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Seren

Mar 16, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Judas Kiss

everything you've said
whispers round to me
   here now I sit
    this warning is free
dead are my dreams
in your pretense of care
sweeping the misery
    as you reek of despair
A fair weather friend
in the mirror narcissus
your lies pave roads
   a consummate actress
I have begun to believe
ricin flows in your veins
everything you touch
   weeps of black stains
all poison you leach
flows right back to me
and as I found out
   I raged disbelief
a roaring rant
told them they lied
here as I weep
   the truth will not die
to my face you smile
as fangs stroke my hair
coaxing and pleading
   pretension webs there
a black widow spider
masked in mortal garb
the spear of your words
   broke my skin like a barb
through the weather of life
in the course of the rain
I have measured my life
   in the blood of the pain
A beaker of misery
I add to the pot
from friend to foe
   this cant be forgot
I've come to tell you
you've been mistaken
for my spirit breathes
   and is not forsaken
see I maybe down
but honey not out
you watch your back
   when I come I wont shout
as the Chinese whispers
you've spread about me
in this river of hate
   my agony is freed
revenge is served cold
is something I've heard
but the blood of a mongol
   pumps the heart of this bird
so watch through the night
keep your ear to the dark
that scratch in the wall
   carries more than a bark
from wretch to the wrath
I have now become
you killed all the light
    in the heart of my sun

— Seren, Mar 16, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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C

CyberSpace

16 years 2 months ago

love it when you get feisty

love it when you get feisty ;) hugs smile for a kiss ? love hubby xoxoxoxoxoxox

16 years 2 months ago

Cheeky bastard lol ill smile

Cheeky bastard lol ill smile alright :) love you wifey x x x

WW

Will Wright

16 years 2 months ago

Love has no fury . . .

As a woman who's completely PO'd. Whoever this is directed at is now living a horror movie. Yikes!

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Will

PO is a mild term lol and the person who this was for may never read it but if she did she would only see the mirror of herself ... :) thanks for the comment she'd only living a horror movie she made by her own hand I would say , reap what you sow lol ;) love Jayne-Chloe

16 years 2 months ago

goodness JC

i'll try to remember to keep on your good side. xxx yes, we all have discovered a 'fair weather friend' at some time in our lives i think. i've certainly known a few - they're usually very insecure people, who need to boost their own egos by bringing down another. lol judd xxx

16 years 2 months ago

Dearest Judd

I am one of the most placid people you could meet but hurt me or mine, well surfice to say the animal in me turns lol I have known my share of fair weather friends but I have found the closer the friend the deeper the hurt ... and this was just my way of venting ... thanks for the comment it is appreciated love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x

16 years 2 months ago

Oh. Oh. When Jayne-Chloe

Oh. Oh. When Jayne-Chloe starts rhyming... you best get out of her way. We need to talk. Abolutelyfuckingawesomerant. Somehow, I almost have to thank the fn bitch. ~A "To love another person is to see the face of God." Les Miserables

16 years 2 months ago

Dearest Mum

I went to sleep last night, slept like a baby this has been boiling up for a few days and then yesterday I wrote it out ... and this was written in one sitting only edit I did was to shape it ... Abolutelyfuckingawesomerant will do me lol thanks love you mum (((hugs))) Jayne-Chloe x x x

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Jayne-Chloe

I see you have gotten quickly back to yourself. I LOVE the way the piece flows and the rhyming is superb. Is this something you have penned from real life or does it come from out your imagination? It is great! Love, Cat

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Cat

Thanks for the comment it was one that was bursting to be written and this is penned from real life it dont come any realer than this I am so glad you liked it Love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe

yenti

16 years 2 months ago

Young Lady

To say about what Cat has asked this seems to be an imaginative reality, A great piece as usual may make me write one or two but I am in my lazy mode I think we should do away with stars as they must make at least a Galaxy the ones you have ben given over the past year, I check my "E" Mails and there is Neopoet mail Seren Seren and yet more Seren, it is lovely to see you there but one must answer ones Messages some time Eh! LOL. Great to read and not so long next time I need to breathe, Yours Ian.T

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Ian

WI would hate to disappoint you but this ones a real poison pen letter(as someone here called it) was just me venting and trying to make sense of something that didnt make any sense I have found since I started writing that when things are bothering me ... I write it out ... and this was cathartic I feeeeeel much better now love and big hugs to you both Jayne-Chloe Btw I have an appointment next week with the Librarian will be discussing the 'book' smiles will email after I have our meeting

yenti

16 years 2 months ago

Jayne

Lol you can rant and rave as much as you like if it turns out this way, I must get mad at something one day and spit some snakes, but they gave me a spiritual frontal labotamy when I was 6 that has held all my life where I found that loosing my temper was pointless as it makes you appear strong when the reverse is the case. I know Gentle people that walk the Earth are usually picked on that's probably why I took up playing field Hockey at least 3 times a week no-one would argue with me when I had a stick in my hand. I have put in my messages to you about the book and will leave it to your way to sort out something as I knoe that you where given that task for that reason, many thanks for doing the work out there. The poem above was quite good Eh!, Love to you all and happy Neo aniversary, Yours, Ian & Anne xx

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Ian

I have been slack with emails lately one I have been tired and 2 my emails being an arse still keeps locking itself up and its no easy process to unlock it takes half an hour it everytime it does it lol ... sometimes its good to get mad lets out all that bad energy that we humans are prone to bottle up ... I played Hockey as a teenager lol I loved the fast pace of the game and that fact we got long stick to throw round thank you I forgot it was my anniversary till you mentioned it too much else going on in life and it slipped my mind so thank you for the reminder ((hugs)) the book will be in safe hands and the suggestions you made well I am going with your sisters name as the dedication you take care and ill email in the next couple of days love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x you have been one of my longest friends here you know the second person I think I ever spoke to lol

16 years 2 months ago

Yowks you've done it yet again Jayne.

Ann of Norway You have written it, we take its length and wind it round and round to make a crown of thorns, just me getting carried away with its potency and you did mention Judas!!! Yours with love from your friend Ann in awe of you Jayne yet again.

16 years 2 months ago

Dearest Ann

I would hug you right now if I could lol if you joined the two ends of this poem it would make a crown of thorns ;) darlin you have a keen eye biggest smiles I was wondering if anyone would notice the format and YOU did :D:D:D dear friend big hugs and a lota love Jayne-Chloe x x x x

16 years 2 months ago

wow

took me a good fifteen lines to realize you were rhyming. i forget to even look for it anymore. surprising and incredibly fun. hate to be that person. t_f

16 years 2 months ago

Dear T-Fyour comment just

Dear T-F your comment just made my day to write rhyming poetry and good rhyming poetry in my humble opinion if you dont notice the rhyme its bloody good :) big smiles and thanks love Jayne-Chloe x x x

Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

16 years 2 months ago

HOLY CRAP!!!! This was

HOLY CRAP!!!! This was amazing. I love your angry poems, Jayne, they just stir up that angry sorceress in me. Though I really should stay away from being angry these days LOL I ceased to notice the rhyming too, which is normally something I notice right away, but I think the emotion of it took over and yes, an absolutelyfuckingawesomerant it sure is LOL Peace and hugs!!!

16 years 2 months ago

Dearest Girl

Not sure if I am allowed to say your name here or not yet so the girl is in no way derogatory (hugs) in writing I believe anger is calmed for me when I write it out when I am finished I always feel better ... glad you liked this one darlin it flowed and brought a life of its own ... only thing I edited was that first stanza and maybe one other I am considering but this piece is near to done love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x

Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

16 years 2 months ago

Hehehe calling me Morgana

Hehehe calling me Morgana does fine here. :) (hugs) hope you're well and good to see you back here!! Missed ya lots. I would say I agree with you, it's pretty much done. I love it. Peace

16 years 2 months ago

Morgana the sorceress you

Morgana the sorceress you are (hugs) I am going ok darlin best as I can with everything ... missed you lots having trouble with the chatroom everytime I log in it boots me argh ! its pretty much done as is the friendship thats spoken about ive had 43 text messages begging for forgiveness in the last few days not one has been answered some hurts go too deep love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x

Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

16 years 2 months ago

Totally hear ya there,

Totally hear ya there, Jayne. Sometimes it's better to just walk away than it is to stay somewhere that causes unhappiness...I'm a great example as we have all found lol. I've lost a few friends to their own stupidity. Still have one from high school who tries to add me on Facebook (well before I changed my name on there) and who tries to contact me through mutual friends. I have nothing to do with her. You're right. Some hurts go too deep and they don't seem to realize it nor will they ever change. Besides...we at Neo are so much cooler. LOL Peace and love ((hugs))

16 years 2 months ago

I am one of those people

I am one of those people that once they turn away ... I can never turn back unless there is some extenuating circumstances at the end of it all I am not heartless but sometimes that hurt digs way too deep and for self preservation I have to stay away from it ... life was never meant to be easy and they say its what you make of it ... but sometimes others can make life hard the first step to healing is taking away their power and by having no contact I have done that Huni you will meet people through life who have their own agenda ... and at the end of it all I find that Karma usually bites their arse ... the universal truth of suffering what you give out you get back times by two I am lucky to have wonderful friends and family sometimes a falling out happens you just have to move on and get on with life as I am love you morgana witch (hugs) Jayne-Chloe I was thinking about you after I saw your reply to the blog if you ever want to chat PM me and I will sign in on MSN whenever I can

Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

16 years 2 months ago

Always appreciated, Jayne,

Always appreciated, Jayne, life has a funny way of telling you when the time is right for certain things eh? It's kinda crazy. Love ya lots. Peace

16 years 2 months ago

Huni life has a way of

Huni life has a way of speaking to us and sometimes we get too involved to notice ... (hugs) I know the difficult thing you face and I am thinking of you and sending you strength love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x

16 years 2 months ago

I'm sure...

that if she read this, she would be looking over her shoulder, and wondering if she should run for the hills. I felt the fury of somone who feels betrayed, like you have been pushed from behind, in front of a bus. And it rhymed! LOL ~ love and hugs, Gee

16 years 2 months ago

If she read this Gee I dont

If she read this Gee I dont know that it would faze her lol but I needed to vent and we both know how good it feels to get it off ya chest ... assholes happen I try to ignore them if they dont exsist they cant hurt lol ;) and yup the betrayal was very personal and uncalled for I have never said a bad word about her till that poem and her betrayal made me look at our friendship with a whole different set of eyes makes me sad still but I am better without that sort of person in my life lol rhymer I still love my rhymers I am just trying to get my blank verse to the same level as my rhyming poetry love and higgliest bug Jayne-Chloe x x x x

P

pamela

16 years 2 months ago

not your loss

Dear S., I love this write. Your anger rings true. I hate it for you that someone betrayed you in this way. I know it sounds cliche, but truly its not your loss and even though it may not seem like it now (or maybe it does) with a friend like that you don't need any enemies. P.

16 years 2 months ago

Dear P

Its always the people you wont expect that are the ones that let you down sometimes the hurt can be soothed and move on but sometimes the hurt runs too deep and this is one of those times .. So glad you liked this one when I sat pen to page it just wouldnt stop coming so I just let it all out and when I sat back and read it ... I was thinking that aint bad for a first write lol I shaped it posted it and here it is when I am focused and angry, I say what I think lol love JayCee x x

xena465

16 years 2 months ago

I agree Jayne it’s always

I agree Jayne it's always the ones you least expect to hurt you and when they do, it's so much harder to get passed it, and that's what makes your poem so great. straight from the heart. Brilliant. Rosina xena465

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Rosina

Thank you so much your comment made me smile (hugs) Love Jayne-Chloe

CS

16 years 2 months ago

To my face you smile As

To my face you smile As fangs stroke my hair/ best two lines I've seen on this site, wonder why no one else sees it!? Sincerely, Brian

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Brian

Big smiles from down under ... thanks for that I rather liked those two lines myself and I dont know about the best two lines there are some damn good poets on this site thanks for the read and the comment ! love Jayne-Chloe

16 years 2 months ago

This is an escaped poem

Ah!!!! you've let it loose. I feel the full flood of the needed rant in this Jayne and the Mongolian warrior blood does indeed boil deep in your veins but then there were also many great poets there too that took their words to war. Not supprising that wonderful heritage of yours leads to strong work. Indeed awesome Seabhac

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Seabhac

this is only the first one I just posted a second one and there is one more, the second ones called thirty pieces of silver ... lol I am so placid most of the time its scary but when I go off I explode, and I wrote it out and feel much better glad you liked this one (hugs) love Jayne-Chloe

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Edwin

I am so glad you liked this one it was bubbling up for a little while and i decided to write it out ... and those fangs are meant to be depicting the black widow spider lol ... sorry my arachnid poem disturbed you but this one isn't meant to make you feel good ... the second one to this is called thirty pieces of silver and tonight I am posting the last one which changes tone completely thanks for taking such a thorough look at my poem I appreciate it when people read through it as well of it love and hugs JayCee x

M

16 years 2 months ago

Seren

Did you feel this one and feel better when it was over. A sure powerful choice of words and feelings in this one. Great job. I could almost see me writing something along these lines of my old boss. LOL I just wanted to tweak Magic's style for you. this cant be forgot (can't) I’ve come to tell you you’ve been mistaken for my spirit breathes and is not forsaken see I maybe down (may be) but honey not out you watch your back when I come I wont shout (won't) as the Chinese whispers you’ve spread about me in this river of hate my agony is freed revenge is served cold is something Ive heard (I've) Of course they are little tweaks delivered on a cookie as it is your poem to do what you wish. Hope your feeling better and thinking about you hoping the production of your book is going good! Love, Mona xoxoxo Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short.

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Mona

I havent done the last edit on this some punctuation issues I will fix them in a few days ... the only one I wont change is Maybe ... maybe I want as one word thanks for the review and yes I feel much better now just got to finish the last one the first was judas kiss the second thirty pieces of silver and the last youll have to wait till tonight for lol love JAyCee

M

16 years 2 months ago

Seren

Back again and tell me what a Chinese whisper is by the way. Love, Mona Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short.

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Mona

This is a link explaining Chinese whispers ... ;) http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Chinese_whispers love JayCee

L

lyz

16 years 2 months ago

Another Bitch

Well written this one and what have I missed. How are you now. I will have to catch up on your next tomorrow, If I have time. You take care and I will catch up later. Love Lyz. XX

16 years 2 months ago

Dearest Lyz

Oh you missed a bit but its ok lol ... I am fine got it out of my system now ;) sometimes the hurt goes to deep and you dont know who you can trust anymore ... but thats life ... I live I learn I cut the fat and keep the meat :) Love to you all BTW I forgot to ask, Jade didnt tell me if the babyshower was the 23rd of this month or next could you PM me when you get time love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe

P

16 years 2 months ago

Just Brilliant!

My gosh!...this is dark. So much imagery that has an edge...veiled threats...delicious flow. This is so good. Would love to hear this performed with malice dripping off the tongue...women do this so well, don't we?...hahhahhahahah Ells x

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Ells

This one is dark but sometimes I find it more more cathartic to get it out on the page lol ... I believe if I do another spoken word poem, this might be the one lol when I wrote this one i sat and wrote the whole thing in about twenty minutes did one edit and posted I was pretty pissed off at the time lol we do, do this so well don't we lol ;) love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x

16 years 2 months ago

Any emotion or experience

J.B. Longo-Geremia can be the source of sublime creativity. We DO think alike, my Jayne. Are you sure you are not Italian-Gypsy? :) I have felt the "Judas Kiss" many times: Written 2 years ago: CIRCE Eyes that fill with tears Of tenderness. A smile that melts The hardest heart. A gentle touch that Comforts and consoles. A vipers tongue that Stuns the soul. KEEP WELL, MY JAYNE Love to you and yours froom Joe

16 years 2 months ago

Dearest Joe ~!

So good to see you hun was thinking about you, hope your doing a little better (hugs) on my fathers side no italian but on my mothers I am french mongolian lol ... and who knows what else but I have a deep abiding love for anything italian as anyone would tell you, I always wanted to go to italy the atmosphere and the art ... sigh ... I think I could live there lol we do think alike dear man lol I loved your poem thanks so much for sharing that with me,to be honest I thought twice about putting this one on but thought ... its honest lol nothing more to be said so good to see you again hun (hugs) dont stay away from us too long love and big hugs your Jayne-Chloe x x

16 years 2 months ago

My darling daughter, this is

My darling daughter, this is when the mom steps aside and knows that the space she leaves is more than filled. 5 out of 10 spots for spotlight are *yours*. I think you have broken all records. CONGRADULATIONS. You are loved. ~Mummy Words must be used like stepping stones: lightly and with nimbleness, because if you step on them too heavily, you incur the danger of falling into the intellectual mire of logic and reason. - Balsekar

16 years 2 months ago

There are no words that

There are no words that could fill the space that would be left ... the poet residing deep in your being has brushed against the black poppies and moved the garden of Eden to her heart ... ever flourishing ... you inspire me to be a better person and poet I didnt even realise till you told me (((hugs))) you are loved more than you could ever know Love you Mumma Jayne-Chloe x x x

16 years 2 months ago

Tell you what, Jayne,

Whoever this Bitch is, she or he does have one thing going for their sorry ass... ...they made you write a rant like THIS. LMAO Most excellent, lovely Oz woman, most excellent. Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Jim

PMSL ~! after a pretty shitty week you just made me crack up both you and Anna said something similar hey cant be all bad if she produces art though unknowingly lol thank you for your kind words and the smile that came with them love and hugs Jayne-Chloe

M

16 years 2 months ago

Nothing But Blue Skies

Wait is this poem G -rated>??? Heavy stuff, scared me. really liked this one. not cliche, though remnants of an aftermath, something about a wallet??? sorry for teasing. loved it John

16 years 2 months ago

Dear John

pmsl another laugh ?? hahaha that wallet is long gone this is something totally different and I am over it now ... the write helped ease the hurt ;) .. and you can tease me anytime hun lol glad you liked it love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe P.S so good to see you baaaaaaaack :D

M

16 years 2 months ago

U Sound Angry

This sounds really real, like you meant it. I wouldn't wanna get on your bad side!

16 years 2 months ago

Michael it was real and to

Michael it was real and to be honest the person and I have made a truce ... we will never be friends like we were but I am a softy at heart and I could only ignore pleas for forgiveness so long .. shes read this and was quite shocked but thats ok she understands now how hurt I was ... LOL my bad side lasts about five minutes I am quick to anger and quick to cool down and I never hold a grudge as some people are wont too lifes much too short love Jayne-Chloe

LD

leonard daranjo

16 years 2 months ago

A TRUE DEPCTION OF THE JUDAS KISS

Hi Jane, Lovely to read you again. I absolutely lapped this up. The rhythm, laced with the most haunting imagery, is awesome. What really sets this piece of is the way you concluded it. Your bitterness, your senstivity and your cynicism comes through starkly. Love always ... Leonard

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Leonard

I sometimes look back at these writes and feel a kind of cringing inside but not with this one ... I think this is one of my best Rants ... It was like opening a vein and bleeding onto the page ... so glad you enjoyed this one its one of the few rhymers ive writen lately ... blank verse has become my forte these days and i am enjoying the learning curve of change soooo good to have you back I missed reading you love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe