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"Comfort in Rain"

The rain is such a sudden comfort to me,

For it's the tears of pain hidden in my dreams

 

I hide from the water that falls from my eyes,

Given myself a smile, a cheap disguise.

 

Fall

Pour

Fast

Hard

 

I

just

want

to feel…

 

The rain, rain drenches me as I stand alone

Enticing, rich, the comfort of feeling the cold.

 

But warmth, warmth comes an rain nurtures my soul.

The tears are built up inside, the burden takes a toll

 

I

allow

one 

single tear…

 

And sure enough the sun follows the shower

She dry's the rain and instills power.

 

Rain becomes a reminder of the pain

She is the reminder that beauty is left to gain.

 

Rain comes and cries for my soul, my song of life

The tears are no longer a stranger to me, I sit

 

I am not afraid to cry…


— EyeZ street geist, Feb 23, 2010

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Region, Country: California, USA

Favorite Poets: Sylvia Plath, Dickinson, Shakespeare, Rudyard Kippling, and others

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magics02

16 years 3 months ago

Wow

Really nice here my friend, just a couple things need some tweaking. warmth comes an rain (should it be warmth comes and rains) or and the rain? maybe (instills the power) You do not need tho change that is only my suggestion. And of course the last line says this I love.. I am not afraid to cry. Very good here and when are you going to do it as a spoken word my friend. p.s. and I hope you are now out of the rains love, magics02 "Determination Brings Success"
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EyeZ street geist

16 years 3 months ago

:D

That is so funny because when I re-read it after I posted it I saw the "Instills `the` power" I meant to add "the". Thank you for the feedback and the positive virtual vibe ;) Hope all is well.<3Eyez
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magics02

16 years 3 months ago

you can go in

and edit it to add or subtract as you seem fit. I do alot with my poems like that since I may read and re-read and find something amiss or wrong. I do the tweak tweak tweak until it squeaks. Thanks my dear friend eyez!! love, magics02 "Determination Brings Success"