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May 31, 2010
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Head Trip
Head Trip
It was 1964 when I headed out the door
and I didn't know my ass from a kitchen sink
But Grandma was a nasty bitch, and I just had this crazy itch
to join the US Army, whatcha think?
They sent me to Fort Dix for Basic Training tricks
and then I went to school to learn Supply
and shortly after that was done, some Major came and told me, "Son"
"your orders are for Europe, you lucky guy!"
So I spent two years in Germany drinkin' beer and makin' pee
and then somehow I came to Re-enlist
went to Meteorology school, got sent West to play the fool,
and then the Army gave my nuts a twist!
The year was 1968, and I left from the Golden Gate
to some Hell hole called Song Be, Vietnam
there I played what they called War, and even laid some little whore,
but all in all it wasn't worth a damn!
In Sixty-nine I was home again, smokin' dope and feelin' pain,
and those last two years just never seemed to end
but finally my hitch was over, got on my bike that I called Rover,
and headed home to family and friends
Now many years have come and went, I think about the days I spent
serving God and Country for a spell,
I write my words of silly rhyme about that old, familiar time,
and realize I've served my days in Hell
C. Lon R. Bruso
It was 1964 when I headed out the door
and I didn't know my ass from a kitchen sink
But Grandma was a nasty bitch, and I just had this crazy itch
to join the US Army, whatcha think?
They sent me to Fort Dix for Basic Training tricks
and then I went to school to learn Supply
and shortly after that was done, some Major came and told me, "Son"
"your orders are for Europe, you lucky guy!"
So I spent two years in Germany drinkin' beer and makin' pee
and then somehow I came to Re-enlist
went to Meteorology school, got sent West to play the fool,
and then the Army gave my nuts a twist!
The year was 1968, and I left from the Golden Gate
to some Hell hole called Song Be, Vietnam
there I played what they called War, and even laid some little whore,
but all in all it wasn't worth a damn!
In Sixty-nine I was home again, smokin' dope and feelin' pain,
and those last two years just never seemed to end
but finally my hitch was over, got on my bike that I called Rover,
and headed home to family and friends
Now many years have come and went, I think about the days I spent
serving God and Country for a spell,
I write my words of silly rhyme about that old, familiar time,
and realize I've served my days in Hell
C. Lon R. Bruso
— Lonnie, May 31, 2010
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weirdelf
16 years 1 month ago
fucking brilliant mate!
weirdelf
16 years 1 month ago
I can't bring myself to comment on some scansion trivialities
Lonnie
16 years 1 month ago
Thanks for both of your comments, my friend!
Rett
16 years 1 month ago
Damn good Lonnie!
Lonnie
16 years 1 month ago
Many Thanks, Rett!
DawningDaytripper
16 years 1 month ago
I will let the stars speak
Lonnie
16 years 1 month ago
Thank you, Julie!
Kailashana
16 years 1 month ago
Gritty, red white and blue
Lonnie
16 years 1 month ago
Thank you, Anna!
scribbler
16 years 1 month ago
head trip
Lonnie
16 years 1 month ago
Thanks, scribbler!
poewriter58
16 years 1 month ago
Lon
Lonnie
16 years 1 month ago
Many thanks, M'Dear!
Bonitaj
16 years 1 month ago
Hello Lonnie
Lonnie
16 years 1 month ago
Thank you, Bonitaj!
Breakinglogic
16 years 1 month ago
Lonnie, I loved your every
Lonnie
16 years 1 month ago
Thanks, Logic!
Roscoe Lane
16 years 1 month ago
It must have been,
Lonnie
16 years 1 month ago
Thank you, Roscoe!
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