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The Wolf (Posted again for Halloween)

The pen on paper moving to and fro
Takes me sometimes where I would not go
A pentagram on my palm aglow
And therein lies...
The Wolf

A growl, a nip, a flick of tail,
A howl, a bark, he takes to trail.
Night dark shape, flashing feet,
The wolf has come, hide 'neath the sheet!

Eyes like burning coals at night,
Hell hot breath, a snap, a bite,
A lance of fire deep in the brain,
A desperate cry, a searing pain!

Confused shapes move to and fro,
Hot salty taste, blood on the snow.
Images burn in black and white
The wolf has come, beware the night!

The sharp tang of familiar scent,
A howl, a bay, on trail he's bent!
Dim memories, confusion, something's wrong!
The pull of the moon, it's so strong!

A dim longing where pain resides,
The pack calls, push it aside.
The stalk, the kill, the fatal bite,
The wolf has come, tremble with fright!

The frenzied bloodlust, the prey, the fight,
Fleeting shadows, the moon, the night.
The fevered brow, the sweat, a sound,
Torn clothing, the blood-soaked ground!

The longing, the lust, the stealthy creep,
Dim awareness, the pain, bless-ed sleep!
The terror, the leaping, running unbound!
The wolf has come, beware the pentagram!

I decided to post this again since Halloween is coming up. I wrote this several years ago, but it wasn't very good. I posted it when I came here and several people helped me make a decent poem out of it. The major 3 were RSSCheerer, Poewriter58 and last, but not least, Purplemoondoll who is no longer with us in this life, but is still sorely missed.

Without them and this site, this poem would have languished in the realm of terrible, but with promise that they saw and helped me bring forth. That is the beauty of this site and it's premise. Improving your poetry and writing.

The poem is a tribute to the old black and white Werewolf movies. Lon Chaney and others along with the more modern ones with better effects. A favorite of mine starred Jack Nicholson.

I hope it is enjoyed by our new members as well as the old ones who have already read it. If there is any further improvements offered, I would appreciate the critique and will give it serious consideration. Thank you.

— Rett, Aug 14, 2008

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Region, Country: Southern Texas, USA

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DarkinAZ

17 years 9 months ago

I remember this!

I like this alot. As I was reading I was like " I know I've read this before" then I saw your notes. Great write Rett. Sincerely, Mark
Rett

Rett

17 years 9 months ago

Thanks a lot Mark

I am glad you remember it. I appreciate you re-reading it. Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby!" Rett 2008.
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

17 years 9 months ago

Rett

From the werewolf legends, a great write! This piece held my attention to the last word. I like the relentless pace of the chase. Always, Cat
Rett

Rett

17 years 9 months ago

Thanks Cat

Glad you liked this. And I am not a horror movie fan. *LOL* Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby!" Rett 2008.
Sinbadthesailorman

Sinbadthesailorman

17 years 9 months ago

Glad you did repost I didn't see it the first time

Liked this alot very captavating Did not get the ware-wolf with the first pentagram glad I stayed to the end so I could beware that pentagram love the old horor flicks hate the Texas Chain saws and the Hostiles any thing I know has any grain of truth such monsters we humans can truely be give me zombies any day Donnie/Sinbad
Rett

Rett

17 years 9 months ago

Thanks Donnie

Sorry about leaving the chat so suddenly, I had company come by. As for Texas Chainsaw Massacre I watched the original, to my horror. Every time I think of it, my back hurts between my shoulder blades.*shiver* *LOL* mYeah, I'll take zombies over the human monsters any day. Glad you enjoyed it. Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby!" Rett 2008.
Rett

Rett

17 years 9 months ago

Thank you Ronda

I actually enjoyed reading it again myself. I had forgotten how much improvement it was with yours and Chrys' help over the original. Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby!" Rett 2008.
Rett

Rett

17 years 9 months ago

Thank you Janice

I truly appreciate it. Keep on keeping on. Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby!" Rett 2008.
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barbsdad2003

17 years 9 months ago

Uh-oh, I guess you're overdue ...

for a sharply worded critique: 1) title: perfect 2) language use: exemplary 3) pace: exceptional, riveting 4) theme: none better 5) beginning/ending: nicely coiled/corkscrewed all the way from pentagram to pentagram. Sorry for my bluntness/harshness, Chuck
Rett

Rett

17 years 9 months ago

Oh, the pain

Such sharp pointed critique. Man, when you decide to get down to brass tacks, you really hammer them in! I am not entirely sure my ego could stand much more harshness from you. You really ripped me a new one! Thanks Chuck, your bluntness/harshness is appreciated. Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby!" Rett 2008.
Linda Moses

Linda Moses

17 years 9 months ago

wolf

Good stuff! It held my attention, too right down to the last word!
Rett

Rett

17 years 9 months ago

Thank you Linda

I truly appreciate that you found it enjoyable. Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby!" Rett 2008.
Rett

Rett

17 years 9 months ago

I'll be careful of weirdelfs!

*LOL* Glad ya got a kick out of it Jess. Thanks Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby!" Rett 2008.
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amalzamani

17 years 9 months ago

Pentagram!

I like the rhythm and the fast images racing inside this poem. I just wanted to ask about the pnetagram...what exactly does it represent in these verses?...I googled the word "pentagram" and got too many explanations! enjoyable one...thank you Rett
Rett

Rett

17 years 9 months ago

Amazamani

Pentagrams can mean many things according to the usage, but in this particular instance it refering only to the old hook in the black and white movies with Lon Chaney starring in the Werewolf role he played so well. It was meant to denote the evil rising in his soul not something I believe in. Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby!" Rett 2008.
Rob Graber

Rob Graber

17 years 9 months ago

I enjoyed the poem, and

I enjoyed the poem, and admire the ability the poet shows to arouse in the reader a fear of something obscure and awful in which he--the poet--does not really believe. I think it would pack even more punch with a steadier meter--a la Poe's "The Raven"; but that's just me. Very good write, Rett!
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 9 months ago

not to me to reply, it's Rett's poem

but being the cheerfully arrogant bastard I am I will anyway. Pentagram is often viewed as a satanic symbol, it has wiccan and mathematical appeal as well. You can draw a pentagram without lifting the pen from the page. Food for thought or fatuous? Symbols are powerful, I suspect Rett was referruing to evil aspects of pentagram here, for which i will gladly smack him in the head next time we meet. cheers, Jess
Rett

Rett

17 years 9 months ago

Smacking Jess upside the head with a baseball bat

Ah, now that I have your attention, I was referring to the old Lon Chaney black and white flicks where he becomes the werewolf and the pentagram in his palm. All that other nonsense can be swept under a rug where it belongs. Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby!" Rett 2008.
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 9 months ago

ha! a baseball bat all you got?

nonetheless you got my attention and was very interestested to hear your reference, even though it is wrong! Yeah! Nyanya, once you write the poem it is out of your control. To be more respectful, the pentagram is a very potent symbol that will mean a lot more to your readers than old Lon Chaney movies. cheers, Jess
Rett

Rett

17 years 9 months ago

Slapping nose with a rolled up newspaper

Read it again my friend. I made no references good or evil, just that the pentagram was there and beware the pentagram only as it was used in the old movies. I am aware of both the good and evil power attributed to the pentagram, but this time only meant as a reference to the movies. *LOL* Careful or next time I'll get the fly swatter and do like me mama did. We;ll go round and round. *chuckle* I need to tell you the story with that phrase from my mama and my daughter. She remembers my mama saying that to this day. Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby!" Rett 2008.
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easylife_2

17 years 9 months ago

Nice job done

Its the progression that I really liked and also the scary undertone.
Rett

Rett

17 years 9 months ago

Thanks easy,

I am glad you enjoyed it. I appreciate it. Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby!" Rett 2008.
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poewriter58

17 years 9 months ago

Rett

Congrats on spotlight my friend I still think this is your best Excellent work on this one Chrys
Rett

Rett

17 years 9 months ago

Thanks Chrys

You and Ronda made the difference on this one. I truly appreciate it. Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby!" Rett 2008.
Rett

Rett

17 years 9 months ago

Ouch, a second

to such a biting critique. I don't know if my ego can stand it. *tucking tail between legs* *LOL* Thank you. Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby!" Rett 2008.
Rett

Rett

17 years 9 months ago

*S* I did when young

Not too fond of horror flicks anymore. Thank you so much for reading and commenting. Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby!" Rett 2008.
yenti

yenti

17 years 9 months ago

the wolf

The wolf is culled, but. lives on in memories made more stark by stories old, now they bring a terror to us, that changes a fear into a horror film, or book, that seems to live as they did those long years ago, with the hand that shows a pentagram with a poems touching ways, Is it Real, I cannot tell but will lock my door each night and use some garlands that they say that will stop you from visiting me. lol A very good piece full of Life.(life??) Yours Ian.T
Rett

Rett

17 years 9 months ago

Thanks Ian

*LOL* You only have to worry on the nights of the full moon. *chuckle* Everyone gets a little bit of the Luna tic then. *G* Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby!" Rett 2008.
Rett

Rett

17 years 9 months ago

*L* Thanks Tom

Beware of the full moon. Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby!" Rett 2008.
SG

Samuel Johnnie Green

17 years 9 months ago

Confused, But I understand towards the end

Hi. Regarding "The Wolf" The True significance of the title came from the poem. Now Let me explain myself. "The Wolf" reeks scary, but I felt it was too much of a giveaway until I read the poem. Now looking at the poem. I've completely changed my opinion. Good choice. Loved the suspense. It stayed consistent throughout the whole poem. I wasn't really expecting for the poem to be a reference from a movie so a good element of surprise using on your part. Overall, decent to good poem. Sam
Rett

Rett

17 years 9 months ago

Thank you Samuel

I appreciate you reading and offering your opinion. I am glad it offered a little suspense and that you were surprised that it was in reference to the old black and white werewolf movies. Thank you for reading. Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby!" Rett 2008.
SG

Samuel Johnnie Green

17 years 9 months ago

Anytime

Anytime.
Mark

Mark

17 years 9 months ago

Always

well almost always it takes me, just takes me lol finally here a bit late and this is an awesome poem for me too. May it take me to the sunshine or to the darkness, it takes me most of the time. I really like viruses upposed to cut em up dice em up or do I just like Mora Morovovich? From a "The Mesanger" to "Resident Evil" LMAO Truly, Mark
Rett

Rett

17 years 9 months ago

Thanks Mark

I appreciate it. Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby!" Rett 2008.
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 7 months ago

I missed this one??

And it got spotlight at some point?! Oh, man, I'm slipping. Nice, eerie, spine-tingling write here. Werewolves.... also confused with some of Jon's male relatives... oh wait, that's Sasquatch. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"If your mother still drives you to school, you ain't no 'gangsta', pull your damn pants up!" - Bill Engvall
Rett

Rett

17 years 7 months ago

*LOL* Nobody can catch every poem Jess

Glad it tingled your spine. Thanks. Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby" Rett: 2008
tbeaudet

tbeaudet

17 years 7 months ago

I remember

and I still love it. It also reminded me of the pentagram thingy... Great timing. Tom http://www.neopoet.com/node/12548
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 7 months ago

Rett,

the imagery is so alive here, I can see the wolf running after it's prey. you are such a great writer of fantasy, it always seem real kudos to you, Sir Rett! thanks, Eddie "do like the once barren tree: flourish and like the planted seed: rise" Jose de Deigo
Rett

Rett

17 years 7 months ago

Thank you Eddie

I appreciate it to no end. At least there is one thing I am pretty good at. *LOL* Glad you liked it. Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby" Rett: 2008
Rett

Rett

17 years 7 months ago

Thank you Nature

I am so glad you enjoyed it and that it had the desired effect. May your days all be sunny. Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby" Rett: 2008
Rett

Rett

17 years 3 months ago

Thanks Propriatess

(Kata isn't it?) Glad you enjoyed it. Thank you very much for taking the time to look it up and read. Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water." If government is the answer, it's a stupid question!
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Rett

Its all been said before and I think the help you got was amazing well done all ... enjoyed this read kind regards Jayne
Rett

Rett

16 years 7 months ago

Thanks Jayne

I appreciate it my friend. The help I got was wonderful. This one really was bad when first posted. So glad you enjoyed it. Respectfully, Rett: "Telling me Illegal Immigrants have a right to be here is like saying the burglar that breaks into your home, now has the right to live there with you." Rett
Proprietress of Crimson Hearts

Proprietress o…

16 years 7 months ago

my dear Rett

I have been gone from neo for so long busy writing, busy getting healthy, busy studying I just dropped by to make a few poems unreadable for non-members and saw that you posted this beauty again and I just couldn't resist! what a treat! it shows me what I've been missing... you take care and don't let anything strange bit you ;) your Proprietress
Rett

Rett

16 years 7 months ago

Welcome Back Proprietess

So good to see you again! Hope you are doing better now. I'm glad you have been busy writing and studying though. Good for you. I am working on a new story called the Man Who Couldn't Die and am about to start Chapter 13 on it. It's a bit different for me and covers a lot of time switching back and forth between modern day America and the past, including Europe. Slow going, but am enjoying writing it. Looking forward to having you back! Respectfully, Rett: "Telling me Illegal Immigrants have a right to be here is like saying the burglar that breaks into your home, now has the right to live there with you." Rett
Rob Graber

Rob Graber

16 years 7 months ago

Your Story

Greetings, Rett! Your story sounds really cool; let us know how we can get it when it's done/out! I have long imagined a story called something like "The Last Man to Die," in which medical science finally has reduced mortality to trauma and suicide, but only for everyone born after a specific point in time; the story is that of the last person to HAVE to die. But I don't seem to have it in me to actually write creative prose. :-,?