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HELLO ???,,,,,,,silence

Looking up in starry skies
  I wonder where you are ,you guys?
  surely somewhere else in space
  another world has got the grace

Of having life also been blessed
  and with life, why not life thinking ?
  perhaps to find you is a test
  we're searching now with eyes unblinking

Do you ignore beseeching cries
  because our ethos you despise?
  or are our cries just way too soft
  to make it to your aerie's loft

For your reply we always listen
  with arrays of steel that glisten
  in sun's shine around the world
  beneath so many flags unfurled

We listen for just one small phrase
  to end our solitary days
  are we so uninteresting
  we don't deserve reply from questing?
 


Even aloof condescension
  preferred to this quiet and tension
  do you view us as low as worms
  too primative and full of germs?

Any means (vid, lazer, phone)
  to let us know we're not alone
  give us reason to keep spending
  treasure on a search unending

Or did God create just one frail race
  with which to converse in all of space?.......hello?
— scribbler, May 23, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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Critiques

Breakinglogic

Breakinglogic

16 years ago

Hey there scribbler

Excellent! My favorite write I've read in a while :) How very fun it was to read, I dont want to say catchy, that makes it sound tacky, but it read so well, I couldn't stop from reading it a few times :) It was tied so neatly together beginning to end. Peace and cheers, logic
M

magics02

16 years ago

Love it and we are here scribe

And what a fantastic piece you have put together, better and better you are getting and I love it. Mona xoxoox TIME well spent is TIME well lived
S

scribbler

16 years ago

hello

It's friends at Neopoet like you who keep me writing.Thank you.....scribbler
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Scribbler

this is like a letter to god ... I loved it ... well written I cannot see anything to crit love and hugs JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
xena465

xena465

16 years ago

Fabulous Stan

You have such great talent for capturing our imagination…well done. Just a couple of typos... I wonder where you {are,you} guys? …[needs a space] perhaps finding {you’s} a test …[you is] Rosina xena465
yenti

yenti

16 years ago

Hi Scribbler

Cannot find any problems with this work, I had a look as you said that you mostly wrote in the classic form and to keep the lines a little shorter, well written and easy to read and a learning urve for others. Rosina pinpointed the typos, anyway the second one of you's as she said is incorrect and not in the great book yet. But "yous" is and the other is "youse" these are both slang but as they are the plural of "you" where more than one person is needed in this piece they would also not be correct just for info only lol, take care out there, Yours Ian.T
S

scribbler

16 years ago

Hello

I'll correct but don't hold breath waiting for this southerner to use"youse"ha!ha!P.S. main reason I prefer shorter lines is it makes it easier for people like me to maintain chain of thought.Thanks...scribbler