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Nov 12, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Conclusory crucifixion

Conclusory crucifixion

A conversation , void of lies
Is a dialog ,  infinitely sunblind
It’s born without structure
It’s born without purpose
It’s born with the finite, only of the future

Its conclusive , can not be explained
Because  it’s has no agenda
It’s purity can not be changed

 As you talk , to your spiritual will
Words are Conclusory.
For your need, to feel

This  crucifixion
Is only , your spiritual  depiction
A  finite added ,  to all your convictions 
Each  time , you said
Please god , I am asking for your blessing

— press, Nov 12, 2009

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sakkkkkkkkkkkkkkk

16 years 6 months ago

Different

Press. Brother from another mother is much the same as the words you place. This one keeps my attention as I'm left thinking it over in my gray. Thanks for the fine read your friend me. Steven A. Kacer
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 6 months ago

What a deeply rich poem,

What a deeply rich poem, Press!!! The last line is indeed a killer. Bravo! The only thing I would change is all the It's born without structure, without purpose (using another word: nascent) nascent with the finite, and future shock it's (contraction for it is) can not be explained (ed for past tense) Please review the poem the grammar mistakes detracts from its power, imo. A 5 when fixed, dear. Love, Anna "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha
press

press

16 years 6 months ago

HI

Hey Anna how are you, hope all is well . I agree with the type o [ explain- explained]. When I write ,my mind is so consumed in thought[trying to expand my finite HA HA big smile] I forget about the little things . Its reminds me of this song from the movie Wanted with Morgan Freemen & Angela joely . Danny Elfman - The Little Things (Wanted Soundt. try this link http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oshZxqmd04k . This is a great song LOV2U ANNA PRESS
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lyz

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Press

This is written to impress and you have done that. Just awesome. You have excelled. Love from Lyz. Xx