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Barbara Writes
Barbara Writes
Oct 24, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

*Tear Drops* * Feeling Glum*

Tear drops
-damp heart
Right words
-dried them up

Feeling glum
-restless sea
Rain of words
-calm the tide



— Barbara Writes, Oct 24, 2008

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Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Shakespeare, , Emily Dickinson, , , Whitman, Jess Tapper

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Amru

17 years 7 months ago

Barabara, It’s simply

Barabara, It's simply beautiful.Such simple words and such deep pain. Great
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 7 months ago

Amru

Thanks I appreciate the kind words. Glad you like them. Respectfully Yours, Barbara
Rett

Rett

17 years 7 months ago

Beautifully Written

Barbara. My my my, how good you are and how apt this is. Well done. Respectfully, Rett: "Does this election remind you of The Emperors New Clothes? No one has the guts to tell him because..." Rett
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 7 months ago

Rett

Happy you like them. Thanks for commenting. I want to change ripples, but not know at moment what to replace with. Respectfully Yours, Barbara
Rett

Rett

17 years 7 months ago

A couple of suggestions Barbara

wave, undulation, swell, current, flow, rise and fall. tide. That are a few that would fit here I think. Maybe even work. *LOL* Good luck my friend. Respectfully, Rett: "Does this election remind you of The Emperors New Clothes? No one has the guts to tell him because..." Rett
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 7 months ago

Rett

Appreciate the help. I think it sounds better with tide. what do you think? Respectfully Yours, Barbara
Rett

Rett

17 years 7 months ago

Ah yes, I think you've got it!*british accent*

I think that works better Barbara. It seems to fit much better. Good job. Respectfully, Rett: "You want change? Let's elect a president and give him total power for a year. At the end of one year he is marched out into the middle of Reliant Stadium in Houston and locked in with 50,000 of the American people. Let them decide
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 7 months ago

oh, I feel it

you are posibly the best poet on this site. Yet you could be seen as trite because of the simplicity of your expression. cheers, Jess
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 7 months ago

Thanks Rett

Appreciate your help here. I think it sound good too. *British accent* wow nice compliment. I change the second line to damp heart. Do you think this makes it sound better here. Gonna go back to the other of the 17 and use this format to make them better. Respectfully Yours, Barbara
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 7 months ago

Jess

You make me laugh. Ouch! How do you suppose I make this unique and worthwhile. Would love to see how you would make this a winner. Master of Poets. Respectfully Yours, Barbara
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 7 months ago

Jess

Sometimes the simplest things help relieve stress. I put that which trouble me into simple statements. Kinda like taking out that which causes distress putting in a positive. When fed up -reaches the heart Hugs of words -brings back hope Thanks for the compliment means a lot coming from you. Respectfully Yours, Barbara