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Geremia
Geremia
Nov 23, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

BURNING EMBERS

BURNING  EMBERS

 

OnceI was a shooting starElectricityFireEnergyBurning the skiesOf silver sparks and midnnight blueAs I passed by.A thousand timesI diedLeaving behindA thousand or moreOf who I was beforeA wake of death and resurrectionIn space and timeGrowing into someone newCrashing throughInfinityCreating and recreatingMeRushing  to vertigoTowardsDestinies unknown
AllOf my own making SoIt was thenA million light years agoNow I'm ill and growing oldFadingInto disillusionOblivionBetrayed by CreationEmbers burning still ... 

 

— Geremia, Nov 23, 2009

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lyz

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Longo

You are on a roll. Great poem and yes you have created, words that are a pleasure to read. Will read your forums at a later date. Loved reading this. Love Lyz. XX
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 6 months ago

Indeed Longo, from stardust

Indeed Longo, from stardust to stardust.. but oh, my....inbetween that--what worlds we create!!! love, Anna "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 6 months ago

far flung into the blaze of space's wonders

This "Creation," is each on of us who contemplate the skies and doing so embrace the whole of existence in our grasp. And yet not, as we do not know its depth, but here 'tis you who are the stars, far flung into the blaze of space's wonders their beginnings and their ends, their collisions and their deaths, down into their own created black holes. Ephemeral. I'll be back Annuccia
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orgami

16 years 6 months ago

Loved this molten dazzler my freind

am jumping through poems and U tube and mail and everywhere and on the way through opened this and behold the wonder of it Amazing! tremendous thanks
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 6 months ago

Congratulations dear man,

Congratulations dear man, once a star, in the spotlight you are! Many hugs of love, Anna "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Shooting Star, Longobardolino mio

Gratulerer, congratulations let the trumpets sound and the stars shine tonight enough to light your way-the 'Way', for you. Just arrived to see this event. You deserve it royally, so put on the ermine edged home knitted( your mother's, cloth of splendour and walk tall. This is truly a story of great value and impetus. Well done indeed. Love from your Annuccia
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Ink Dragon

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Joe,

how wonderful to happen on this awesome poem - this is what spotlight is supposed to be, give those of us who cannot spare enough time the opportunity to read real, thought-provoking poetry. You have my deepest respect for your undying love of the written word and your artistry. So It was then A million light years ago Now I’m ill and growing old Fading Into disillusion Oblivion Betrayed by Creation Embers burning still … This final stanza I take with me from your page. Yours, ~Nina
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

My Dear Joe

I am so sorry I missed this one till now ... you are a painter of words ... I could see it all ... and its beautiful ... love and big hugs Jayne x x
Geremia

Geremia

16 years 6 months ago

To my Jayne

J.B. Longo-Geremia Another wonderful compliment. All of YOU who appreciated this "effort" are the true makers of visions and dreams... Love from Longo
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dearest Joe

I just realised how naughty I was lol I forgot to congratulate you on spotlight ... I was so amoured of your words I forgot ... a mark of great poetry ... love and biggest hugs Jayne x x x