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Vampire in the Mist (No. 1 in a series)
Vampire in the Mist
The oddly beautiful silhouette emerged from the misted wood line.
The vapors surrounded it like a protective shield.
The full moon brushed the scene with subtle light
Touching the image with a calm yet eerie twinge.
The tall figure commanded respect
Long blonde hair fluttered on the breeze
The curves from top to bottom were accented by shadows
The only visible flesh was pale even in the dim light
The eyes were haunting in their own right
The fangs barely visible past the full ruby lips
Everything else was darker than black.
In a blink of an eye, she was gone
Simultaneously you could feel her,
A hungered breath on your neck.
Frozen in fear the scream never leaves your throat
The moist heat numbs your veins
And trickles down over your collar bone.
Nothingness rules the seconds
Time ceases to exist.
Seconds tick to minutes
Still nothing.
No pain,
No abilities,
No movement.
In a heartbeat,
The mist dances in the wood line
You watch her return to the darkness
Your knees buckle
The ground hard beneath them
You watch the mist twist and turn
A pair of eyes lock on yours
Fangs ghastly illuminate in the moonlight
A voice disgustingly sweet,
Hangs on the heavy air…
“Sleep well, my treasure. Until we met again,”
Written by Tink 2/14/09 11:45am
Critiques
Rett
17 years 3 months ago
Loved the poem
paparazii
17 years 3 months ago
Vampires are freakies
Morgana Tragic…
17 years 3 months ago
Nice poem Tink! I have a
SilhouetteName
17 years 3 months ago
Nice
LissaMine
17 years 3 months ago
Great Work
Ink Dragon
17 years 3 months ago
Goosebumps!
Notso
17 years 3 months ago
Awesome!! You have a gift
Kyarain
17 years 3 months ago
Outstanding
Morgana Tragic…
17 years 2 months ago
Hey Tink, Shared this one
sakkkkkkkkkkkkkkk
17 years 2 months ago
The Wolf
W.C.Wampler
17 years 2 months ago
...vampire...mist...poem
orgami
17 years 2 months ago
classics
weirdelf
17 years 2 months ago
An excellent write,
Geezer
17 years 2 months ago
yeah, vamps!
W.C.Wampler
17 years 2 months ago
low class of vampire
Geezer
17 years 2 months ago
low class?
sakkkkkkkkkkkkkkk
17 years 2 months ago
The Wolf in your eyes
DWD
17 years 2 months ago
Once bitten ...
Geezer
17 years 2 months ago
kisssss!!
ANC1996
17 years 2 months ago
Woo-Hoo!
Tink
17 years 1 month ago
All - please accept my apologies for ...
paparazii
17 years ago
Still with you buddy
greeneyes
17 years ago
perfect perfect perfect
Electric Blue
16 years 11 months ago
Vampire in the Mist
Tink
16 years 11 months ago
Thanks Blue!
Candlewitch
16 years 11 months ago
Hi tink!
Tink
16 years 11 months ago
CAT !
Lotus
16 years 11 months ago
Great poem. The only aprt in