theladyblue

Dec 02, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Hypnotic

I feel…Rhythmic…

A solid fluidity
Gracing my soul

As words ebb
On the flow

I feel…Your tongue…

A power house
Of sting and bliss

Sipping knowledge
Drink my fantasy

I feel…Delicate…

Phantom embraces
Fade armored walls

Love takes
More than desire

I feel…Your soul…

Prophetic in nature
Yet willing to dare

Gaze into me
And uncover you

— theladyblue, Dec 02, 2007

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Critiques

purplemoondoll

18 years 6 months ago

Drink my Fantasy

This is another awesome write - loved this. Excellent imagery and word craft again. Sensual and evocative. I really like your writing style. :-) Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.

theladyblue

18 years 6 months ago

wow i am flattered!!!

wow i am flattered!!! thanks so much for your time and opinion!!! <3 Emarie

meic

18 years 6 months ago

Gorgeous. The hesitations as

Gorgeous. The hesitations as you reach for words give this a profound sense of truth and immediacy. Although it is presented as a series of linked musings, the whole is so much greater than the sum of the parts. The ending could not be bettered. Hwyl fawr! Mike

theladyblue

18 years 6 months ago

this is a very intimate

this is a very intimate piece and a performance piece at that. in a slow, breathy, musical voice this is to be read; with many of the words drawn out for affect. it seems to work lol so glad you liked this piece!!! it was something new for me to try... <3 Emarie

Mark

17 years 7 months ago

mmm

yummy LOL that's all :~) Mark Man thinks this.

Rett

17 years 7 months ago

I second Mark

uhhhh, 'nuff said. Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby" Rett: 2008

themoonman

17 years 7 months ago

Hey...

what can I say... I'm a guy, and this was hypnotically alluring... Richard

tbeaudet

17 years 7 months ago

I need a cigarette!

and I quit smoking long ago. All I can say is... whew. Tom http://www.neopoet.com/node/12548

infinite_dwarf

17 years 7 months ago

damn, girl..

Magic from your fingers. I'm laughing at how you have all of these chaps' tails in a knot.... You're so evil. >:~D ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"When there's no good answers, and no new questions. Another personal disaster, there's nowhere to go but down..." - Gin Blossoms

Esker

16 years 2 months ago

Hypnotized

hummmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm!!! poetry as delicious treasure like sweets in the wood the ruffled gold that basket givers tease Oh my what nice poems you have Esker~