Rett

May 26, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

The Perfect Storm

Unleashed irrationality slashing

cutting

like a serrated knife
jammed through the spine
slowly sawing
on the very last nerve,
just awaiting the snap
before the fury of the storm
is released

raging

like a maddened beast

tortured

beyond endurance
until in desperation
it turns

lashing

like a metal studded whip
at the unprotected back of a child,

exploding

into a nova heat
of blindness
burning itself out
of existence
leaving
nothing
but
ashes

— Rett, May 26, 2010

About This Poem

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Region, Country: Southern Texas, USA

Favorite Poets: Dickenson, Longfellow

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Critiques

Janice Pearce

16 years ago

The perfect Storm

Rett, Liked this one from you. The heat, burning, and ashes seemed to go together, but for some reason I found myself thinking in the form of "scars" Great writing! ______________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

Rett

16 years ago

Thanks Janice

First I have really written in a while. I think most of us have experienced those moments. Glad you enjoyed it. Respectfully, Rett: “Anyone who sacrifices liberty for security deserves neither.” Benjamin Franklin

Breakinglogic

16 years ago

hiya rett

I love the metaphors and the double play at 'nerve' :) I could feel the heat from the write. well done peace and cheers, logic

Rett

16 years ago

Hey Logic

Glad you caught the double play on nerve. My wife's favorite saying is "You're getting on my very last nerve". Thank you for the kind words. Respectfully, Rett: “Anyone who sacrifices liberty for security deserves neither.” Benjamin Franklin

xena465

16 years ago

Dear Rett

This is so good. Sounds like many different ways of feeling like you're about to be murdered. Love the flow and very well written. Rosina xena465

Rett

16 years ago

Thank you Rosina

Just one of those moments when something hits you like a migraine and has to be let out. Glad you liked it. Respectfully, Rett: “Anyone who sacrifices liberty for security deserves neither.” Benjamin Franklin

ifoundaplace

16 years ago

Rett

I liked this.. very dark, but I like it. Good job.. Found I could relate.. especially today. Danielle (:

Rett

16 years ago

Thank you Dani

I appreciate it. I don't normally write quite this dark, but once in a while...the darkness has to have an outlet. Respectfully, Rett: “Anyone who sacrifices liberty for security deserves neither.” Benjamin Franklin

ifoundaplace

16 years ago

yes Rett

We can all write dark sometimes.. We need to let it out and poetry seems to be an easy way to do so. So please Rett, do not feel the need to write happy all the time, write exactly how you feel (: Writing is good for the soul, no matter what it's like. Danielle

DawningDaytripper

16 years ago

That was on FIRE, wicked

That was on FIRE, wicked storm Paw! Love the passion here, even the shocker. Excellent read!

Rett

16 years ago

Thanks Hon

Every once in a while, I let loose! Respectfully, Rett: “Anyone who sacrifices liberty for security deserves neither.” Benjamin Franklin

magics02

16 years ago

Rett

Very strong imagery going on here for sure and yes as Julie says it was a wicked storm.. Good job Mona

Rett

16 years ago

Thank Mona

Glad you liked it. I appreciate it. Respectfully, Rett: “Anyone who sacrifices liberty for security deserves neither.” Benjamin Franklin

Sinthya

15 years 12 months ago

im crying

This is so miving with the mood i have been in your work really expresses the way i feel.

Rett

15 years 11 months ago

Sinthia, thank you

To know that something you have written moves someone is great praise indeed. My sincere thanks. Respectfully, Rett: “Anyone who sacrifices liberty for security deserves neither.” Benjamin Franklin

judyanne

15 years 12 months ago

this is very powerful

especially - 'lashing like a metal studded whip at the unprotected back of a child,,... burning itself out of existence leaving nothing but ashes' seems to me there is more to this write than a simple weather disturbance. thought provoking rett love judy http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html

Rett

15 years 11 months ago

Thank you Judy

I appreciate it. Respectfully, Rett: “Anyone who sacrifices liberty for security deserves neither.” Benjamin Franklin

weirdelf

15 years 11 months ago

love it except the first line,

emotions of anger? come on, you can find something stronger than that Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible,

Rett

15 years 11 months ago

Thanks jess

Made a change Respectfully, Rett: “Anyone who sacrifices liberty for security deserves neither.” Benjamin Franklin

Race_9togo

15 years 11 months ago

Hey Rett

Someone at Neopoet once said to me that its astonishing, to find their own emotional state so exactly described by the poetry of someone else, half a world away. This little piece of yours is exactly that to me right now. I despise the subject. I love the poem. Most excellent. Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race

Rett

15 years 11 months ago

Thank you Jim

It always amazes me when it happens to me also. I'll run across one and am going Holy macadamia nuts, that's how I feel right now! I appreciate it sir and hope you get to feeling better. *G* Respectfully, Rett: “Anyone who sacrifices liberty for security deserves neither.” Benjamin Franklin