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This One Day (in memory of 9/11)

This One Day

This one day, one beautiful crisp morning,
brightest sun in the clearest, bluest sky.
He thought about staying home this one day,
but instead he kissed his young wife goodbye,
instead he kissed his babies goodbye.

Wishing he missed that crowded morning train,
he drank his whole coffee standing up.
His coffee tasted so good this one day,
he didn’t know it would be his last cup,
it was to be his very last cup.

Thinking this one day about getting in shape,
kids need him around for several more years.
So he got off the elevator this one day,
and he decided to walk up some stairs,
this one day he'd climb up some stairs.

He stood staring at miles across the river,
towards his home and the family he loved.
When suddenly the blue sky turned black,
fuel and smoke poured in from above,
hell igniting just a few floors above.

Smoke too thick to see, too black to breathe,
he smashed windows with office chairs,
then hugging his children’s artwork,
like a fullback he ran for the stairs.
His heart was beating so loudly,
God mustn’t have heard his last prayers.

This one day, one beautiful crisp morning,
brightest sun in the clearest, bluest sky.
He really wished he stayed home this one day,
but instead he kissed his young wife goodbye,
instead he kissed his babies goodbye.
One day, this one day,
it really was goodbye.

— tbeaudet, Jun 25, 2008

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Boston, USA

Favorite Poets: Patti Smith, Lucinda Williams, John Prine, Bruce Springsteen, Jim Carroll, Bob Dylan, Tom Waites

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Critiques

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sweetness

17 years 11 months ago

Very powerful!!

Truly, heartfelt, deep down inside...Very powerful! Tears run down my face, sitting, reading this...I knew where it was going, before getting there... A day that was exactly what your words say, EXACTLY!! Not a cloud in the sky, a day that started so sweet, to only be turned and pulled upside down, all at once... One never forgets a day like that, and one never should... Sweetness...
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prayersbyPatty

17 years 11 months ago

Wow

That was really awesome. You never know. I bet we all remember what we were doing that day! Nice tribute...
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

AWESOME

Tom, This one really sat me back in my chair. Extremely powerful read. I could hear the music to it. I could see the cloudless sky, the sun shine, I could see/hear the crash and feel the flames and almost choke on the smoke and above it all, I could remember exactly where I was on the highway when it came on the radio. A little side point, my son in law worked around a mile from the Pentagon when it was hit. JESUS, This is good. Rett: They say that money talks. Sadly, my wallet has laryngitis!
SM

Secrets and Memories

17 years 11 months ago

Quite touching...

I could just invision it as I read it. Quite very heart touching I must say. Very deep and powerful. I enjoyed it. Do hope to read more from you. -S.
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 11 months ago

This One Day

Oh my,You reached into my soul with these words. I didn't think so few lines could describe a day so perfectly as you did Awesome~
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Congrats on Spotlight

Way to go Tom! Rett: They say that money talks. Sadly, my wallet has laryngitis!
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 11 months ago

Wow, Tom

This is awesome. Very beautiful tribute. I have no suggestions, as I feel this is a perfect piece. ~Jess K. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ ~ "Everyone needs to believe in something. I believe I'll have another beer!" ~ "Your inferiority complex is better than mine!"
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Congrats on spotlight again

This is really a knockout poem. I am down for the count. Rett: They say that money talks. Sadly, my wallet has laryngitis!
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 11 months ago

This was great

Smiles:) Barbara I have some suggestions that are minor. Much repetition with some of your word. The theme flow and image is great, but the repetition slowed down the flow for me.The fourth and fifth stanza got me running as I race to the dramatic ending was really awesome especially once the black clouds came into view was perfect, then your end brought me back to the beginning where repetition bogged me down again. I see many like it, so do I. Its in the spotlight CONGRATS so if my suggestion offend leave as is. I am not as good as some here and critiquing still learning.
tbeaudet

tbeaudet

17 years 10 months ago

Barbara

thanks for the critique, and it was my intention to bring the reader back to the very beginning again. Thanks so much for the comments and suggestions. Tom
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 10 months ago

You are welcome

Smiles:) Barbara Thanks for not hating me for my suggestions. They tend to be harsh when i try not to be. Going back to the beginning was well done. really good poem.
Sinbadthesailorman

Sinbadthesailorman

17 years 10 months ago

T love this bunches

I especially like the echos as i precieve them the kinda repeation is missed by some I had to reread as I often do Lovely work and should be easy to get publish as the aniversery is coming and should be heard the only trick is knowing where and when and to whom to send it best of luck your talent shines true stop clutching at my chest there is nothing left Donnie/ Sinbad
Linda Moses

Linda Moses

17 years 9 months ago

Tom

Great Poem, every bit of it. Congrats on spotlight
Rett

Rett

17 years 9 months ago

Tom

I still really appreciate the meaning behind this poem and I have to say it is very appropriate right now. Respectfully, Rett: "The only thing observable with the naked eye to exceed the speed of light is rumor" Unknown
Sinbadthesailorman

Sinbadthesailorman

17 years 9 months ago

I seem to like the last line of the first revison

this day was really goodbye if I remeber right this ending seems a bit forced and retorticle or redunat not sure which or why Maybe I was just quite fond of the first read and the change is to difernt here as the other made little diferance this last line seem a bit to important to change from a fact the last goobye really to a hey rember this kinda of statment most likely me though I still perfer the first ending on july 24th /Sinbad this still is nice but the endind changed it for me
tbeaudet

tbeaudet

17 years 9 months ago

Sinbad

I've been struggling with the last line to this poem, which is why it was changed a few times. I'm still not sure if I like it, but I put it back to the original after reading your comment/suggestion. Thanks, Tom
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 8 months ago

living it

Tom, It's hard for me to read poetry refering to 9/11, because I lived it, and when I hear some one speak of it I always say you had to be there. I'll say this, I enjoyed this write. I was touhed by it's power. thank you so so much!! Eddie if a man does not know love, he does not know God
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MEL

17 years 8 months ago

Heartfelt and emotional

Mel Inwood Makes you realise that every day could be our last! This is what hurts me inside, because I know people who save things for that SPECIAL occasion, or that special day. You should always live for the moment, and remember that EVERY day is special. Tell that special someone that you love them, thank the neighbour who helped you out, call the old friend you haven't spoken to in a while, touch base with family and let them know you care! I'm sure there were many unspoken words that day, and now regrets for not doing so...little too late once they're gone... I loved this poem and my heart goes out to all those lost souls and their families...Forever in our hearts xxx