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A question not answered

You asked me why I Iove you?

 

I love you as,
the suns rays

caress this morning

so gently, 

that her tears are dew 


 

as black
consumes my spirit,

a skein of velvet

shot bursts

illumination 

my gift

 

and that,

without your swirl
I would have never shined

 

I’d have not discovered 

love as

the siren or mermaid

never would I have felt your breath

in my hair

 

The shy wallflower 

hiding like ‘wheres wally’

in a pot-plant

I was the closed 

speck of a mouth

that seldom moved

 

but you caught my eye 

held it in your hand

and refused to return my sight

till I saw myself as you did

 

ever special 

ever precious

I saw myself through your eyes

 

you ask why I love you?

— Seren, Dec 04, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

16 years 6 months ago

Seren

never special never precious until I saw myself through your eyes I like these lines, ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Barbara

This ones a little personal, but it was a whim and I wrote it a couple of days ago... thanks for the read and the comment ... and those words ... are real I was never anything until ... he showed me ... love and hugs Jayne x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Logic

thanks for the comment ... it is hard for anyone to write about anything personal but this is about poetry and real poetry is about real emotions ... not just the dark stuff ... and I love writing and reading both ... I go through phases with my writing and it tends to be a mood thing ... anyway thanks again you take care love and hugs Jayne x x
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 6 months ago

Lovely Jayne

Your words are truly in alignment with your giving heart. I really loved this one for these lines: never special never precious until I saw myself through your eyes and you ask why I love you? Has Snake read this? Love, Cat
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dearest Sis

Yes Snake as read this one , hope your feeling a bit better darlin will talk to you before monday ... love and hugs Jayne x x
deelilah

deelilah

16 years 6 months ago

Hi Jayne

This is lovely. "but you caught my eye 
 held it in your hand
 and refused to return my sight
 till I saw myself as you did" What an interesting concept. It would be quite an eye opener, would it not, to know how we are viewed by others? They say we have only a flat, one dimensional view of ourselves, like the one in the mirror. Only others see us, really, multi-dimensional. Yours, Deelilah
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Deelilah

I have always struggled with my self esteem so when someone made me see myself as worthy it changed my life ... thanks for your wonderful comment I really appreciate you having a read of this one ... love and hugs Jayne x x x
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 6 months ago

I gasp

This is the epitome of a love poem, so stunningly beautiful that I gasp. Love Ann.
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Ann

Thank you so much for you kind comment I wrote this in one sitting it just came out ... (hugz)love Jayne x x