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THE SWAN II

THE SWAN II

 

On this crispy cold  Fall day
I saw a swan make its way
Gently across a mirrored lake
Soft and quiet waves in its wake.
I wondered at the fluidity of motion
The ecstasy of grace..
The dream of calm and tranquility
No ghosts of memory to haunt its days.
No affliction
No sins  to steal its gait.
Innocence.
And
When it knows its Time here is at an end
Across the lake it silently glides
Again
Dancing with a falling sun
Into oblivion
— Geremia, Oct 10, 2009

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Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 8 months ago

My swan, your majesty

And here he is the swan, the magnficent swan, symbol of so much in our minds, as we see him floating reflected in pure white beauty, handsome, as is his mate, representing here life, wonderful feathered elegant poised life, which when on the brink of death glides effortlessly across the water to the land of no return. Beautifully put here dear Longobardolino mio. You inspired me in return to write in my notes for the day:- Tall the trees all striving up my swan, your majesty a ballet all in virgin white with myth each feather grown each wild seed sown into a coverlet so fine beneath it soft and warm all downy warm and soft those plumes that keep us warm at night, in climates cold and harsh as curved up high in breathless grace your neck rises from your form slightly frowning you acknowledge prowess at bold affront, your knob of crowning status poised. frowning slightly in disdain ........didn't get any further with the thought. I hasten to add that the swan is not only white it can also be black, and equally elegant with red trimmings on beak etc.
Geremia

Geremia

16 years 8 months ago

J.B.

J.B. Longo-Geremia Beautifully said, Annuccia.
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lyz

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Longo

This is a lovely vision of a swans life, sadly one day to end, but your poem is beautiful. Big hugs, bug hugs and hig hugs to you. Love from lyz. xx