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SHADE TREE MUSINGS

I'm sitting underneath a tree
  that must be thrice as old as me
  and as I sit I think about
  how this huge tree was once a sprout

Through all the years that it has grown
  how many fields have farmers sown ?
  and since it was a small acorn
  how many generations born ?

Beneath its spreading summer shade
  what lovers' promises were made
  while out upon an evening's lark
  and carving names in smooth beech bark

So many times this monarch's shed
  it's autumn coat of gold and red
  to spend the winter cold and chill
  while standing on this wooded hill

And long ago on a still day
  did grey clad soldiers come this way
  and camp beside it on this hill
  perhaps their ghosts remain here still

It's seen us go from carts to cars
  from telegraph to hearing stars
  observed yon valley raped and raw
  by the skidders and chainsaw

I wonder at this tree's long life
  the peace it's lived through, and the strife
  how oft' it has seen setting sun
  'Twill still be here when I am done
— scribbler, May 28, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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Critiques

Breakinglogic

Breakinglogic

16 years ago

hey scribbler :)

excellent pentameter. great word usage, loved the title. and love the afterthought. peace and cheers, logic
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scribbler

16 years ago

musings

thanks for taking time to read and kind words
L

Lonnie

16 years ago

A poem to be proud of, surely!

Fantastic imagery, great word usage, and equally lovely flow! I am so fond of structured poems, as I feel they convey the true essence of poetry and what it means to be a poet! Well done, indeed!
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scribbler

16 years ago

musings

thanks Lonnie.I agree about structured poems.After all how many verses of free verse can you call to mind ? Appreciate the read....scribbler
lou

lou

16 years ago

Dear scribbler

The title Is a little generic . The subject is a classic one. But the use of language is effective, the use of imagery is strong. It flows well. Good job. Lou xx
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scribbler

16 years ago

musings

Thanks Lou.I really hesitate to change a title without a major content change.I will try to avoid "generic"henceforth.......scribbler
xena465

xena465

16 years ago

Brilliant Stan

I love, love it...all of it. But this is my favorite... And long ago on a still day did grey clad soldiers come this way and camp beside it on this hill perhaps their ghosts remain here still Rosina xena465
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scribbler

16 years ago

musings

Almost left verse out for being vague about identity of soldiers.Guess that shows advantage of going with one's "gut".Glad you enjoyed it.Currently working on work about those grey clad soldiers........scribbler
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear scribbler

Sigh lovely musings i was there with you .. I cant find fault :) love JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
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scribbler

16 years ago

musings

Guess we've all daydreamed under a shade tree.Thank you......scribbler
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years ago

Hello Scribbler

I don't know that much about metered poetry, but I am trying to learn. I do know that the subject matter was engrossing and the imagery superb and it flowed very well. Always, Cat
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scribbler

16 years ago

musings

If you remember childhood nursery rhymes you know enough to start.thank you for taking time to read mine and for kind words.......Stan
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Jonesk21b

16 years ago

Great

I'd like to sit under this tree myself. Terrific ending. Makes me think of what else will still be here when i am gone.
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scribbler

16 years ago

musings

thanks for dropping in.Compared to trees and landscape we're all short lived.....scribbler
hobo

hobo

16 years ago

beautiful poem

I like this poem very much espically the lines I wonder at this tree’s long life the peace it’s lived through, and the strife how oft’ it has seen setting sun ‘Twill still be here when I am done this is wonderful work my friend
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scribbler

16 years ago

musings

thanks for the read and kind words......scribbler
H

hippiepoet69

16 years ago

Brought back bitter sweet

memories. One was a 6 foot dieameter bing cherry tree. We would have cherry fights for hours almost every day. They cut it down to put a trailer house. Though there was acres of land to put it on. They wanted the trailer on top of the hill where the tree was. PROGRESS. Then 4 4 foot diameter walnut trees. To widen the high way. They was cut into firewood. PROGRESS. These didn't see any soldiers. It was Oregon territory back then. So I ain't no Yankie or Rebel. LOL. Take Care. huey
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scribbler

16 years ago

musings

there's a difference between a tree with a shade and a shade tree ,isn't there.be reading you later,Huey.......scribbler
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years ago

Sweet poem. It is

Sweet poem. It is true...rhyme helps the mind remember because it has a sing-song mesmerizing effect. However, how many of the modern greats use this style of Frost, Yeats, etc.? Imo it's difficult to create word imagery in a constricted style that must rhyme in order to be effective. Some poor and bland boring have resulted in trying to maintain this style. You, however, have created a truly remarkable poem in as much as captures the essence, the feel, of *poetry* be it rhyme or free verse. I do not limit myself by saying one is better than the other. I just enjoy good poetry, regardless how it is *packaged*. My style, however, is free verse; it's a *natural* way of writing for me. ~ p.s. *its* instead of *it's* in *beneath its spreading summer shade*. "Just as what you dream is your own and no one else can observe it, so the world you see is your own." ~ Nisargadatta
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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

shade tree

I prefer western classic for myself but read all.Some free verse is too "foreign " for me to appreciate, I fear,but many convey great beauty.I fear some of my attempts at classic may fall into bland category,but can't hit home run every time.thanks for time to read and kind words.....scribbler
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wolf

16 years ago

Good

A masterpiece, you can be proud of this one, it is one in a thousand, thank you for your comments, I will not tell you to jump in a lake, I like it if people give their opinions, my philosophy is: from critic you learn but from silence not, I after all asked for the raw truth. P.S. the last line in this poem, wouldn't it be better if you said, Twill still be here when I am "gone" (just an opinion). Wolf.
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scribbler

16 years ago

musings

Message might be improved, but wouldn't it mess up rhyme pattern? thanks for visit and suggestion........scribbler