WATER

WATER Water flowing through my fingers I try But Can’t find the way To hold on And make it mine Why Is your love for me Like water flowing free Rushing thru And
Then On to someone new When Will I be The only one You see

— Geremia, Nov 11, 2008

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Kailashana

17 years 7 months ago

Good image, and poem… your

Good image, and poem... your centering of the poem on the page evokes a small waterfall. Through or thru not *threw*. And no one can be clasped in our hands, no matter who we see ;-) ~A

Geremia

17 years 7 months ago

Water

J.B. Longo-Geremia Thank you. I will also make the spelling correction, :) joe

Jasmine

17 years 6 months ago

Love is often sad!!!

What we want is what we giving...compassion and unconditional love...there are givers and there are takers...we are the givers.... Jaz

Jasmine

17 years 6 months ago

Love is often sad!!!

What we want is what we giving...compassion and unconditional love...there are givers and there are takers...we are the givers.... Jaz

Nilmini

17 years 6 months ago

This is nice.

You just poured your heart out with all the doubts and hopes. It's true that feelings of hurt and possessiveness always live hand in hand with the feeling of love! I love this kind of simple expressions. If not for the spacing the enjoying of the poem would be easier, because it distracts the mind from concentrating on the meaning of the whole thing. Hope you'd seriously consider removing the spacing. Best Regards, Nilmini

Geremia

17 years 6 months ago

Spacing

J.B. Longo-Geremia Thank you, my friend. I eliminated the spacing as you suggested. Grazie mille!

Wafi

17 years 6 months ago

Longo

A beautiful and touching poem. Enjoyed reading it.Thanks for sharing. "When Will I be The only one You see" Wafi