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THE RAZOR'S EDGE--updated

THE RAZOR’S EDGE

 

I walk day to day
On razor’s edge
Careful not to fall
In fear of death’s intrusion
Mourning faith lost
And
God’s own passing
Scarred by Mind’s illusions
The silence of the dead 
Voices never heard again

I seek no clarity
For there is none
I’ve given up  my soul
To reason’s betrayal
In heart’s innocence
And
Walk on razor’s edge
In fear of Life’s intrusions
And Time's end...

 

— Geremia, Apr 15, 2010

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Teapots Tempest

16 years 1 month ago

Good form

"Scarred by Mind’s illusions" This is a good line. I enjoyed this poem and the pacing. The only thing I think is that the phrase "on razor's edge" is a bit trite. Perhaps there is a new way to say it?
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Joe

you got me speechless again love and biggest hugs your Jayne-Chloe x x x (http://www.neopoet.com/forum/36627-meet-n-greet-live-chat-thurs-apr-15th-9-11-pm-ny-est-host-poewriter58-welcome-new-member#comment-175177) ... Be there ~!~!~!
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lyz

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Joe

There is a fine line day to day and in this poem you have expressed your feelings well. You are a wonderful poet. Your deep words give food for thought and who best to instill them. The sadness expelled from your heart makes me appreciate my life and all its sour spots, but Joe, never give in or up. Love from down under. XX
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 1 month ago

Any moment to be divided yet again

Ann of Norway Wow this is wonderful Longobardolino. Joe you have saturated the pros and cons into an expression containing all, all that for you has meaning, yet there we are left on the edge of the razor, any moment to be divided yet again in unanswerable quandaries, this is written by a sharp clear-minded poet, well done you sage. Love Annuccia