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Song of myself

19 years old.
full of memories.
good and bad.
full of likes and dislikes.
i like the way the wind blows through my hair,
but hate the way god created me.
i sit back and remember things that make me happy.
like the day i gained more friends.
also remembering  things that make me cry,
like the day my dog was hit and died.
i am one of the most boy crazy girls you will ever meet.
call me a whore,
but im just me.
people judge me by the way i talk,
walk ,
and dress.
i dont care,
in my world im the best.
crying myself to sleep at night,
laughing myself through the day.
you see me with a smile on my face.
but inside i cry out in pain.
— Sinthya, Jun 06, 2010

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weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years ago

good start! brutally honest.

too many "I"s and reads a bit like a list in place, but will be great with some polishing Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible,
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sakkkkkkkkkkkkkkk

16 years ago

Just you

Sinthya. Just you are to be yorself when you awake to the next day. I my friend have pride in people like yourself as they are few and far bwetween. Well in saying that a old proverb comes to mind. If you my friend at the time of your demise can count on one hand the number of true friends you have had in your life. You were a lucky soul. And by the way count me in as number six.
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years ago

I'm going to make what sound like specific suggestions

about two lines that feel weak to me. Take them, leave them or find your own way to improve them. full of likes and dislikes. I am passionate about everything but inside i cry out in pain. I will never give you the pleasure of my pain. This piece is already gaining potency. And may I say, I enjoy working with you, please feel free to criticise my work. Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible,
R

Rich-The-Poet

15 years 11 months ago

when you remember how

when you remember how important you are the rest is sure to understand,,focus on your positive and let it become your reality,.,.great write my dear poet