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Rob Graber
Rob Graber
Feb 02, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Saith the Preacher

Oh, vanity is hollow, hollow,
Sisters and brothers!
And self-promotion's hard to swallow,
'Specially in others.

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Rob Graber

Rob Graber

17 years 3 months ago

Meter Trumps Meaning

I like the idea in terms of meaning, but not enough to mess up the meter. The meter is: duh BOOM duh BOOM duh BOOM duh BOOM duh BOOM duh duh BOOM duh duh BOOM duh BOOM duh BOOM duh BOOM duh BOOM duh duh BOOM duh. (The final line is to be read "SPESH lee in UH thers.) For some reason I find this meter quite amusing. :-,? Thanks!
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Arrow

17 years 3 months ago

Gotcha.

I was reading it as "SPESH-ah-lee," hearing the underlying pattern of lines 2 and 4 as two amphibrachs (with "'Specially" being a deviation), if that makes sense.
Rob Graber

Rob Graber

17 years 3 months ago

Yes

Yes, it does. I wish there were a good way to signal the two-syllable pronounciation I have in mind there, but the spelling of "especially" is not very cooperative at all. I even worked a little with "particularly," to no avail...
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Jo Latimer

17 years 3 months ago

I think that's what make a poet -

everything has been written about before! It's how to make the subject seem new & interesting that counts. Found this funny & enjoyed it. Jo
Rob Graber

Rob Graber

17 years 3 months ago

Thanks!

Thanks much indeed, Jo; and 4 the sunset (or sunrise) 2!
Rob Graber

Rob Graber

17 years 3 months ago

My Mother-in-law

My mother-in-law admonished her children: Always remember that when you point a finger at someone else, THREE fingers are pointing back at you! Thanks.
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Conect11

17 years 3 months ago

and Jesus gave

the same admonishment as your mother in law. I like this clever piece, would agree with Arrow on line two, but is my personal preference. It seems you are comfortable with the meter, and that's the only thing that matters. Humility is a hard thing to truly develop, I'm not sure that a person has the capability within themself. BTW, your picture reminds me just of those preachers you describe, lol! Mark W. Galatians 5:22-23 "22 But the Holy Spirit produces this kind of fruit in our lives: love, joy, peace, patience, kindness, goodness, faithfulness, 23 gentleness, and self-control. Against these, there is no law!" My favorite verse(s) in the Bible
Rob Graber

Rob Graber

17 years 3 months ago

Favorite Verse

I think my fave is: "That which is, is far off, and deep, very deep; Who can find it out?" (Eccl.7:23) Thanks! We will now pass the plate; I hope you will give generously to support your local Preacher of the Gospel.... ;-,?
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Conect11

17 years 3 months ago

coy of you

and perhaps a bit one dimensional, my friend? Not all pastors are about collecting money, as not all professors, I'm sure are liberal lunatics bent on the destruction of our younger generation. Be well. :) Mark W. Galatians 5:22-23 "22 But the Holy Spirit produces this kind of fruit in our lives: love, joy, peace, patience, kindness, goodness, faithfulness, 23 gentleness, and self-control. Against these, there is no law!" My favorite verse(s) in the Bible
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 3 months ago

Not that I feel I'd "know"

Well, I don't feel like any know it all critic, but this just completely apealed to me, gorgeous in simplicty & the sense of fun & taking the piss (That may be an Australianism?) I enjoyed it... Cheers, shall go look at more from you. Anni
Rob Graber

Rob Graber

17 years 3 months ago

Simple, Fun, and Pissy...

Thanks much indeed! Simple, fun, and a little bit pissy is just the sense intended; you have read the poet's mind on this one.