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Geremia
Geremia
Jan 31, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Ragged Edges

  Ragged edges    Ragged edgesTorn and tossed aboutNothing to hold on toWithout a clue to my mysteryKnowing yet not knowingWhat it is I need to doIn a  Godless worldI twist and turnRushing forward cursing
My  own humanity
AloneI dance  in some dark night
No end in sight for meTime to wakeAnd dream again     
— Geremia, Jan 31, 2009

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yenti

yenti

17 years 4 months ago

Joe

Have been reading your work and can see that there are a few without comment, they are good and the only thing I can see that will not let them have their comment is that they are short and just a little detached from a focus point. I will read them all and comment as I do. Your writing is good and the flow of words seems fine just needs that focal point and more body , Yours Ian.T
Geremia

Geremia

17 years 4 months ago

J.B. Longo-GeremiaThanks

J.B. Longo-Geremia Thanks Ian, My poetry is not for everyone, I think. It is Spartan and to the point, The focus point is the thread of a particular message that discovers itself slowly in the reading, Several read together forom a "mosaic" of this message. Thanks for readinig me. :) Joe