the kissing blade

i am so afraid
as i paint my wrist
with a razor blade
like a tender kiss
that draws the blood
from beneath my skin
a sanguine flood
to commit my sin

now as i rest
and fade to sleep
the numb suggest
that i cut too deep
but my hearts content
for the pain has ceased
so with repent
i die at ease

— Breakinglogic, May 02, 2009

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Region, Country: California, USA

Critiques

themoonman

17 years 1 month ago

Breaking Logic

Welcome to the site... please do jump in and offer your insights on the many poets writes there are here. Your poem is tight, in that it flows well, and with good word choices... content... well, to me is disturbing. When I was young (now 50) there didn't seem to be any cutters, least not that I knew of... but it seems to be a way of life for many now... I'll be looking for your name, which by the way, I thought was an excellent choice... Breaking Logic... yep, I like it. Richard

Breakinglogic

17 years 1 month ago

thanks Richard

Thank you for the comment and the warm welcome, Richard. Yes, I agree that this is a disturbing piece, and that there are, sadly, more cutters now then I would like to be aware of. As for the name I chose for myself, I'm glad you liked it :) thanks for your time, peace

Beslynn

17 years ago

I really like your poem, it

I really like your poem, it is a subject I can relate to and think that you eloquently capture the feelings behind the actions. Beslynn

Breakinglogic

17 years ago

Thank you Beslynn, I am both

Thank you Beslynn, I am both sorry and glad to hear you can relate. Thanks again Peace

Sinbadthesailorman

15 years 11 months ago

As Moon has said this one is tight and flows nicely

But, I feel and this may be what you wanted me to feel, solace or indifference. Maybe its just my taste, But I want (I poems) to depart much feeling/(s) what I mean any Poem that is about the writer or the writers actions I want more or as much as I can get from them feeling wise eg. I love the razors blade and its kiss/ My numb mess suggest that I have cut to deeply or cut myself to deeply I am guilty of using But to often but here I would have use a TO To my hearts content I read you are new and I am starting with your first works so please take no offense they are never intended Donnie/Sinbad You have strong Logical insights and this could be your path as the name you picked suggest. I will keep checking in on you and your progressions. Thanks for sharing here with us.