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CYCLER

I am just a tiny seep
   out of stony ground I weep
   Beside a rotted chestnut log
   just enough to form a bog

Trickling down I join a neighbor
   And we combine our downhill labor
   together we now form a spring
   listen close,you'll hear us sing

My voyage now describes a hollow
   over rocks my riffles follow
   now this spring marries another
   each adding its flow to the other

I've now become a babbling brook
   and taken on a whole new look
   now my pools contain small fishes
   among flat stones shaped like dishes

The farther from my source I flow
   the larger I become and so
   with more additions I'm a stream
   as pretty as in any dream

Add more infusions,now a creek
   an ever lower path I seek
   my journey to the distant sea
   takes on much more urgency
  

Cutting now through field and glade
   within the bed that I have made
   I twist around, attempt to find
   another creek thats of like mind

At last another one I join
   different sides of similar coin
   our strength now forms a mighty river
   which when in flood makes levees quiver

The final stretch is now in sight
   the sky is clear, the sun is bright
   I'm now a part of the great sea
   the way that I was meant to be

Sun's heat draws my moisture out
   forming clouds which take a route
   to mountain range so far away
   the trip takes much more than a day

The clouds now drop me as soft rain
   until I hit the ground again
   and soak into the ground real deep
   emerging as a tiny seep


— scribbler, Jun 27, 2010

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Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

cycler

Hey Logic! thanks for visit and kind words......scribbler
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poewriter58

15 years 11 months ago

Stan

This is classic. I cannot express how much I enjoyed reading this work. I see nothing to suggest on this write. I love the way you brought everything full circle. This would make a great poem for educational purposes. Keep stuff like this coming and I'll keep reading Chrys
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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

cycler

Gonna make me blush!Appreciate your continuing support and kind words.....scribbler
faithmairee

faithmairee

15 years 11 months ago

This is brilliant

Now, this I like! Exceptionally well written, Scribbler! The flow is great, your choice of words simply brilliant and your delivery right on the mark. Kudos to you. ~I never say anything I don't mean nor do I say anything to be mean.~
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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

cycler

Always like a visit from a fellow child of the south.I greatly appreciate your kind words and time to read and comment.........scribbler
lou

lou

15 years 11 months ago

Stan

I enjoyed the poem but line 1 a tiny seep, doesn't sound right, maybe you could say ' I'm a tiny drip, I seep,' the last line could be 'i emerge and seep ' . I don't think someone or something can be a seep but they can seep out of something , so that is all I would change. Apart from that a good read. Love Lou xx
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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

seep

Seep is a local term used to describe a place where water emerges from the ground in a minute quantity.Also defined as such in Webster's 9th Collegiate Dictionary.Will consider adding a notation of such as this may be a misunderstood cultural term.Thanks for the visit and comment .......scribbler
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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

cycler

Puns not only excused but encouraged lol.As in title.thanks for time to read and comment.......scribbler
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Scribbler

Shucks Stan this is beautiful. I relate a lot to this one, as the rain brought on some nice feelings for me too recently. But your write goes beyond all that with many more lovely vivid images...Superb. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

cycler

Thanks.Still enjoying the walk we had in the rain.Appreciate your support and kind words....Stan
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Now I know ive been slack I

Now I know ive been slack I think this is number three ive caught up with in my list tonight ? lol well done again stan ... I am a, I am a, I am a broken record lol ;) love and big smiles JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

cycler

Gets hard to keep up and also read work of newbies too.Thanks......scribbler
Professor Purple

Professor Purple

15 years 11 months ago

You just keep on amazing me!

I agree with poewriter, this would make an excellent educational poem. Educational about both nature and poetry. You kept my interest through many stanzas, never did it feel too long. Great language use, rhythm, beginning and ending, and nature's such a rich theme. I'm not sure about "route" rhyming with "out" though, I pronounce it "root", and "rout" has a very diffrent meaning. If I'm mispronouncing, please correct me, English is a second language to me and I'm always willing to learn. Antoine
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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

route

According to Webster's,there are 2 pronunciations for "route".One rhymes with out,other doesn't.Seems pronunc. as "root" is more prevalent in northern and midwest U.S.English!In what other language are blackberries red when green?lol.I appreciate your continued support........scribbler