theladyblue

Oct 25, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Need?

Once I heard of a love
Untold as the poets say
Unsung as the psalmers sing
Love that existed not in logic
Love that couldn’t be traced
And had no need

Once I heard a story
Written backwards for forward’s sake
Read forwards and misunderstood
A story that surpassed its self
A story that had no author to be named
And had no need

Once I saw a light
Gleaming from your eyes
Dimming not and using no disguise
A light that touched my heart
A light that started a spark
And had a need

Once I saw that need
A doubt followed
A sorrow swallowed me whole
But then I saw a new light
Sparking from my eye
And need was met

— theladyblue, Oct 25, 2008

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Critiques

tbeaudet

17 years 7 months ago

I love this, Lady

This is incredible as is, but I hit few "rhythm bumps" while reading. Oftentimes, the author has a cadence in their head (I always do) and I will continue to read this one over and over until I think I have the right tempo. I love the line "Written backwards for forward’s sake" but I love it all. Looking forward to reading more of your work. Tom

theladyblue

17 years 7 months ago

Tom

First let me say thank you! I am typically not much with true rhyme and meter. I suppose it is because I have my own tempo and way of speaking. All of my poetry is written what I can only describe as 'my voice'. I suppose if I had the voice for it I should record a lot of my work so that it would make sense for my readers lol and as for 'writing backwards for forward's sake'...that is something I actually do lol I start with only my ending and find my beginning in it's wake. Sounds strange I know but as a horse of different color I must concede that I yam wot I yam and quite simply nothing more lol many thanks again! <3 Emarie @~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@ "For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..."

tbeaudet

17 years 7 months ago

pc snafu, sorry

sorry for 2 comments

theladyblue

17 years 7 months ago

ahhh well

the more the merrier <3 Emarie @~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@ "For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..."

prayersbyPatty

17 years 7 months ago

Need

Well written I like the backwards forward thing going on. This poem fills a need in my heart thanks for sharing Patty

theladyblue

17 years 7 months ago

Oh Patty...

that is just about the sweetest thing I've heard! Thank you so very very much! <3 Emarie @~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@ "For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..."

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 7 months ago

Ladyblue

when ever I read your poems Emily Dickinson pops into my head. your poems are those of dark that bring the light, so beautiful and well executed. for me this rates a "5" thanks, Eddie "do like the once barren tree: flourish and like the planted seed: rise" Jose de Deigo

theladyblue

17 years 7 months ago

Oh My...

I'm not sure that I am deserving of such a compliment but let me say that you are not the first to say so...a friend say something similar about my poem 'My Heart, Kind Sir'...I can not tell you what a much needed smile your comment has brought to my face! Thank you for your kindness Eddie! <3 Emarie @~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@ "For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..."

infinite_dwarf

17 years 7 months ago

Emarie

I agree with Tom and Patty - the second stanza really takes the prize with this poem! Well done! ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"So you stand on the corner in your new English clothes, and you look so polished from your hair down to your toes. Ah, but still your finger's gonna pick your nose after all." - Billy Joel

theladyblue

17 years 7 months ago

Why thank ya...

was my fav to lol smiles! <3 Emarie @~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@ "For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..."

Kailashana

17 years 7 months ago

when need drifted away on a

when need drifted away on a bright and lovely summer's day i went looking for myself in dreams long ago suspended i asked sorrow to let me go i asked the night not to pass judgment to look away i could not stay this close and be so far...so very far when need drifted away and begged me stay. I just might have to start voting...Emarie ;-) ~A

theladyblue

17 years 7 months ago

well dont let me stop ya! lol

I love that your comments are always such a poetic response...that is why I write...to inspire! Thanks for lettin' me know I still got it somewhere lol <3 Emarie @~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@ "For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..."