaspoonful on the hour for a day, then as desired (joke not with the word desired, you feel the relief) the first mouthful is absolutely gross and hard to swallow, but persevere and by the second or third you are able to chew and swallow and by the fifth you don't even need a drink to drown the taste miracle relief !!! love and no hugs right now as i just got over a bad head cold (with garlic and honey) and i don't want your flu judd xxxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html

Seren

16 years ago

LOL btw great poem I forgot

LOL btw great poem I forgot to add sorry got the flu im a tad slow today JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

xena465

16 years ago

Thanks JayCee

It's hard to believe the weather here in Glasgow. It’s windy, cold, dull, pouring with rain and feels like winter. Compared to the great sun and heat last week; this it a complete turnaround. I hope your flu is short-lived. It can make you feel miserable as well as ill. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

shirley harrison

16 years ago

How wonderful!

xena, i'm late,i just got back from camping!!! love this poem its true that you sure to have a different poem every time! really entertaining, but i have just one thing to say! it reminds me of me before my wax! L:O:L much love always shirl..... shirley harrison

xena465

16 years ago

Thanks Shirley

You're a real pal. Haven't been on site for a few days. Will catch up today. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

Candlewitch

16 years ago

Dear Rosina

I just love all the legendary creatures. Like Shirley, I'm late in getting to this write. I enjoyed your imagery and story telling. Favorite lines: Shy, as he doesn’t belong he dodges our prying curiosity. Disappearing into the wilderness leaving a foot-print behind. Is he our legendary Big-foot? the Abominable Snowman an old fable from the past. a figment of the mind. Always, Cat

xena465

16 years ago

You're so sweet Cat

I do love a good monster fable. Thank you for your lovely comment. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

Lil Z

16 years ago

This!

This is why you are one of my favorite poets on here!

xena465

16 years ago

Shucks Lil

That's lovely. I'll catch up today on your bril poems today. Been out of action for a few days. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

DawningDaytripper

16 years ago

Fantastic Story Rosina, I

Fantastic Story Rosina, I love stories about the Yeti. I live in the Pacific NW so we have Bigfoot stories, I like to compare them Great reading. Sorry I was so late to the party, but I am glad I caught it now! Julie D.D. Hello all, come and join us in chat! Meet n' greet, Neo night, lonely poems, teen night. We have something for everyone, come and meet your community!

xena465

16 years ago

Dear Julie

Thank you so much, been a bit late myself with day to day things. But I'm back on track. Just needed some me time. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

Nordic cloud

16 years ago

I'm back a little less distracted!!

Ann of Norway You touch nature and the elements of fairy tale and myth with such panache that anyone would think you were schooled in their thought and poetry, this is wonderful Rosina, I am here to toast for you, you truly have sent the flags flying in the breeze of your words broadcasting their potency to the world of Neopoets with such grace and understanding, well done my good friend well done dear Rosina with love from Ann.

xena465

16 years ago

I have a good teacher...

YOU...you always bring out the nature side of me, be it fact, myth or fiction. Thank you so much. I hope all is going well with you and your health. My brother is recovering from illness and is leaving hospital tomorrow. He will still have to return for treatment as an out-patient for the rest of his life though, but he's alive! Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

Moloko D. Mahuma

16 years ago

What a story

Nominated, Nominated! Very refreshing...you always come with something different and you have your way with words. You are a genius. Love, Moloko

xena465

16 years ago

Gee Moloko

Always so kind in your praise and words to me thank you so much. I've a bit of catching up to do today, been out of touch for a few days. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

ziggy

16 years ago

hi

hi a great theme, fact or fable but write on it you are well able cheers ,,,,,,,zigs

xena465

16 years ago

Thanks Zigs

I love a good old monster story, especially this one about the Yeti. Ta much. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

Sinbadthesailorman

16 years ago

Again, As you have stated it reads both ways well

My preference would be bottoms up. If you gave your intro line here as it is now a little juggle a more powerful ending would emerge. Just by reshaping those same exact words. I don't want to word it for you here, but if you would like me to I could send a private message. I think the starting line is the most Powerful line. When rearranged for and ending. It is not often I find these types of writes that read this clear in either direction forward or backwards too me. The Bible has many verses also that read this way, it is quite interesting to me. Almost every write of mine doesn't read, but in one direction, I have not check them all though. Donnie/Sinbad the Sailor Man

xena465

16 years ago

Dear Donnie ... yes please

Thank you very much, I would appreciate that if you could help me with this. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

sempervirens

16 years ago

This is a great poem! Very

This is a great poem! Very deep and open to various interpretations depending on who you are. I think myth and art have something in common in that they both spring from one's imagination. Thanks for bringing the creature back to life in your fabulous poem. The first line is a gem.

xena465

16 years ago

Cheers S-V

I guess we all have our little monsters no matter where in the world we come from eh! With the Yeti, I've never heard of it kill anyone, it's too shy to even be seen. Thank you so much. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

nomad collapse

16 years ago

Hats Off

if this work does not deserve 5 stars then none on this site do!i tip my hat.

xena465

16 years ago

I'm so chuffed

Thank you so much for such a great compliment Nomad. I really appreciate it, you gave me a much needed lift. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

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