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Published in my poetry anthology Soapbox Trophies. Release date TBA. Thanks for all your support! :)

— theladyblue, Jan 11, 2008

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Country/Region: USA

Critiques

RSScheerer

18 years 4 months ago

Forbidden desires

Addictions, taboos. This could be about any type of obsession, depending upon the reader. Some editing suggestions - spelling of "Memoir" in your title First line might read better as "I await your solace" spelling of "furor" in line five line eleven is a bit difficult to understand as far as structure and fluidity, I'm not certain what your meaning is there *puts away crazy editor-type person* ~ Ronda

meic

18 years 4 months ago

Great finale - you nearly

Great finale - you nearly had me going there at first ... a gloriously constructed 'twist-in-the-tail' tale. btw. 'furor' correct US spelling; 'furore' correct UK spelling The occasional differences between US and UK English fascinate me - I was once criticsed for writing 'encyclopaedia' on similar grounds Mike Me: 30s

theladyblue

18 years 4 months ago

me and my editorial needs...

plain and simple...i am the reason editors exist! lol and as for the twist...i am shamelessly delighted by my cleverness lol i hope that everyone enjoys it as much as i do lol...chocolate is a very powerful drug if given and taken correctly... *wink* "For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..." <3 Emarie

IKnowNoBox

18 years 4 months ago

Oh you have done it now

and with chocolate have you no idea how my sweet tooth smarts right now?...oh and soon a fairy will come and eat this poem off the page.... In ink, dabbler

theladyblue

18 years 4 months ago

snicker

I think I should be spanked...with a chocolate paddle please... hehehehehehehehe "For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..." <3 Emarie

T.Obatala

18 years 4 months ago

…the surprise ending threw

...the surprise ending threw me for a loop! great job. peace obatala

tbeaudet

17 years 7 months ago

Got me, too!

Totally surprised at the ending, which could easily be edited by you for other purposes/intentions/inspirations/publications, etc. I am delighted to have found you. Nit Pickin' time.... I agree with Ronda, and I'll add that 'can not' may be better off as 'cannot' in line above Elizabeth. Tom

theladyblue

17 years 7 months ago

kk fixed it...thanks buches!

always glad to suck in a reader then have a big laugh with them in the end...its not a poem that comes around that often for me but when it does i have a blast lol <3 Emarie P.S. I am delighted to have found you too! @~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@ "For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..."

infinite_dwarf

17 years 7 months ago

lol

your affinity for chocolate is like mine for the vanilla chai lattes from Starbucks. Quite addictive those buggers are. In all honesty, I was waiting for the hook at the end - but still chuckled any way, as I knew that most minds would be heading towards the gutter. Outstanding job done here. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"When there's no good answers, and no new questions. Another personal disaster, there's nowhere to go but down..." - Gin Blossoms

theladyblue

17 years 7 months ago

haha

well you know...great minds and all that jazz...lol glad you enjoyed! <3 Emarie @~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@ "For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..."