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Geremia
Geremia
Jun 13, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Rereat

 

RETREAT

At times
I wrap myself deep
In the quiet
Of Silence
I do not speak
And
Do not seek
The intimacy of another

I let my thoughts wander
Free
As they come to me
No care
What they say
Walking in a dream
Of slow motion
Through the loneness of my day

I seem to float
Like a ghost
Between
Despair and resignation
Haunting empty rooms
Searching for reason
That Reason can never understand
And
I wrap myself deep
In the quiet
Of Silence
When I have taken all
I can bear

 

— Geremia, Jun 13, 2010

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brittle light

brittle light

15 years 12 months ago

man! I like this

smooth. I never lost grasp of each lines intention. theme, flow, conciseness, all impeccable. however, I am wondering about the lines 'no care ' 'what they say 'I wanted to, and did, read it as 'Not caring what they say'. What say you to this? drop me a line if you care to repond . this is one of my favorites since joining NeoPoets. regards, AL
Geremia

Geremia

15 years 12 months ago

J.B. Longo-Geremia“No

J.B. Longo-Geremia "No care" is a kind of zeugma: a term thatrefers to two different things that are seeemngly unrelated: such as, "You entered my home and my heart." "No care" = I have no cares AND "I don't care what they say" thanks I broke my " silence,but it was worth it. P.S. Read DREAM DANCE here--you wil understand more.
R

raj

15 years 12 months ago

Hello Longo

it is nice that you have found solace by expressing your inner thoughts through the medium of poetry as you have done in this reflective write "Retreat"... raj (sublime_ocean)
brittle light

brittle light

15 years 12 months ago

hey Longo

it's me again. I forgot the stars the first time, and the nomination button. I rarely use them
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

15 years 12 months ago

Yes you have written a masterpiece again.

Ann of Norway Very very very fine,  very moving and beautiful Logobardolino, in the beauty, the stark white beauty of silence, you meditate, you sense and feel the essence of yourself,  you plumb the depths of reason, the functioning of the brain,  you search the levels of existence, hear them speak, albeit in the silence you repeat, and you repeat, until the traces of the thoughts they dissipate and the total silence of the mind,  remains as if forgotten, left behind.  Yes you have written a masterpiece again, of such  a special quality, if you cannot tap the elements  for gods and goddesses, spectres and dreams,  you find the wholeness of being still, and then can fill with ALL the all that is existence undescribed as yet, you bard, you man, you scribe, you poet. I can sense and feel the visions and the thoughts you have,  the dreams half recognised that float beside you, lift your eyes,  I do, I do I feel it too, just like you, and yet I have no fear of  terror, dread of coming things like you, I can identify with you. Your Annuccia. 
M

magics02

15 years 12 months ago

Yes indeed

Bravo my Longo as I do the same, no need for all the chatter and clatter in the brain as silence is all I need and care for as I too walk in the breaths of life. You did Magnifico here my friend I share this piece with you also, Love and Peace to you Mona xxxoxox
Geremia

Geremia

15 years 12 months ago

To Mona, Judy and Shiley

J.B. Longo-Geremia You are never lonely becausse your true friend is you yourself. Great silent conversation. longo P.S. It has been a bad 2 months. Disease has taken an unpleasant t urn. I may be "silent" for a while, sparse with answerng comments. Does not mean I am ignorng. Jus t feeling the effects ... need to deal with it 'deeep inside' Insidious, hstteful dsease...it will get better...i will make it so...stubborn southern Italian, yes.
judyanne

judyanne

15 years 12 months ago

beautiful longo

the best retreat of all - within ourselves. love judy xxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html
SH

shirley harrison

15 years 12 months ago

Dear Longo

wonderful words, perfect poem i love my own company! shirley harrison