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Spellbound Death

Spellbound Death

In a drug induced stupor
she lay upon the floor,
not knowing where she was;
not caring anymore.
She watched cascading colors
as they flowed upon the wall
and never heard the screaming
of the children in the hall.

Her mind was slowly floating
upon a golden light.
She was watching smokey billows
when clouds obscured her sight.
As lovely flying sparkles
settled slowly to the ground,
she listened to distant voices
and heard the strangest sound.

They say she'll never speak again,
her throat is torn and raw
from screaming out in misery
at the horror that she saw.
Nothing is all that's left to her,
they died among the flames.
Now she's locked within herself,
can't even call their names.

She never heard their crying
nor felt the fiery glow,
trapped forever in the pain
where she is dying slow.
She'll never see their faces
nor take them to a show,
spellbound by the nightmare,
the Hell she'll always know.

— Rett, Jul 07, 2008

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Region, Country: Southern Texas, USA

Favorite Poets: Dickenson, Longfellow

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purplemoondoll

17 years 11 months ago

The slow steady rhythm

The slow steady rhythm really lends weight to the story. You 'took me there' and this left me very close ot tears - sad, poignant and very well told. ;-) Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Kaz

Thank you very much. It makes me feel silly sometimes when I end up crying over something I wrote. Rett: The perfect summer day is when the sun is shining, the wind is blowing, the birds are singing and the lawnmower is broken. "James Dent"
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poewriter58

17 years 11 months ago

Rett

two minor suggestions Trapped forever and trapped within perhaps another word for one of them and reverse the wording of the title to maybe slowly dying Very sad and heartbreaking well written. Chrystalie
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Thanks Chrys

I made a couple of changes including the title. Now Spellbound Death. BTW, if you get a chance sometime, check out my short story "Old Ben" and let me know what you think. Rett: The perfect summer day is when the sun is shining, the wind is blowing, the birds are singing and the lawnmower is broken. "James Dent"
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

17 years 11 months ago

Each rhyming verse- count

Each rhyming verse- count and counter point- holds the fabric of the poem true to the rhythm of a heartbeat! Very dynamic! I greatly appreciated this horror. Always, Cat 5*
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Cat

Thank you very much. I am amazed you discovered that. I re-read it and be damned if you aren't right. Must have been a subconscious thing. Rett: The perfect summer day is when the sun is shining, the wind is blowing, the birds are singing and the lawnmower is broken. "James Dent"
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Calliope

17 years 11 months ago

Haunting write

This really grabbed me and pulled me in and gave me gooseflesh.Great write,poet. Where power corrupts,poetry cleanses.
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Thank you

Glad you liked it. I guess my job is done. *LOL* kidding. Rett: The perfect summer day is when the sun is shining, the wind is blowing, the birds are singing and the lawnmower is broken. "James Dent"
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 11 months ago

Spellbound Death

Rett, Another great piece here! Well thought out.It pulled me in right away and I could feel the pain for mother and children. Beautiful ~
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Thanks

Thank you very much. I am glad that it had the desired effect. Rett: The perfect summer day is when the sun is shining, the wind is blowing, the birds are singing and the lawnmower is broken. "James Dent"
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Leonard

Thank you so much. I really appreciate your reading and commenting. Rett: The perfect summer day is when the sun is shining, the wind is blowing, the birds are singing and the lawnmower is broken. "James Dent"
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amalzamani

17 years 11 months ago

Octave with random ryhming scheme

...the last line is my only regret...I expected stronger ending. otherwise, this was a very well expressed tragedy in such challenging form...thank you Rett
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Thank you

It was a difficult write from several standpoints. I am sorry th4e last line disappointed you. I was trying to show that she was lost within herself with the pain and dying and crying at the same time. I guess it didn't totally work. Thank you for reading and commenting. Rett: "At twenty, if you are not a Liberal, you have no heart. At Thirty, if you are not a Conservative, you have no brain." Winston Churchill
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 11 months ago

Rett

Smiles:) Barbara I thought this was really good, the image from the article flow perfect. the last stanza kinda stumble, but it is well written
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Thank you

Thank you Barbara. You are right, it stumbles a bit. I was trying to capture the ending of it all and guess I didn't quite manage it. Rett: "At twenty, if you are not a Liberal, you have no heart. At Thirty, if you are not a Conservative, you have no brain." Winston Churchill
AJ

Andie Jean

17 years 11 months ago

Amazing

That was an amazing poem Rett! I really look forward to reading more of your wonderful poems. =] ~Andie
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Andie

Thank you very much. I appreciate it more than you can know. Rett: "At twenty, if you are not a Liberal, you have no heart. At Thirty, if you are not a Conservative, you have no brain." Winston Churchill
tbeaudet

tbeaudet

17 years 11 months ago

You've done it again, Rett.

Have you ever written anything I haven't loved? Excellent piece, but I think the last line needs a little something... A little more Rett! Congrats on Spotlight! Tom
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Tom

Thanks a lot and I am not sure how to answer that. *LOL* Yeah, I agree. I am trying to work on that last line. It needs something. I really appreciate you taking the time to read and comment because I know how busy you are at this time. Many thanks. Rett: "At twenty, if you are not a Liberal, you have no heart. At Thirty, if you are not a Conservative, you have no brain." Winston Churchill
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Change in last line

I changed the last line from. Dying slow, crying low to the Hell she'll always know. I hope this will give it a stronger ending. Thanks Rett: "At twenty, if you are not a Liberal, you have no heart. At Thirty, if you are not a Conservative, you have no brain." Winston Churchill
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Thanks

For the ideas. it made a difference. BTW did anyone ever tell you that you look a lot like Ross Perot? *L* Rett: "At twenty, if you are not a Liberal, you have no heart. At Thirty, if you are not a Conservative, you have no brain." Winston Churchill
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rahbar

17 years 11 months ago

Genuine poetry.

Hello Rett..what a painfully beautiful poem..it takes the reader into the mind of the subject...great artistry....spell bounded. Rahbar.
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Rahbar

Great praise indeed from a fine poet like you. I most humbly appreciate it. Rett: "At twenty, if you are not a Liberal, you have no heart. At Thirty, if you are not a Conservative, you have no brain." Winston Churchill
wolfycat

wolfycat

17 years 11 months ago

:)

Incredible, meaningful writing! I loved this one. wolfy
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Thanks Wolfy

Hey, you know us Texans. If we can't BS them we write poetry. *LOL* Just kidding. I appreciate it my friend. Rett: "At twenty, if you are not a Liberal, you have no heart. At Thirty, if you are not a Conservative, you have no brain." Winston Churchill