IT AIN'T OVER TILL THE FAT LADY SINGS--edited

The Fat lady will sing so many songs, and that you heard her singing at the close of the way was quite good. A great theme though, I thought not as tidy as your other works, in that you are having to many thingscoming to the party as it were, but all the same a great write, Yours Ian.T

Quite so, quite so, dear Longobardolino. I think that what would alleviate th uncomfortable parts of the two comments above would be placing the poem in a different manner. What I mean is dividing the poem into several verses the meaning would become apparent and the flow would have the right syncopation, the messages be each read as a whole expression. We need a moment to breath. Please do! eg:- Hold back the Beast That holds you And Understand it is part of who You are now. You have become. We change each day Nature’s way We are an imperfect divinity Feathers in the wind of chance and serendipity. Look to  the sun Bathe in its light Its energy. Rapture in Ocean’s Summer breeze. Feel the fire of another On a cold, dark and windy Winter’s night. An inner whispering which is us Our Spirit or our Soul Will make us win.. No sin. No expiation. No Fall of Man. The complex simplicity of our humanity.. Only Innocent children at play. ************* Well you get my meaning and you can do it better than I, the dividing up that is. I think you want it to be like a liturgy and never end, a prayer to mankind that has a dirge-like continuity of thought, but dividing it up will not deter from this theme, it will be easier to read and therefore communicate its message in a more succinct manner in the end. It has a meditational feeling to it and such glimpses of things of beauty and interest, like shells on the beach, we find facets of humanity in these words, well sung-I liked the diva with her operatic finale, smashing!! The pain in the ass too!!!! Your less sad Annuccia, in fact rejoicing.

I enjoyed this write, a little quirky but it is great. The fat lady and pains in the ass, lol, you are a wag as Ann says, lol. Loved it and the read, keep on writing on, love to you and yours. Lyz. XX