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Forgotten Places

Face down
Top undone
Forehead to
Forearm
Palms to
Soft cotton
Over yielding
Prickly ground
Sweet smell
Of sun cooking
Freshly cut grass
And coconuts…
Not long before
Diamond droplets
Form down,
Down, down
Naked spine
And thigh
Smells of browning
Skin and Tropics
Makes me wonder
If we could not
Be such a tasty
Dish?…

Over now
Time to bronze
The valley
And hills
Laying hidden
From peepers
Behind my cedar
Planked shield
Dark visions
Warm to pink
As I rest facing
My accomplice
Diamond droplets
Return now
Covering the canyon
And its massive walls
Entertaining sinister
Ideas of  raging
A river straight down
The center of me…

Sudden rude
Awakening now
A cooling gust
Bullies warmth
And sets my skin
Afire with the likes of
Goosebumps?!?!?!?
Threatening now
My newly
Waxed thighs
And sending
My peeks to
Their highest
Point
Those droplets
Seem to freeze
Muscles tenses
Leaning up now
Newly iced river
Decides to flow
Down, down,
Down…
Draft breaks
And sun comes
To my rescue
Blushing me
Pink once more
Melting icy trails
And exciting
Forgotten places

— theladyblue, Oct 31, 2008

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themoonman

themoonman

17 years 7 months ago

Ladyblue...

the sensually exciting undertones carry this one to the end... much enjoyed your line poem... Richard
theladyblue

theladyblue

17 years 7 months ago

always so sweet!

thank you my friend! <3 Emarie @~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@ "For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..."
tbeaudet

tbeaudet

17 years 7 months ago

Whew...

Exciting? Ya' think? My God, your writing could arouse a dead man. Wonderful imagery.... Not sure what line poetry is, but if this is it, I love it. Tom http://www.neopoet.com/node/12548
theladyblue

theladyblue

17 years 7 months ago

hmmmm

better be careful then...I don't much care for zombies or the living dead type thingy...thanks much! <3 Emarie @~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@ "For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..."
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orgami

17 years 7 months ago

hot bask and viscosity of oil to smooth flesh

10W-20 no seriously this is a great erotic poem well written and paced I remember the works of the greats shocking moderate america in its day today one can find almost any lurid peice everywhere almost I could feel the wind the movement of the palms the shine of oil I loved the descriptions of feeling exposed aroused the thrills conveyed Magnificent!
theladyblue

theladyblue

17 years 7 months ago

wow thank you!

I consider it an amazingly good thing to get such a compliment from you! I love doing erotica but it is hard to find good erotica that isn't printed porn. sad really that class rarely plays much of a part in anything anymore. Funnily enough, the thing that got me into erotica was 'slam poetry'. I had such a problem with stage fright that I got fed up and decided that I may as well go all out and do a complete performance. It was like a light switched on that first time. When all of my fears and self consciousness should have been paramount it was like another part of me took over. As I stood on the stage and made love to him with my words the whole world melted into me and shame was lost. It proved to be a very effective tool to cure stage fright lol ironically enough I can not perform 'love' pieces. lol to each his own I suppose! Thanks for the read! <3 Emarie @~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@ "Tempted by your Tainted Love I sure do love the way you come inside my crystal ball..." Buckcherry 'Next to You'
Rett

Rett

17 years 7 months ago

Three words Emarie

I like it! Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby" Rett: 2008
theladyblue

theladyblue

17 years 7 months ago

awww shucks!

Thanks bunches Rett! <3 Emarie @~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@ "Tempted by your Tainted Love I sure do love the way you come inside my crystal ball..." Buckcherry 'Next to You'