Simply

Simply

I didn’t want to hurt you
I never meant for you to grieve
I'm sorry that I made you cry
It wasn’t you I had to leaveI had no time to say good bye
My pain severe and so, so real
I simply didn’t have a choice
So this end, I had to steal

Please understand that scary screams
Haunted me each day and night
Tormented me through all my dreams
Poisoning my strength to fight

Just remember that I love you
And forever I will be
Standing right beside you
Forgive me, my destiny

So cherish all the good times
Hold your breath and hear my voice
“I never wanted to leave you…
I simply didn’t have a choice”

— tbeaudet, Feb 16, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Boston, USA

Favorite Poets: Patti Smith, Lucinda Williams, John Prine, Bruce Springsteen, Jim Carroll, Bob Dylan, Tom Waites

Critiques

IKnowNoBox

16 years 3 months ago

Greetings

my condolences, you once again exercise berevment in rhymed verse. Bringing something to others that may be bottling such concepts. Remarkably consistent. In ink, David

tbeaudet

16 years 3 months ago

Thanks for reading David

I haven't been around in quite some time... good to see some familiar faces. Tom

Nordic cloud

16 years 3 months ago

So well written this suicide note.

Ann of Norway This was good the rhyme and rhythm good too and the from of the whole I liked; in fact I liked it from all directions, and you have obviously experienced the sensation of the meaning of this, putting yourself in another's place so very well that its reality shines through it words. Well done Tom with my love Ann.

tbeaudet

16 years 3 months ago

Thank you Ann

It must be a very painful place indeed, and I had to imagine as I tried to console. Thank you for reading and commenting. Tom

weirdelf

16 years 3 months ago

welcome back mate

I'm sorry that such grievous circumstance moved your hand to the pen, but glad it did so. Now it's hard to give crit on a work of such deep emotive base, but that's what you're here for, right? the line So this end, I had to steal is an inversion for rhyme that's ok in song, but feels clumsy in verse. also the rhymes And forever I will be Forgive me, my destiny place an un-natural stress on the end of destiny. With a bit of polishing this could be more powerful still. Cheers, Jess, reprehensibly irrepressible

tbeaudet

16 years 3 months ago

Thanks Jess

Hopefully I'll be sticking around for awhile this time. Your critque is always welcome, and I value your opinion no matter what I say! I wrote this one quickly and haven't actually gone through to polish it up as I usually do before I post. "So this end, I had to steal" and "forgive me, my destiny" were actually lines I thought of as being rather clever, and all my 'poems' are written for those songs in my head. I really am not a poet, as you know... rather, I write lyrics that rhyme. I would love for you to take this and edit it as you see fit, and show me where you would make changes. Feel free to change as much as you like, I honestly would love to see how differently your 'brush stroke' would be. Thanks again for commenting.. Good to hear from you, hope all is well and I look forward to seeing your version.. (only if you have the time, if not I understand). Take care, Jess.