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The Affair

I'm not the forward stranger
that you've been longing for.
How can I be, but not enough..
what is this, and are you sure.

A volitile situation
perhaps my comforts there.
a new life contradiction,
and I still don't think you care..
Are you here for selfish needs,
are you listening to me...
its raining and I'm in it...
soaked in accountabilities.

An underlying danger
equation demands consequence
an explosion slowly churning
my need to jump the fence.

Its raining, can you hear me
I'm not the stranger in your dream
but I can take you to that place
that up to now was never real.
ignition, savage, spreading,
fire taking hold
and for a strangers meeting
its way too fucking bold.

the rain won't wash it away
I tried again today
just miserable and wet
my dampened spirit can't forget.

and you won't let me
knocking at my door
just tell me why you're here
with that passion I can't ignore.
— themoonman, Apr 08, 2008

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Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

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poewriter58

18 years 2 months ago

Richard

the line up to now was not real is throwing off the beat of the rest of the poem how can I be that is understood , where does the but not enough fit and I is that supposed to be still ? don't think you care wow this is way different for you I like Chrys
themoonman

themoonman

18 years 2 months ago

Hi Chrys..

this was a poem about an affair with a married woman.. how can I be enough..but not enough to keep you here.. that word was supposed to be still...sorry..you know me and my spelling.... I'll be fixing it.. Richard
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poewriter58

18 years 2 months ago

Richard

well now that makes a difference then add the to keep you here it would make the line better understood kids gotta teach them everything(lol) still an awesome write Chrys
tbeaudet

tbeaudet

18 years 2 months ago

I don't completely understand it

but I absolutely love it. I've read it several times now, Moonman, and it gets better every time. If you would be so kind as to elaborate and explain this poem, I would be grateful. Thanks for sharing. Tom
themoonman

themoonman

18 years 2 months ago

thank you..

I appreciate you reading and taking time to comment...there is so much to chose from on this site..this was about falling in love with a married woman that was in an unhappy marriage.. meeting the love of your life and she is taken...but she didn't want to be... Richard
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muttering_madwoman

18 years 2 months ago

thoughts

wow...obviously very "stream of consciousness", like you had to write it--didn't sit down deciding to "write", but more HAD to purge. bleeding on the page. powerful, passionate. keep this shit up, richard. gutsy. Niki
themoonman

themoonman

18 years 2 months ago

Hi Niki..

thank you...your comments always make it better..even to me.. Richard
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muttering_madwoman

18 years 1 month ago

had to re read.

this and "doing time" are my personal faves by you, at present. till the next one comes along, i'm certain :) keep it up, N
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

I like it

Really great write and it took a bit to understand. but it finally soaked through this old head. Great subject. Now, one little "but" here. S4 last line. to should be too. Loved it. Rett ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Some call me lazy, I prefer Energy Conservationist~~~~~~~~~~~~~ That's P.C. speak by the way.
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 11 months ago

Hi Rett...

thanks for reading and taking the time to comment on this write of mine... very much appreciated... Richard
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 7 months ago

Hi there Janice...

your comments are appreciated... very much so... I thank you for reading this little poem of mine... Richard