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Panic

Panic

There's a lightning storm brewing
In the mountains of the past
Rushing toward tomorrow
Like a cannon's mighty blast

The clouds of yesterday
On fire with the storm
And a hole is torn in heaven
Where the future will be born

And the rolling sound of thunder
Like the sound that foretells doom
Rushes across the landscape
Like a million sonic booms

As the heart is torn asunder
By the hurts from the past
And you wonder if the Angel Gabriel
Will sound his horn at last

And the rushing sound of horses
Like the hordes of hell are freed
Fill your mind with terror
And cause your heart to freeze

Fear not; for Armageddon
Is not loosed upon the world
It's just the panic stricken thoughts
Of one lonely little girl

— Rett, Jun 22, 2008

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Region, Country: Southern Texas, USA

Favorite Poets: Dickenson, Longfellow

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RSScheerer

RSScheerer

17 years 11 months ago

Rett

Wow. I am duly impressed by both your rhyme and rhythm in this piece - it's perfect! An amazing story as well.....who is the lonely little girl? Best, Ronda
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Ronda

Believe it or not, no one. I just got to thinking about children and how they can get scared over almost any little thing and extrapolated from there. Glad you liked it. Rett: It may look easy, when you look at me, But it took years of effort, to become the mess that you see John Fogerty
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rider68

17 years 11 months ago

Hi Rett

Yet again you have created a masterful piece, Each stanza is versed and rhythmed, so very well, The spotlight will need to find you a permament home, Rett before you came to Neopoets, where was your platform? did you have one, (Applauding & clapping) Very Best Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Peter

Peter, I have written since I was 15 years old and have been turned down so many times you wouldn't believe it. I had a bit of a run at the old Edgewise Cafe on webchat broadcasting system at one time and I had one of my poems read by Jeff Bridges off broadway but that has been the extent. No publications other than a couple of defunct websites. I got so tired of being turned down because publishers now days consider anything that rhymes as anathema. They see it and reject it w/o even reading it. I got so disgusted that I haven't written anything at all for over 3 years. I tried out a few other sites and nothing fit my taste. One I thought might was Poetry Castle and I signed up and 2 weeks later still could not post or comment so I gave up, then came here. I guess I am as stubborn and stupid as the editors as I refuse to change my style because I actually think in rhyme a lot of the time. Okay, I'll quit boring you. I am very happy you enjoyed this poem and I really appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. Have a good day my friend. Rett: It may look easy, when you look at me, But it took years of effort, to become the mess that you see John Fogerty
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 11 months ago

Rett

I really like how you worked the "end times" into this post. And actually, if you read that whole entry in the book of Joel (mainly 2:2, 2:10, and 2:28-32) it sounds like one monsterous storm: winds from the four corners unleashed, quaking earth, pillars of smoke (there is lightning that literally looks like a wrung towel) Excellent write, my friend! ps: your little Cardinal there is cute! ~Jess K. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ ~ "Everyone needs to believe in something. I believe I'll have another beer!" ~ "Your inferiority complex is better than mine!"
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Jess K

Thanks Jess. You are the only one that caught that so far. Thanks for reading and commenting. I am glad you liked it. Rett: It may look easy, when you look at me, But it took years of effort, to become the mess that you see John Fogerty
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rahbar

17 years 11 months ago

panic

Hello Rett, this is a work of thoughtful and sensitive mind....superb. Rahbar.
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Rahbar

Thank you very much for reading and commenting. I'm glad you liked it. Rett: It may look easy, when you look at me, But it took years of effort, to become the mess that you see John Fogerty
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DarkinAZ

17 years 11 months ago

Great write

Poor little girl, all the choas of creations end, bottled inside a child. Your friend, Mark
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Mark

Thanks Mark. Glad you enjoyed Rett: It may look easy, when you look at me, But it took years of effort, to become the mess that you see John Fogerty
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 11 months ago

Hi Rett...

another very fine poem from you... keep em coming! Richard
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Richard

Thanks a lot, I appreciate you taking the time to read. Rett: It may look easy, when you look at me, But it took years of effort, to become the mess that you see John Fogerty
Marius Surleac

Marius Surleac

17 years 11 months ago

good job!

Beautiful, nice imagery and good musicality, it flows perfectly (with few escapes that don't matter) and soft representation for a panic sensation. Well done! Best regards, Marius
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Thank you so much. I

Thank you so much. I appreciate you taking your time to read and comment. I am glad you liked it. Rett: It may look easy, when you look at me, But it took years of effort, to become the mess that you see John Fogerty
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 11 months ago

Congrats on Spotlight!

~Jess K. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ ~ "Everyone needs to believe in something. I believe I'll have another beer!" ~ "Your inferiority complex is better than mine!"
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Thank you

*S* Rett: It may look easy, when you look at me, But it took years of effort, to become the mess that you see John Fogerty
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prayersbyPatty

17 years 11 months ago

Rett

I really like your poem. No surprise there. I like rhyming and the images that come to my mind....
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Many thanks Patty

As you can see I write almost exclusively in rhyme. *shrug* it just works for me. Rett: It may look easy, when you look at me, But it took years of effort, to become the mess that you see John Fogerty
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 11 months ago

Rett

Just when I think you out-did yourself, you come up with another, I like even better~ Absolutely beatiful!
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Janice

Thank you very much. I really appreciate it. Rett: It may look easy, when you look at me, But it took years of effort, to become the mess that you see John Fogerty
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rider68

17 years 11 months ago

Greatly Deserved

Hi Rett Hello again......... Well Done On Spotlight,....greatly Deserved, All the very Best, Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Peter

Thanks a lot sir. I appreciate it. Rett: It may look easy, when you look at me, But it took years of effort, to become the mess that you see John Fogerty
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emy

17 years 11 months ago

Rett

It's my 1st time that i read ur poem,it's AMAZING reallllllllllly wonderful.It takes u places u didn't imagain.Keep good work,I'm gona read all of wt u published ;)
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Emy

Thank you very much. I really appreciate it. Rett: It may look easy, when you look at me, But it took years of effort, to become the mess that you see John Fogerty
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purplemoondoll

17 years 11 months ago

Brilliant - you ‘took me

Brilliant - you 'took me there'. I have to agree the rhythm and flow really drive this forward - and I love the closing verse. Very well crafted and a pleasure to read. Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Kaz

Thank you Kaz, that really means a lot to me. I am so glad ypu enjoyed reading it. Rett: It may look easy, when you look at me, But it took years of effort, to become the mess that you see John Fogerty
tbeaudet

tbeaudet

17 years 11 months ago

Another excellent peice

here Rett. I must admit the biblical references went unnoticed by me, but I felt the spiritual overtones. Tom
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Tom

Thank you so much. The references were a bit obscure, but were meant to be. Thanks for reading. Rett: It may look easy, when you look at me, But it took years of effort, to become the mess that you see John Fogerty
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 11 months ago

brilliant piece of writing Rett,

the end line is perfect. Not real fond of the biblical imagery. To much more than half the world it is like quoting Homer, you rely on the bible instead of your own devices. You can always trust me to put a downer on something spectacularly good if I feel it is non-human, as in non-universal. I often make the same mistake, assuming that everyone knows America goes to war for profit, not freedom. It's why I dislike the work of a well respected poet, W.H. Auden, he relies on a knowledge of the classics to understand his work. Elitism takes many forms. cheers, Jess
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Brilliant Piece

Thanks Jess. I do appreciate it. I used those references because children can get so scared at the least noise or shadow. There was some really good imagery there that fit for what I was trying to convey. We can disagree on some things though and still appreciate each others work. Each of us has our own beliefs on things and neither of us can actually do more than think what we do. I truly appreciate your viewpoint and comments. Even if we disagree on some things. thanks Rett: They say that money talks. Sadly, my wallet has laryngitis!