Rett

Jul 04, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Graves

Graves

While looking out the window
At dreams that can't come true,
I see someone staring back,
Looking just as blue.

While riding through the valley
Lost in deep despair,
I see another's shadow
Riding over there.

Treading on the dead-white bones
Of hope beneath my feet,
I meet a long forgotten man
Wrapped in sorrow's sheet.

Of all the hopes and plans I left
Buried in the past,
I find the graves are crowded with
Other's that I passed.

With the trying times everyone is going through, I thought I would repost this to remind people that
no matter how bad off we may be. there are others in worse shape. Michael's poem I read day before yesterday
reminded me of this, so I tip my hat to you Michael.
Rett

— Rett, Jul 04, 2008

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Region, Country: Southern Texas, USA

Favorite Poets: Dickenson, Longfellow

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Critiques

leonard daranjo

17 years 11 months ago

Love the way this poem moves

How true - for every problem we face, there is someone out there with problems much more serious than ours. I love the last stanza. cheers ... leonard

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Leonard

Thank you sir, you got it in one! Everytime I start to have a pity party I see someone worse off. Rett: The perfect summer day is when the sun is shining, the wind is blowing, the birds are singing and the lawnmower is broken. "James Dent"

themoonman

17 years 11 months ago

Rett...

nicely worded clarity of the human condition... makes one want to write.. loved the referance to graves.. enjoyed reading.. Richard

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Richard

Thank you. I appreciate you reading! Rett: The perfect summer day is when the sun is shining, the wind is blowing, the birds are singing and the lawnmower is broken. "James Dent"

zarul

17 years 11 months ago

wow

hye nice poem da theme is quite horrifying but when i read it it urns out to be beautiful it is touchng my heart

zarul

17 years 11 months ago

wow

hye nice poem da theme is quite horrifying but when i read it it urns out to be beautiful it is touchng my heart

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

zanul

Thank you sir. I am glad you found it touching. My deepest appreciation . Rett: The perfect summer day is when the sun is shining, the wind is blowing, the birds are singing and the lawnmower is broken. "James Dent"

infinite_dwarf

17 years 11 months ago

Rett

First off: "While looking out the window At dreams that can’t come true" - awesome line. I didn't read it at first in the context that Leonard did - I took it as a literal thing, and it came out nice and spooky! Leonard's interpretations made it real, and quite sad. I love it when you can get completely different responses... shows that it's a good work! ~Jess K. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ ~ "Everyone needs to believe in something. I believe I'll have another beer!" ~ "Your inferiority complex is better than mine!"

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Jess

Thanks a lot. Leonard got it in one. The first part is pitying myself and then realizing no matter how bad I feel someone feels worse. I am glad you enjoyed it. Rett: The perfect summer day is when the sun is shining, the wind is blowing, the birds are singing and the lawnmower is broken. "James Dent"

prayersbyPatty

17 years 11 months ago

Rett

Great write, as always. I like the line about dreams that can't come true, all the people we were supposed to meet and didn't. Our time is so short, distractions in the way Life is what happens when your plans go awry. Patty

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Patty

Thank you. Yes, so many distractions along the way. You know, that is a good premise for a poem. So many distractions along the way. You should expand on that. *S* Rett: The perfect summer day is when the sun is shining, the wind is blowing, the birds are singing and the lawnmower is broken. "James Dent"

tbeaudet

17 years 11 months ago

Another masterpeice

Beautifully written and profound. Bravo, again. Tom

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Tom

My thanks sir. I knew you would appreciate it also! Rett: The perfect summer day is when the sun is shining, the wind is blowing, the birds are singing and the lawnmower is broken. "James Dent"

Calliope

17 years 11 months ago

Poignant

and full of clarity of ones own self,not many can beleive it can always get worse or that it already is for some people.Great write,poet. Lacy, P.S. Never say it can't get worse,cause it can,and life will prove it if you dont believe it,I know this to be a fact,lol Where power corrupts,poetry cleanses.

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Lacy

Many many thanks for reading and understanding. As the old saying goes, "Smile it could be worse, so I smiled and sure enough, it got worse". *L* Have a good weekend. Rett: The perfect summer day is when the sun is shining, the wind is blowing, the birds are singing and the lawnmower is broken. "James Dent"

Barbara Writes

17 years 11 months ago

Really Good Rett

Smiles:) Barbara Putting pity parties in the grave is very unique. I don't like pity parties either, but do accept support and help.

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Barbara

Thanks. I appreciate it. Help and support I can handle, pity I can't. Rett: The perfect summer day is when the sun is shining, the wind is blowing, the birds are singing and the lawnmower is broken. "James Dent"

Barbara Writes

17 years 11 months ago

You are welcome Rett

Smiles:) Barbara

Janice Pearce

17 years 11 months ago

Rett

Your imagery here is fantastic~ I loved it~

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Muchas gracias

I dearly love it when it comes out right. I also dearly appreciate you reading and taking the time to comment. Rett: The perfect summer day is when the sun is shining, the wind is blowing, the birds are singing and the lawnmower is broken. "James Dent"

Linda Moses

17 years 2 months ago

HI Rett

I guess we all go through the vally at one time or another. Very good write. Sincerely, Linda

orgami

17 years 2 months ago

Its okay to look into a grave Just dont fall in !

curious of course great poem I go into the great spin out pity party big time Addictions though played a part big time too am not pursuing that a whole week poison free feels damn weird just stay in the today greatest old grips are looking back its easy and even more to get stuck stuck I was for years just deleted years of crap from people I cant pretend are my "freinds" anymore just people that I thought made my Facebook Gmail look decorated bah Just keep family in there now and some close freinds felt so good to hit the delete key on it all As If I was going to die by letting that all just blink out of sight I have to thank Nature or the God or Creator more pay more kindness to my own family here My own child rather then the fakirs maybe work on myself too and write some more valueable poetry with a clearer head and heart Didnt get around to commenting on it till now!!!