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your mother

 i sit by your bed,
 the hours slip by
holding your hand
not ready for good-bye
i know you can hear me
it's the way that you breathe
exhaling so softly
i drop to my knees
so lost in my head
i pray to your god
for some kind of comfort
but i find it not
your body before me
your thoughts i don't know
people just watching
but its not a show
my heart is breaking
yet they want to see
not one private moment
between you and me
then she walks in
the cause of your death
i hate her with passion
with all i have left
don't touch his face
walk back out that door
give him his peace
he doesn't need you anymore
i hate you. i hate you
you stole what was mine
you cheated us all
yet it wasn't a crime
give away babies
they'll turn out fine
it doesn't always work
how we had in mind
so don't shed your tears
for you i don't care
you should be where he is
his life should've been spared

— mardy3, Feb 16, 2009

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tbeaudet

tbeaudet

17 years 3 months ago

Heartbreaking

and full of angry, angry words during a very difficult time. You express yourself wonderfully here, and I hope your writing proves good therapy for you as you deal with your heartache. "It doesn't always work, how we had in mind" is my favorite line. My only suggestions would be to rework it just a bit... you start out talking to him, but finish talking to her. I had to read it twice to see where it changed (the I hate you lines). I might also repeat the 1st 4 lines at the end, and maybe change the title (not ready for goodbye?) but what do I know? I think this is very good as is. Thanks for sharing. Tom