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Seren
Seren
Feb 16, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Mantles of Wonder

I laid down my pen
and got on my knees
not to pray for any great miracle
but in remembrance
of the mantle of wonder ...
and the O so beautiful world
that had finally draped around my shoulders,
like the seamless gown of Christ
its shelter and natures redemption, 
embraces all

It goes on as the trees forever reach
and flowers gape their spring smiles
again and again, her seasons like
whims,
with the scamper of possums
inscribing the testaments of earth
their pawed initials, sincerely ours
leaving a sea of scrolls landmark-ed
eternally

as the whiteness of waves filigree our shores
and the rugged mountain ranges their peaks
shine like crowns

oh this beautiful world ...
shes the daughter mother,sister
within those arms she has born us all

 


— Seren, Feb 16, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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judyanne

judyanne

16 years 3 months ago

Do you mean ‘within whose

Do you mean 'within whose arms has born us all'? You possibly mean 'bared'. but it changes the whole meaning of the poem for me. Beautiful writing Jayne-Chloe. Love it. Judy
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Judy

This is the second of three about the planet I wrote ... just stretching out of my comfort zone its all a about learning ... have done a small edit let me know what you think ... so glad you enjoyed it love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 3 months ago

Born or bared - doesn’t

Born or bared - doesn't matter Jayne-Chloe, it's beautiful both ways. i just meant that the context changes with each word. Love.
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Judy

Big Smile and hugs thank you ... I did reread it after your comment and thought born lol yep its better so thank you for that ... the joy of neopoet we all bounce off one another and come up with suggestions and better ideas ... I will be round reading tonight and see what else you got on the table for me ... emails are backing up I've gotta play catch up before I go away or ... yeah I wont go into that last time i was offline for two weeks my email went nuts lol love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 3 months ago

Oh "Mother of God" you excel, you are just wonderful Jayne.

Ann of Norway Jayne Chloe scribe of the holiness of this earth, so in touch with that ether that is the essence of our world. Mother, sister, friend and I am proud to call you the latter, but you embrace them all with love that is manifold and magnificent in what you here describe, wondrous world, wondrous imagination and wondrous poem, persuading us to glide to our knees to see the details of existence revealed as diamond replicas of man's wisdom. How do you do it when plagued by illness and surrounded with life so lively, I admire the extreme calm of mind you manage to conjure up within their shouts, and compose these poems so full, so multifarious, so magically mysterious but at the same moment real and in the now of our understanding. I do so admire your work and how you have managed to improve all the time, there are no no limits to your creativity, I love it all and say so here. I am clapping all the trees are clapping their leaves, even nature hears your poems dearest Jayne, just listen! So much love to you from Ann.
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dearest Ann

Your comment made my day ... I am going to miss you guys tonights my last poem for a week or two depends on how long I am away not sure when I will be back ... you take care of you and send my love to our dear Joe ... You just made me tear up ... I love this planet and from your comment that has shone through to you at least .. love and millions of hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dearest Cat

Glad it found an ear I hope your well I am going to be away for a week or two will try and catch up with you before I leave love and hugs Jayne-Chloe
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

Another great poem...

I understand what JudyAnne means about a little confused...bared...meaning unclothed. Rosina xena465
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Rosina

When I wrote bared ... it was with the thought that when we are born its naked and when we die we are stripped again of our earthy robes I guess you could say ... I have changed that line so as not to misconstrue that last line I liked the bared but dont want people taking it to a wrong meaning thanks for the read and the comment its much appreciated love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe
M

magics02

16 years 3 months ago

And that is how I read it

The earthly robe, wrapped at birth, wraps us in death. We come to this world with nothing, we leave with nothing, but memories and love for all who shared it with us. A tear does fall. Mona "Determination Brings Success"
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Thats it you got it ~!

Thats it you got it ~! totally what I meant huni ~! thanks for 'seeing' it love and hugs Jayne x x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Mona

You crept in while I wasnt looking ... I am so glad you liked this one its close to my heart and the second last before I go away ... thanks for the comment huni ... I am so happy you liked it ... love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Mona

I wish I didnt have to go away but i will pop in on my phone when time permits and comment when I can I am going to miss you all thanks so much hun I am going to miss reading you all big love and hugs Jayne-Chloe
SR

Stuart Reiss

16 years 3 months ago

Mother Earth.....she would be proud...

Love poems about Earth and the celestial... It says so much without the need to spell it out... The simple references, an old world feel Almost a little Shakespearian... Really nice Jayne I loved it Best regards Stu :-)
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Stuart

Thanks so much for the read and comment on this one I am trying a new road on my poetry journey not getting them just right but cant improve if I dont have a crack at it ... I am off to have a read and see what you have been up to love and hugs Jayne-Chloe
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dearest Joe

Just got round to answering a few messages and was so pleased to see your visit .. hope your doing better and things are ok for you huni ... (big hugs) and love Jayne-Chloe x x x x
arja

arja

16 years 3 months ago

…the wonders of

...the wonders of nature...and its power to heal our souls..wonderful read! takes me to a place where we find comfort,peace and SERENity...thank you for sharing... ;)
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Alone

Glad you enjoyed this thank you for your kind comment love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
M

Mariposa

16 years 3 months ago

well done as always

I am always impressed by your unique descriptions, never a cliche in your poems!
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Mariposa

Glad I could entertain with this one it was close to my heart thank you for your kind comment ... love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x x