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Jun 01, 2009
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Eight years, one month, eight days
Eight years, one month, eight days
after we met,
she called.
Eight years, four days
after we became lovers
she called on the phone.
Seven years, nine months, seven days
after our first fight
she called to improve her social skills
Seven years, eight months, seven days
after I had to go away for a while
she told me how alone she is
Seven years, seven months, seven days
since I came back,
bearing love and gifts
she told me of her losses
Seven years, one month, seven days
after we broke up,
she cried on the phone,
that she just felt weak,
couldn't make it,
apologised for crying at me
I said oh, hey, that's ok,
I'm honoured by your trust.
Seven years, one month, seven days
later, I hang up
and look at the phone.
— weirdelf, Jun 01, 2009
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Critiques
docmaverick
17 years ago
Eloquently stated....
weirdelf
17 years ago
actually the only date I wasn't sure of was our first fight.
Candlewitch
17 years ago
Hi Jess
weirdelf
17 years ago
8) I always do cat,
Seren
17 years ago
Naughty !
weirdelf
17 years ago
Wow, that's something, tears!
Ink Dragon
17 years ago
Jess,
weirdelf
17 years ago
As I said to Doc,
Pixee
17 years ago
A Touched Nerve
weirdelf
17 years ago
LOL, I measure time by who I was with at the time.
Morgana Tragic…
17 years ago
Hey Jess
weirdelf
17 years ago
ta Katie,
orgami
17 years ago
Telephone
weirdelf
17 years ago
thanks mate
Seren
17 years ago
Jess congratulations on
weirdelf
17 years ago
ta, its a nice thing to happen sometimes, despite protests,
weirdelf
17 years ago
It is an unusual poem for me,
weirdelf
17 years ago
It is an unusual poem for me,
Mark
17 years ago
Good one Jess
weirdelf
17 years ago
LOL, bet you didn't hear the cute Kyoto accent
Race_9togo
17 years ago
Weirdelf
weirdelf
17 years ago
sensitive insight
Fleur MacDonald
17 years ago
I'm crying
weirdelf
17 years ago
what more could I ask?
weirdelf
17 years ago
what more could I ask?
weirdelf
17 years ago
Thanks everyone for the overwhelming response to this.
weirdelf
17 years ago
Thanks everyone for the overwhelming response to this.
Eduardo Cruz
17 years ago
Bravo!
Cloudthings
17 years ago
Hey Jess, thought this write was great, really cleverly done, in
weirdelf
17 years ago
a hug afterwards might have stopped the poem
Cloudthings
17 years ago
I like the way your mind works like that Jess, reflective lad ar
weirdelf
17 years ago
I love the way you think!
Cloudthings
17 years ago
Heh, I love it WHEN my mind works!
weirdelf
17 years ago
big smile, yes we had it rough
whitetea
17 years ago
you’ve taken things as
weirdelf
17 years ago
glad to hear from you whitetea
weirdelf
17 years ago
intense is good,
bowmore bill
17 years ago
Comment.
weirdelf
17 years ago
Under no circumstances may you or anyone call me Jeff.
tbeaudet
16 years 12 months ago
Absolutely my favorite one
weirdelf
16 years 12 months ago
thank you Tom,
infinite_dwarf
16 years 11 months ago
Jess
Kailashana
16 years 11 months ago
Jess, I have missed so many
weirdelf
16 years 11 months ago
love you dearly
Cloudthings
16 years 11 months ago
Heh... no a redhead would have stayed!!! Kidding...
weirdelf
16 years 11 months ago
oh, BTW, she is not redhead