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Blood and Alcohol

 This one's a winnerGod damn what a killerSharp shooterSoul looterStayin alive 'cause heAint going to hell soonerThan he has toAnd he's a machineFeeds onMRE's and gasolineTank busterLife hustlerHe be walking aroundWith two M16'sAnd he just aint dyingThough the bullets be flyingRight at himBut they can't pierce his skinHe's untouchableEverywhere he's beenAnd with every sinBodies be fallingHe won't stop till it's overThis is all he knowsThe fight is his homeThe blood is his clothesThe glory, his ownThe life he choseNow set in stoneI'll tell yaThis one's a rare metalAlways pushing the pedalAnd he be listenin'For his name on topOf every list he's inGlistenin'They spit at himUnsure what toThink of himThe perfect soldierAnd he's ambitousHe follows his ordersStillThe thought of him itches themThey're getting scaredThey be diggin' a ditch for himThey killing his repAnd burning the restNowIt beginsHe's on the runFriends turning him inGuess nowHe's got noneNot funNot yet,They haven't wonGet readyGet setPayback begunGack, the sound of a gunLack of respect for lifeSack the bodies and send 'emBack to HQ with a note"You wanted a monster?Now you've got one"He's losing his mindShowing his insidesBreaking that thin lineKilling to kill timeBlood is a red wineDrunk, and he cannot feelHis heart is lead and steelThis one is bred to killLost sight of what is realAnd living inside his headHe can kill anyoneHe's having so much funStopped shortHe's on the groundCan't breathOr hear a sound...Fade blackHe's waking upIce packSo many cutsBandaged upBut the blood won't stopDoctors talking with a copAnd mama's crying at the doorDaddy's praying to the lord"Please God, he's just sixteen"Flat linedFade to dream...Flash backsBack packsPacked with alcoholA few friendsAnd their friendsShot glasses start to fallBroken glassShots hit fastBack to backHe downs them allFriends cheer him on"Brandon! Brandon!"He's almost gone"You've had too much""Dude, go lay down":No way":Can't stay:That aint no fun:Gotta run:This party's done"Wait up, your drunk"Shut up, with one punchKnocked outNose bleedBlood spoutGrab the keys:I'll take you homeHe's behind the wheelPedal downTires PeelLost all feelHands freeHits a treeLights out
— Breakinglogic, Jun 18, 2009

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Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 11 months ago

I think I’m drunk on your

I think I'm drunk on your poem! Well done! Did I tell you I love raw poem, with such a character assassination er analysis. ~A ..wake up you're drunk (contraction for you are) they're killing or they are killing... "There are very few human beings who receive the truth, complete and staggering, by instant illumination. Most of them acquire it fragment by fragment, on a small scale, by successive developments, cellularly, like a laborious mosaic." Anais Nin
fledermaus

fledermaus

16 years 6 months ago

I can see an MC doing

I can see an MC doing something magical with this. Have you ever heard Edan? It reminded me of his work a little bit, and I imagined one of his rhythms when I read it to myself.
Breakinglogic

Breakinglogic

16 years 6 months ago

Yes, I do see it exactly

Yes, I do see it exactly like that. This one very much so had an intended beat. When I was writing it i wanted it to sound like it could be a rap, I like that you picked up on that. Thanks for reading and commenting :)
Beauregard

Beauregard

16 years 2 months ago

love the title

These stories are the basis for horror. But this is real which makes it so much more visceral and powerful than something out of the imagination. I enjoy rap poetry a lot more than I like actual rap. Perhaps if rappers got poets like yourself to write their songs for them I would like it better? lol. Kelsey