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Head Trip

                        Head Trip                                              



                It was 1964 when I headed out the door
                and I didn't know my ass from a kitchen sink
                But Grandma was a nasty bitch, and I just had this crazy itch
                to join the US Army, whatcha think?

                They sent me to Fort Dix for Basic Training tricks
                and then I went to school to learn Supply
                and shortly after that was done, some Major came and told me, "Son"
                "your orders are for Europe, you lucky guy!"

                So I spent two years in Germany drinkin' beer and makin' pee
                and then somehow I came to Re-enlist
                went to Meteorology school, got sent West to play the fool,
                and then the Army gave my nuts a twist!
    
                The year was 1968, and I left from the Golden Gate
                 to some Hell hole called Song Be, Vietnam
                 there I played what they called War, and even laid some little whore,
                 but all in all it wasn't worth a damn!

                 In Sixty-nine I was home again, smokin' dope and feelin' pain,
                 and those last two years just never seemed to end
                 but finally my hitch was over, got on my bike that I called Rover,
                 and headed home to family and friends

                 Now many years have come and went, I think about the days I spent
                 serving God and Country for a spell,
                 I write my words of silly rhyme about that old, familiar time,
                 and realize I've served my days in Hell


                 C.  Lon  R.  Bruso                
                
               
                
                
               
       
— Lonnie, May 31, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: New England, originally, now, Macon, N.C., USA

Favorite Poets: Poe, Frost, Bob Dylan

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weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years ago

fucking brilliant mate!

I can hear this sung by Dylan or one of the Guthries! Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible, "the alleged short-cut to knowledge, which is faith, is only a short-circuit destroying the mind." [Ayn Rand, Atlas Shrugged]
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years ago

I can't bring myself to comment on some scansion trivialities

cos I can just about here a song to it in my head and with lyrics you can take a lot more liberties Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible, "the alleged short-cut to knowledge, which is faith, is only a short-circuit destroying the mind." [Ayn Rand, Atlas Shrugged]
Rett

Rett

16 years ago

Damn good Lonnie!

I know for a fact how difficult that rhyme scheme is. Well done and great topic my friend. This should be a winner! Respectfully, Rett: “Anyone who sacrifices liberty for security deserves neither.” Benjamin Franklin
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Lonnie

16 years ago

Many Thanks, Rett!

I greatly appreciate it when someone I highly respect for both their writing and their opinion drops by to read and comment!
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Lonnie

16 years ago

Thank you, Julie!

You do me great honor with your five stars and, of course, your most welcome comments!
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years ago

Gritty, red white and blue

Gritty, red white and blue song of betrayal. Good for you Lonnie. To convert the ravages of Nam into poetic music is indeed an ability few have. Most are too embittered or ill. Every war betrays humanity because our humanity is forgotten. And war is never about peace but who wins. Usually it's not the soldiers on either side. ~A "Just as what you dream is your own and no one else can observe it, so the world you see is your own." ~ Nisargadatta
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Lonnie

16 years ago

Thank you, Anna!

As someone who has garnered more praise for their poetry than most, you do me a great courtesy with your very valued opinion and comments! Thanks again!
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scribbler

16 years ago

head trip

Only those who've never experienced war can truly love it.I salute your sacrifice,Lonnie......scribbler
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Lonnie

16 years ago

Thanks, scribbler!

I appreciate you taking the time to read this poem and leave a nice comment, thank you once again!
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poewriter58

16 years ago

Lon

Amazing how you were able to take such a serious subject and write it with an air of dry humor. As always your rhyme is perfect love ya Me
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Lonnie

16 years ago

Many thanks, M'Dear!

As I always remind you. you're very much the inspiration for many of my writings, and I dearly love ya back!
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years ago

Hello Lonnie

being 'outside' the USA and all it's history of involvement in war - this stood out as a good view of 'a man from the bottom up' for me. It also came over as a Woody Guthrie, Dylan type of lament - as some of the others have suggested. Apart from being a good write, hope it provided more than a little cathartic value, for you personally. CHeers Bonitaj
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Lonnie

16 years ago

Thank you, Bonitaj!

It's always a pleasure to hear how someone from another Country views things! I deeply appreciate your taking time to read and comment!
Breakinglogic

Breakinglogic

16 years ago

Lonnie, I loved your every

Lonnie, I loved your every word, and as if to kill that second bird, your write was right on time. Your service, and your opinion, are well worth mentioning, and you surely come off well when spoken in rhyme. Hope you had a great memorial day, peace and cheers, logic
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Lonnie

16 years ago

Thanks, Logic!

I'm glad you enjoyed this little witticism of mine for Memorial Day! My thanks for your kind comments!
Roscoe Lane

Roscoe Lane

16 years ago

It must have been,

hell, we see the movies and they are bad enough. To actually have lived it, well enough said we can only imagine. Great poem,and it's got to be Dylan. Regards Roscoe...
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Lonnie

16 years ago

Thank you, Roscoe!

It was indeed a rough road upon occasion! Of course many good things happened during my Military Service also, but perhaps I'll save those for another write!