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Monsters In My Closet...

There are monsters in my closet. I can feel them watching me when I turn off the lights. I pull the covers up over my head and lay very still in the hopes that they might grow bored with me. I can hear them breathing, some with a low, deep raspy sound; others with a faint, high pitched wheeze that causes my blood to run cold. I can hear them whisper to each other, in hushed, guttural voices...more like animal grunts and growls than real words.

Every so often, one of these monsters will leave my closet; sometimes I can hear it coming. I hear its claws scraping the floor, a shuffle-type walk as it creeps across my bedroom. Sometimes, I am resting peacefully, unaware of the approaching creature.  And suddenly, I feel its cold, dank breath on my cheek. I clench my teeth, and keep my eyes firmly closed. Under my warm blanket, my body trembles with fear. I am paralyzed, afraid to move, afraid to breathe, afraid to see this nameless demon that haunts me. It feeds off my fear...consumes it... like a fire consumes dry tinder. I am its fuel.

I want to scream out, yell for help, but the words stay locked in my chest. I know that no one else can see my monsters. They can not fathom where these beasts come from; they are MINE. No one can kill them but me.

Sometimes, if I become very still and concentrate on what the monster is...if I actually open my eyes, and look, I can see it, this creature that crouches over me, that laughs at my cowardice. And when I REALLY see it, not just at a glance, but a REAL, DEEP look, I can see its true nature. I can name this beast. I don't have to say the name out loud, I need but think its name, and it flees from me and my knowledge. It retreats to my closet, licks its wounds, and lurks. And when it comes again -- yes it will come again -- it is weaker, it holds less terror, and I need but name it again, and it retreats. Then one day, it comes no more.


— Tah, May 23, 2010

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raj

16 years ago

Tah..

your write did create the mystique and kept me engrossed heightening the mystery ....you have dealt with the Monster in the mindspace very well...creating good imagery as well... warmly...raj (sublime_ocean)...
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Rhiannon

16 years ago

good.

great. kinnda like a prose "Theirs is not to reason why. Theirs is but to do or die." - Charge of the Light Brigade
xena465

xena465

16 years ago

WoW this is great Tah

I remember those monsters in my closet, they may still be there, but like you, I've banished them and they come no more. Just one thing I'd like to say, this is more like a short story, than a poem, but it's still a wonderful write. You have a great talent for creating images and transforming them on to the reader…great stuff Tah. Rosina xena465
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magics02

16 years ago

Tah

For a first right you sure did come out of the closest LOL I will just say I sure hope you didnt read this story to the kids when they were young. After Halloween when my son was young he seen somethings that frightened him for years on end, the grim reaper with the fire and all, He would always tell me they were in his closet and I would have to open the door to show him they are not in here that was just a costume. Try convincing a 6 year old that one. Yhis reminded of those times. On a lighter note I think we all have some monsters in our closet to an extent. It is when we release them to the wild that they no longer live in the same place as we do. Great first write, and kept me reading. Good job Mona TIME well spent is TIME well lived
Breakinglogic

Breakinglogic

16 years ago

Dear Tah,

You wrote a good story here, it is apparent you can capture one's attention :) And your talent with the written word is quite evident. I hope to see some poems from you, I'd love to help you grow, Im sure with all the helpful poets here, your progress will quickly show. peace and cheers, logic