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Tale Uv De T'underer

Tale Uv De T'underer

Dere's a tale down in de sout-lands
Uv a creature dat roam de storm,
Known ta each and ev'ry person
From de day dat dey are born,
And de Bayou-people, dey tremble at de name!

Dey say dat when de Crook-flash
Walks acrost de storm-dark skies,
You can feel de swamps a-shakin',
You can hear de monster's cries,
And De T'underer, it begin ta prowl!

Sum say de tall ole Cypress trees
Be just like so much grass,
When De T'underer begins it's walk
Acrost dat swampy morass,
And de Bayou-people, dey tremble at de t'ought!

Uders say dose dat seen it,
Dey don' live ta tell no tale,
But you can no fail ta hear it
When  de storm winds begin ta wail,
And De T'underer, it begin ta walk!

Dey say dat when de Crook-flash
Walks across de storm-dark skies,
You can hear de monster stalking
And hear de victims cries,
And de Bayou people, dey tremble in de storm!

For those who had trouble reading this. It is written in the old Cajun Patois of Louisianna. When I was in my teens I lived there for awhile and used to love to listen to the old Cajun men tell their tales of the swamps and bayous. In case you can't figure it out. Crook-Flash is lightning.
Respectfully,
Rett
— Rett, Jan 27, 2009

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Region, Country: Southern Texas, USA

Favorite Poets: Dickenson, Longfellow

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Rett

Rett

17 years 4 months ago

Thanks Janice

The ole cajun men have some wonderful ways of telling their stories. Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water."
Rett

Rett

17 years 4 months ago

Ah, ya be gittin it

Thanks Tom Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water."
Mark

Mark

17 years 4 months ago

caorse figurd yit yout

French me ya? I could just keep on reading these ! begin vs begins hmm it begin ta walk - Reads beddor your way :) If you read that I feel lucky. Mark
Rett

Rett

17 years 4 months ago

*L*

Dats da way she happin ta be, ya be bendin ya ear ta me now son. Thanks Mark Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water."
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

17 years 4 months ago

Rett

i heppy ta seen it, heppy ta read it, i gah-rahn-tee! :D do it be "folks", aint "people"? Great stuff Respectfully, Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race
Rett

Rett

17 years 4 months ago

Actually, I made an error

in most of their patois it would be peoples. I like folks also, will give this some thought. Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water."
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 4 months ago

Rett

Me came, me saw, me read, me like! Is it a bad thing that I understood every word? ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"Handle every situation like a dog: if you can't eat it, or screw it, piss on it and walk away!"
Rett

Rett

17 years 4 months ago

And you a card carrying

Yankee? For shame Jess! *LOL* just teasing, nope, actually I think it is rather admirable that you have such an astute understanding. gitter dun. Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water."
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 4 months ago

Tale Uv De T'underer

Dang it Rett, Ya just had to make me read it out loud now didn't ya? Interesting different, enjoyed it~ ______________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous
Rett

Rett

17 years 4 months ago

Thanks Janice

You really get the full effect reading it out loud. *LOL* Glad you enjoyed it. BTW Re: your tagline. We should be able to get the tax credit for each member of congress and the senate. They are dependent on us anyway. Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water."
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

17 years 4 months ago

Epaminondas and Uncle Remus

Every evening my father HAD to read, or tell the tale of 'the tar baby' from uncle Remus, we prompted him if he went wrong, we so loved that dialect. These two stories are as dear to me as the peter rabbit and Alice's of old England. I loved this too, needless to say. On your birthday, i send you the same, see your site Rett, Ann
Rett

Rett

17 years 4 months ago

Thanks Ann

It is much harder to write that patois than I thought! *lol* AND i AM A SOUTHERNER! Anyway, glad you liked it. I appreciate it a lot. Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water."
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Conect11

17 years 4 months ago

ah, you mastered what I failed at long ago

see, because from reading your comment it came naturally to you. Unfair advantage, lol! Your rhyme scheme fit perfectly with this style, and the title works really well, given the Cajun inspiration. You gave this a real, breathing, tangible feel that bursts through the language! Mark W. Galatians 5:22-23 "22 But the Holy Spirit produces this kind of fruit in our lives: love, joy, peace, patience, kindness, goodness, faithfulness, 23 gentleness, and self-control. Against these, there is no law!" My favorite verse(s) in the Bible
Rett

Rett

17 years 4 months ago

Thank you Mark

Sorry I took unfair advantage, but us rednecks need every advantage we can git. *LOL* We used to live on the banks or the Pearl River in Mississippi and lost several dogs to gators. One day I was paddling around in the river when a gator that had at least 5 or so inches (give or take an inch) came right up behind the little pirough (a flat bottom canoe) and scared me so bad I had it slapping water everytime I cut through the water with the paddle. Just barely made it to the bank and out before he started knocking the boat about. My short story "Old Ben" was inspired by that memory. Glad you enjoyed the poem. Thanks bunches. Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water."
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Ink Dragon

17 years 4 months ago

Rett,

I want to hear your German even more after reading this! Southern accent indeed. I could never have pulled off something like that. Native speaker´s privilege. *Rett is ne joode Mann* (That´s my hometown dialect, hope you can figure it out.) Cheers, Sir Rett of the longest profile (now two pages), ~Nina
Rett

Rett

17 years 4 months ago

Gutten Morgan

Vee Gates dear honey chile. *ROFLMAO* Yours sounds like Jamaican Mon or French but what tha heck do I know, I speak southern and Texan fluently with a smidgeon (or is it pigeon) of Cajun. off the top of my head it is Rett is no Good man. *LOL* BTW southern is you all or y'all and Texan is yawl. Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water."
ID

Ink Dragon

17 years 4 months ago

Rett,

*ne joode* means "a good", just in case you didn´t figure it out... Are you sure it´s not pidgin cajun? ;) Yours, ~Nina
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prayersbyPatty

17 years 4 months ago

Rett

Yea- tried to read it. Just too much for this brain of mine, but it was a fun piece and most got it. I like fun..... Now how about writin dat piece on older versin of I get by with a little help from depends? still waiting, Patty
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prayersbyPatty

17 years 4 months ago

Rett

I challenge you again to re-write the Beetles song... it would be as funny as Bruce the goose. We need some fun.... Patty
yenti

yenti

17 years 4 months ago

Hey older man

Wat wid diss monster dat wlk around, Very much like the Bodmin one, they seem to crop up where there are empty hard spaces that people fear to go. Lovely piece and the Cajun people seem to be a strength to themselves, I love the way they have evolved as they are today. Your writing did them proud, Yours, Ian.T PS:- man stopped evolving the first day he saw his reflection, Maybe he thought he was perfect
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poewriter58

17 years 4 months ago

Rett

Pure Genius, loved and understood every word of it . Please do something really terrible so I can tear it apart, ( there's a challenge) excellent work. Chrys
Rett

Rett

17 years 4 months ago

Thank you Chrys, but I do have one

that is giving me fits. Arrow and Jim are trying to help me on it, but I am not satisfied with it. Cleaving Stone is the title. Have tried Arrow's suggestions, can't seem to make it work right and jim's doesn't seem to work right for me. Thinking about deleting it and forgetting about it... Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water."
Rett

Rett

17 years 4 months ago

Aye, an aren't ya tha darlin ol man, Ian,

ta be sayin it don't ja know. *LOL* I love the cajun people. Interesting as hell. Once I was on business 10 in New Orleans in the far left lane and there were two 18 wheelers side by side just ahead of me. This car came flying up and wedged itself right between them. Of couse I waited with the truckers til the cops arrived to give my statement. We got the guy out of the car, uninjured but embarrassed, and the cop asked him "What the hell did you think you were doing?" He looked at the cop serious as can be and said "Well officer, I t'ought I could makit, I just t'ought I could makit!" All of us practically fell down laughing. Poor guy. Glad you liked it my friend. as for the evolving thing....Are you sure it didn't scare him so bad he couldn't evolve anymore? *L* Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water."
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prayersbyPatty

17 years 4 months ago

Rett

Does this monster have anything to do with the billabong? He lives in the brush with the kangaroos. Patty
Rett

Rett

17 years 4 months ago

*LOL* No m'am

Strictly an old tale from Cajun country. Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water."
deelilah

deelilah

17 years 4 months ago

Pretty cool, Rett,

You got the rhyme, the rhythm, and the dialect. I'm just sitting here shaking my head and rolling my eyeballs over the car and the 18 wheelers. The guy would be better off taking on Crook-flash. Dee
Rett

Rett

17 years 4 months ago

Thanks Deelilah

That crook-flash is mean but de T'underer be meaner. You often wonder where a person's mind went when they do something like that. I can actually still see the accident and the guy every time I think about it. Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water."
Rett

Rett

17 years 4 months ago

Ah yes

Jeet yet? yanna? jus you be carful o de ole bull gator now hear! Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water."