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theladyblue
theladyblue
Dec 01, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

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Published in my poetry anthology Soapbox Trophies.  Release date TBA.  Thanks for all your support! :)


— theladyblue, Dec 01, 2007

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meic

18 years 6 months ago

A lovely poem, yes

A lovely poem, yes indeed. The structure works well - as each line lengthens so does the degree of commitment. This is so honest and pure: though this brings a kind of vulnerability. Still, this hope and trust is so much more positive than a retreat to humdrum caution. ---------------------------------------- There are some things we may know far beyond reason above the clear peaks of logic beneath the dark ravines of mind. There are some things we may know on the fringes of feeling more subtle than thought deeper than words. You may seek these things in the passing glance, the lightest touch, the merest brush of lips – and in the making of the search who knows what we may come to know? Mike
theladyblue

theladyblue

18 years 6 months ago

while this is true, humdrum

while this is true, humdrum caution has its place and should not be readily discarded. though at times it does become over done and it leaves one wishing that trust came as easily. this was inspired by a J.W. Waterhouse painting titled "Lamia" which is also an inspiration for John Keats poem "Lamia"; one of my favorites for obvious reasons. haha many thanks for your words poet!!! <3 Emarie
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guardian

18 years 6 months ago

Romantic

The poem is well crafted expressing romantic sentiments and longings. Well done enjoyed. Guardian
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 6 months ago

Prompt Poetry I have only writen i think 2 here

and there is a delightful thing to find out after the poem that is why reply to comments is important.This makes the site function.'Spread wings...'makes my want to see that painting and read the poem. In ink, Dabbler
theladyblue

theladyblue

18 years 6 months ago

most of my work is inspired by art rather than experience...

although....the ones that are purely personal experience were sooooo worth it hehehehe but anyway.... thanks so much!!! and my interpretation of the poem may or may not strike you as correct but for me i feel art more than i see it. i rarely take things as they are and leave it at that because more often than not there is more to it than even the artist, author, or person knows. you time and opinion are always appreciated!!! <3 Emarie
tbeaudet

tbeaudet

17 years 7 months ago

Structure, again bravo.

Each line grows as the love deepens with each sentence. This theme is familiar to me, as I am picking through your work randomly, so although I admire this piece, it is very similar to the one I just read. I am a huge fan of yours already, so allow me to continue to read through your library. Thanks, Tom
theladyblue

theladyblue

17 years 7 months ago

read away!

It is a common theme...I tired for so long to write good 'Love poetry' that one day it kind of all came spilling out. so for those that feel close they were probably written around the same time. I'm typically not one for mushy gushy but it is always fun to try. <3 Emarie @~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@ "For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..."