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SIMPLICITY

SIMPICITYI came to this earthOn this  Fall dayMany years agoCaught my breathAnd here I amAnd here I stayUntil the dayMy breath is taken from meBy some UnknownAndUnkind Entity.ThenBack I go from where I came.What simplicity.The end.
— Geremia, Oct 19, 2009

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Nordic cloud

16 years 7 months ago

Beautiful simplicity and that is what life really is

That's short and sweet my Longobardolino, so 'to the point' as you said of something of mine. Beautiful simplicity and that is what life really is, it is us who make it complicated, the earth keeps turning and we keep being born, and die, and all goes like a most beautiful geometric shape and yet one more aesthetically imperfect, the perfect asymmetry; the Golden Mean in some ways is closest to it too, and that you enjoy using as a metaphor for life. Not unlike my cat holding back as it goes forward in perfect movement towards the goal. Oh have you watched the cat doing that it is such a wonderful sight, one paw lifted, rests in air, then is put down, the tail gives a slight wave, the eyes watching intently, the grasses or anything in the way carefully treaded on twice, and the whole body slowly, almost imperceptibly moving foreword until it waves its hind quarters and leaps at its prey. I had a Siamese cat that did this most beautiful dance for me many times, he was such lovely colours, beige-white shading to the points of darkest mushroom brow-black and with his beautiful blue eyes transfixed, moved with such grace that I was every time fascinated by him/Ping-too. I mourned his loss for many months after he was run over as he was my only child, and was to remain my only child. But he world goes on regardless and we go on with it, where to nobody knows for sure as the quick of us that we cal life is not yet explained. No more than to say that i enjoyed your Simplicity my Joe, with love as aye from Annuccia
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lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Happy Bithday?

Yes a simple but straight to the point write. Witty and I wish you a Happy Day. Love Lyz. XX
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lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Longo

I give you Birthday wishes, with lots of hugs and love, I'll send them on this day, Upon the wings of a dove. Hope you had a lovely day. HAPPY BIRTHDAY LONGO, for yesterday. Love from Lyz. XX