Seren

Jan 15, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Steps Ahead

Stealing my sanity
you made it yours,
cruel hands raped my body
I turned into your whore

with steps from our bed
my back straightened up,
and voice lowered tone
so as not to disrupt

with a lateness of meals
came punishment harsh,
with a rake of a whip
stripping skin off my arse

The studs on the belt
made patterns so nice,
and sometimes at night
he’d throw at me thrice

His vengeance now mine
I say’th with pride,
as my feet hit the road
all love for him died

at each step I took
I designed evil schemes,
torture and bloodshed
bred with hate to demean

with racks I would stretch
some sense in his back,
nails through mean hands
so they cannot backtrack

and whips tipped with barbs
would scrap down a face,
till all skin was gone
and of him there’s no trace

but its only my imagination
I’ve let race ahead,
I cant torture a mind
if it’s body is dead

— Seren, Jan 15, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

CyberSpace

16 years 4 months ago

well what can i say but orsm

well what can i say but orsm use of words aaaaah mc'jayne you've done it again nice work love & kisses yoour hubby xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxox

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Thank you for being so

Thank you for being so restrained love you big time for it much love and big hugs wifey x x x x x

lyz

16 years 4 months ago

I was ready to set the dogs onto Snake, lol. What a witty, yes witty write. I enjoyed it twice, lol. And a message from Ian, get to bed and rest. Lol. That last stanza, lmfao. Good one dear girl, sorry Snake, lol. Love Lyz. XX

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Lyz

This ones about my marriage ... and I read Vix's poem yesterday and this one just poured out ... and I wasnt sure of it so o blogged it ... and then moved it to stream ... glad you enjoyed those last lines they are my favourite i have to do an edit on this one I posted it before I even did an edit ... love you huni (huggles) seeya next week !! Jayne-Chloe x x x

lyz

16 years 4 months ago

Hey there Aunty

Yeah, I know what it related to, but it still is sad, and I do love the ending, what a twist. Me, I action and worry about it later, lol. By the way,belated Happy Birthday to Jacob And Snake. You enjoy the night hun. Catch ya. Lyz. XX

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

the boys send their thanks

the boys send their thanks back .. I have a house full already there is half of Taree here at the moment and the boys just got here from Newcastle and now they have gone to the bottlo to get grog its going to be a big night ... lol love and mountains of hugs Jayne x x

lyz

16 years 4 months ago

Glad its you and not me. ha!

I am over hosting parties, too much on the pocket and I do not get paid enough as a hostess and maid, lol, or a damn cleaner. This might be what you need though, a bloody good PARTAY, lol. Enjoy. Love Lyz. XX

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Well for one night … I am

Well for one night ... I am packing my troubles in pandoras box where they belong and plan to have some fun with my son lol aint been drunk with him yet this should be interesting ...and hes got 80kilos on me keeps picking me up seems to think carrying his mother round is a blast lol wally he is love and hugs Jayne x x x

lyz

16 years 4 months ago

Sorry I did not reply sooner

I posted then was talking to my son, lol. He is taking us to the vineyards tomorrow for the wine and choc tasting, yum. So while you are recovering with Jacob, I will be beginning, lol. Let him pick you up, so long as he does not drop you, lol. He may have to carry you after tonight. have a blast hun, you deserve it. Love and birthday wishes. Lyz. XX

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

I am going to find a big ass

I am going to find a big ass tree and be like a old swaggie and go to sleep tomorrow lmao ... you have a great time at the vineyards, last time I went down there I went on a bus with about 40 other people, surfice to say it was a messy trip home to Taree lmao !!! love and hugs Jayne x x x x

lyz

16 years 4 months ago

Well

I know you never found sleep dear one, just a nice cool pool and a big ass tree. Lol. Good on ya. XX

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

How the heck did I miss this

How the heck did I miss this comment lol .... yeah I didnt get much sleep and then when i did wake u after my nap'? lol I ended up having to do most of everything before i came down here Bethany is my angel i don't know what I am going to do without her once she goes to Uni I am going to be lost not just loosing my daughter loosing my best mate .. to this day i ahve never had an arguement with her and I think thats a damn fine record lol :) love to jade and tell her I said soon as her and Bj find out once all the grandies find out I want to be next on the list lmao love to all I gotta go dish out this dinner lol its nearly 10pm and we havent eaten yet jayne-Chloe x x x x

Kailashana

16 years 4 months ago

Oh, the tortures Carlos & I

Oh, the tortures Carlos & I devised! So unique and witty. Like I imagined killing him with an icicle... the evidence would surely melt. And he thought he'd hit me with a loaf of frozen bread, and eat the evidence. And these are the ones we told each other. Hehehehe. I've been mulling over a poem for a few days.. on 10 secret murders of your "beloved" spouse. I like your second wind, Lady Jayne. You go girl! ~A p.s. I can't, its (in last para)

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Mum

It was you that made me decide to stop pissing around and start writing without fear ... this is my first no fear poem ... I will do an edit in the next couple of days and fix up can't thanks for the help and I am still smiling from your email :D love and millions of hugs Jayne x x x x

hugo la rosa

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Jayne:

Real or imagined, the content of this poem is awesome! In vain you would enter the "worse poem contest", for you won't win. No poem of yours is half done. All of them are winners. Thank you. Love&Hugs. Sincerely, Hugo

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Hugo

I havent done an edit of this one yet it needs a few tweaks but I am surprised at the reaction ... I have Vix to thank for it to be honest and its real a poem about my former life with my ex ... I am still so stoked your back yanno I missed your beautiful poetry ... love and mountains of hugs Jayne x x x

Ink Dragon

16 years 4 months ago

Jayne,

you know... I know... ((((((((((((hugs)))))))))))) Yours, ~Nina

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Nina

Its unfortunate that we do ,... but we do (((((((((((((((hugs)))))))))))))))) love and hugs Jayne x x x

adjei agyei-baah

16 years 4 months ago

She who feels it knows it

She who feels it knows it all.Impressive,I'm breathless,simply love the simplicity of your lines and forgetting of the powerful ending.I love it bad and hope others will love it too. Creative friend, Sinnbadd

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Sinbadd

*Big Smile* ... my son says I love it bad sll the time and you just made my day dear man thank you ... (hugs) love Jayne x x x

Daniel John

16 years 4 months ago

Amazing ending. Great

Amazing ending. Great write. - Daniel

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Daniel

Thanks for the read and the comment love Jayne x x

xena465

16 years 4 months ago

Loved Your poem

Hi Seren Your poem represents a lot of hurt, anger and humiliation, that we've all felt at least once in our lifetime, myself more than once. I too write a lot of poetry similar to the way you write, good feelings and bad. I'm waiting to become a new member, just subscribed half an hour ago, and I hope to read more of your poetry. Xena465

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Xena

First off welcome to the site !!... we all have our stories and in ways our stories mirror each other and thats what connects us in a kind humanity ... its when victims unite that change is forced ... I apprecaite your wonderful comment and i will be round to read you in a couple of hours i am very pushed for time today so ssorry for the short comments love and hugs Jayne x x

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

I had just joined Neopoet

I had just joined Neopoet when you submitted this poem. I had commented on this one and liked it very much Jayne. Rosina xena465

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Rosina so sorry for the late

Rosina so sorry for the late reply but Alex's drew my attention to yours thanks for the kind comment huni much appreciated love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe

Nordic cloud

16 years 4 months ago

Love, just love..............Ann

Jayne, the woman with the magic smile we love that smile. I can see an acrobatic puppet turning and falling, its limbs at odd angles, its head up and down flung about, as if it were not really the you mentioned, how devastating, how strongly hit, this poem depicts a frightening feeling of fear and we wish it were not so, we wish it were not so! We love you so, dearest Jayne, we go with you in your steps ahead, all of us, don't we? Yes. Love, just love..............Ann

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

I take you all with me on

I take you all with me on each step the first of which comes on monday ... and I love you all as much or maybe more ... it was you guys that got me through the last few months ... holding me up when i couldnt love you dear lady and send my love to Joe Jayne x x x

Geezer

16 years 4 months ago

Doesn't feel good?

Everyone should have a go at this the way you did. I don't think everyone could manage to do it like we do, but you are a part of the club. It doesn't matter who or what you are mad at. The work is the catharsis that we need. Kinda like taking a laxitive when you are bound up. Makes you feel so much better to get rid of that shit! LOL Just one little crit. The word imagination just doesn't seem to fit. All the rest of first lines are one and two syllable words, and this is five! How about using thoughts, or brain? ~ love and hugs, Gee

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dearest Gee

You know without all of you none of these poems would ever have been birthed it was you that gave me courage when i started loosing faith in myself ... and I did ... but I traveled forward and now .. btw I havent done a edit on this one and that line you mentioned is on the chopping block ... I just need to formulate a new one thinking on it now thank you so much for pointing it out to me love and millions of hugs my lil new yawker Jayne x x x x

Geezer

16 years 4 months ago

That's what...

friends are for. To support each other and understand. All of us have doubts about where we are and what we are doing at times. I could see right off that you were a friend worth having. I never let a friend go down the lonely road if I can help it. So glad that we all could be there for you. Makes my heart glad to see you being so brave. Lord knows it ain't easy, to put parts of you out there for the world to see. I have some of me just writhing around, and waiting for evacuation. I think Killer will do a number on it in the near future. How did the party go? Bet the Snake had loads of friends and fun. He seems like the kinda guy that would have lots of them. I don't have to tell him how lucky he is to have you. I'm sure he knows. Waitng for your edit, Billions of hugs, and lotta love, ~ Gee

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Gee

You know in some ways from my poetry I think you guys have a better idea of me than my 'real world' mates ... my illness is not a thing thats discussed much in my house, only because some of the members of the house find the subject too painful and hard so I dont push it and sometimes it is a lonely road on your own ... but I was blessed with all you guys for support and its been a blessing be sure of that ... I hope you can can letting that writhing beast out to play ... because I can say my friend it cathartic ... was for me every word every line bleeds some of pain out for me and thats been a boon the best part was making all the friends I have made and your my Neofamily The party was a little wild and wet lol they were throwing people in a pool we had set up for little ones and there was a few photos that i can never show on neopoet ... lmao we had a streaker!!!!, dont ask hes a mate of another member of Neopoet ;) .... thank god i was warned i missed the show and covered my eyes drunk and foolish hot and naked lmao god it was funny ... I havent laughed that much in ages it was a good night ... and yes Snake does have a lot of good friends and most of them were able to make it here last night ...Bosscombat/Matty drove up from newcastle and they went home after lunch today lol a little worse for wear ;) and Snakes out on the lounge asleep lol poor bugger was still drunk when he woke up this morning lol yeah it was a huge night ... I got to bed at seven this morning got an hour and a half sleep and then it got too hot so I got up and laid in the pool in the shade anyway you take care i have blathered on I am going to get in the pool and try and cool off its still in the thirties here was 41 earlier in the day thats over a 100 your temp ... love and biggest hugs Jayne x x x

Geezer

16 years 4 months ago

Party hearty mate...

I think I speak for all of us here, when I say that we love being your Neo-family. So glad that the party went well. Snake has to be a good man, I know you wouldn't love him if he weren't. You had enough abuse with the last one. So it stands to reason that he would have a lot of friends. Streaker huh? LOL! We had snow last night and a little today. I will trade you some for a little of that heat! I am terrible at converting from one system to the other, but I know when it is cold! Right now, it is only 2 dgs. above freezing. The snow will melt a little today, but the temp. will go back down and we are going to get a few flurries over the next couple of days, adding to the four or five inches we got last night. I know it doesn't seem like much to some of our other friends here on Neo. who live in Canada [the great white north] but it is enough that it is cold! I love summer, and can hardly wait for you guys to send it back to us. I don't care if the temps. are above 100! My wife might, because when it gets to around 75 she starts asking me to put the AC in the windows. I love to see you blather, and look forward to some more soon. Give Snake a few asprin, some rye toast, and some black tea. Oughta fix him up. Love and higgest bugs, Gee

Geremia

16 years 4 months ago

J.B. Longo-GeremiaChloe! I

J.B. Longo-Geremia Chloe! I hear your silent words. It is not yet twilight. Love from Joe

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Darlin Joe

I hear you hun ... it is not twilight ... not yet love and mountains of hugs your Jayne-Chloe x x x

seabhac

16 years 4 months ago

Wow Jayne

What this new year’s light has shed on the shadows of the darkness eh? Brave? This really is awesome. There is a deep control here of the verse a steel hand allowing enough and no more to escape. It is lovely to see you learning to let go... Rhythm was great but one line wobbled me bred with hate to demean This is a very powerful line and if you try it by removing the word 'with' ( it looses none of the meaning ) It reads better, flows better off the tongue Wonderful Jayne Seabhac

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dearest Liz

You are so right that line will work better without 'with' I will be doing an edit in a couple of days and I will fix that as well ... this one was writen and posted before i lost the courage(sans edit) ... and yes I am letting go I dont have time to learn so i am just letting it come out thanks for your wonderful comment made me smile thanks for that love and hugs Jayne x x x

ifoundaplace

16 years 4 months ago

Well..

This made me cry. I've had an experience like this. and you surely hirt anerve in me with this poem. I really like it. Good job. Dani (:

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Dani I am sorry you

Dear Dani I am sorry you have experienced this at your young age ... it makes me incredibley sad to be honest ... I am glad you liked it though hun love and hugs Jayne x x

ifoundaplace

16 years 4 months ago

I’ve actually never had

I've actually never had the courage to write about it, and now I think I wil.. Thanks Dani

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dani … I got the courage

Dani ... I got the courage from someone else here at neopoet to write this ... and now I ahve given it to you if we pass it on enough ... empowerment comes with truth much love I will be looking for your write Jayne x x

Morgana Tragic…

16 years 4 months ago

......

Seren, I don't know what to say. ((HUGS)) I'm with Nina. We know each other's stories and have shared...love the angry gruesomeness and the torturous feel to this. Peace

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Morgana

You dont need to say anything darlin ... we know our histories and that makes it ok ... I am so glad you liked this one and I appreciate you ... hope lifes treating you right in your new start love and mountains of hugs Jayne x x x

Heading South

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Jayne

I'm so sorry that you had to experience the abuse described here. This poem makes it clear that even when it is "over" the mental repercussions live on. A brilliant and unflinching write. Yours, Daniel

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Daniel

It is never over ... the nightmares lessen with time but the memories are forever ... I have found with each layer I strip off I am more empowered with the truth ... mum was right (thanks Mommy) ... I appreciate you taking the time ... btw I had a quick read of your newest earlier I will be round to see you soon loved it !! Love and hugs Jayne x x

Damo

16 years 4 months ago

Ohh, saucy and strong! I

Ohh, saucy and strong! I love this. The end is powerful and opens up a spectrum of possibilities... This is poetry. Love it!

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Damo

Thanks so much for your comment i really appreciate it ... and I actually love the ending myself ... take care I appreciate the comment and the visit will be round reading later on or tomorroe love and hugs Jayne x x x

Kailashana

16 years 4 months ago

Dear daughter, such a mixed

Dear daughter, such a mixed kettle of bones, this life is... we have all these feelings from quite tortured experiences in our lives. And we squeeze them out behind closed doors and closed hearts, fearful and silent. Then we wake up! Realize that it's poetry waiting to be written. And in so doing the torch of courage is passed on. Perhaps that's why women have been feared... our power when we take it back. And that's when we shine light, brightest of stars. Congratulations Jayne, and all the women here there and everywhere who have ever been hurt physically, emotionally, sexually by the men they loved (or didn't). We are legions. And thank you for our lovers who brought us back to life. Snake and the many many men on this site who love women who run with the wolves. love you more, Mommy.

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Mum

Your comment above all the comments ive received over the months ... has just made my night ... we are legions that wont 'ever' lay down for anyone ever again I appreciate you and I appreciate all my teachers here cause you all are ... I would never have improved in the manner I have without all of you and I dont just mean my writing ... in so many aspects of my life ... writing has been my salvation love and millions and trillions of hugs all my love Jayne x x x x

Lunegirl

16 years 4 months ago

Hey Janey Janey,I missed

Hey Janey Janey, I missed this till now. What i feel, is i've started a thing here, that wasn't intentional but is good. Domestic violence is still taboo with the feelings of shame carried on because woman feel they can't talk about it. Yet in doing that very thing it frees people to lift their own chains and i guess this has had a ripple affect. People going through this often are tomented for years after and their abusers reley on secrecy to get away with it. By writting about it and purging it, it becomes less shameful and painful in time. allowing other sufferers to do the same. If thisw subject was discussed more freely woith less shame then maybe not so many woman or men would go through it. Well done and im pleased you were inspired enough to work on such a power piece by my ramblings lol. I have said to other woman on here that have said they now feel the courage to write about their experiences through poetry dM that maybe we could do a project with the view for publication to raise awarness, the profits could go to organisations that work with DM families or whatever.... what do you think? i would love to do something really positive with our negative experiences and turn things around. good things can always come out of painful experences. LOVE vix xx

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Vix

I had writen about it before but not quite so direct ... I read your poem the other day and this one just spilt out ... I cannot thank you enough ... I think its a great idea to publish a book !!!and I could even take the idea one further let the profits from each authors country go to a main domestic violence group in that country ... that would really be changing the world(all over the world) ... its not a dream its a goal ... a book published by victims for victims ... I think we could cover a fair few countries I know a couple of others here at the site that have suffered good things come from bad experiences ...my life is testament to that ... love and biggest hugs Jaynie ;) x x x x

Lunegirl

16 years 4 months ago

I love that idea, different

I love that idea, different countries benefitting from an anthology of poems. I'll post a disscussion proposal on here? I really need something to get my teeth into, to distract from other things going on. this is close to my hear and so worthy. love to you vixy lol xxx

Ink Dragon

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Jayne, dear Vicki,

count me in. Yours, ~Nina

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dearest Nina

You were No.1 on my list ... I was hoping you would like the idea ... now we just have to bring vix's vision to fruition love and hugs Jayne x x x

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Vix

It also would be a welcome distraction for me hun and i know that if its for a good cause and we get enough poets together it can happen I dont know of anyone else thats done this but i will research and see what I can find out ... go for the discussion in forum I think it would be a great way to get others interest love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x

docmaverick

16 years 4 months ago

Tremendous....

...are the words that that fate mine eyes to see. So fortunate, my heart does leap in awe. I'm convinced that you, Jayne...are a master "wordsmith", and I am very fortunate to merely be in your "wake". I am humbled. "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Doc I stride side my side

Doc I stride side my side with my friends ... thanks for your wonderful comment it is apprecaited you could make a girl blush lol hugs and love Jayne x x

sunscreen

16 years 3 months ago

I can't believe it

I missed this piece! I was on that day, did not check, well I correct that mistake today. Your my hero for the day, and a quote I steal from you "fucking brilliant." =P good day to you Jayne. Hopefully you did not go through something like this.

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

fucking brilliant works for

fucking brilliant works for me Alex *s* ... unfortunately I did go through something similiar but I get my own back in words every now and then ... knowing its real is the first step to stopping this sort of abuse you have a grand day lovely love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x

sunscreen

16 years 3 months ago

Oh well that’s terrible I

Oh well that's terrible I should go ans smack him round a bit, see if he likes it. :P Idk bout grand day, but I'll try.