Distasteful Lies and Butterflies has been selected for publication @Triond.com

Distateful Lies and Butterflies
Has Been selected for publication@ Triond.com

http://authspot.com/poetry/distasteful-lies-and-butterflies/

A thought by Sinbad the Sailor Man

— Sinbadthesailorman, Nov 07, 2007

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: U.S. A. Indiana, Valparaiso, USA

Favorite Poets: Robert Frost, Walt Whitman, Samuel Taylor Coleridge, Carl Sandburg these I have read some And so Many More. I have no Favorite or any that I dislike. Whom I consider to be poets; of course there are many Dark and hateful souls, who would cry out and to I will lend an ear, but some. They just leave a awful taste in my heart that I can not bear to read twice. Let alone as many times I would do normally; as I must.

Critiques

tbeaudet

18 years 7 months ago

WOW- you asked for it- Title is awesome

Sinbad, this is so close to being the best poem I have ever read. It starts out, really grabbing the readers attention, and the body of this has so much going on, so much important stuff going on, but it gets kind of scrambled and distorted. It's kinda out of whack, but this has so much potential. I'm not sure how long you worked on this, but I would give this a few more hours, and really clean it up and get it together. Don't take this the wrong way....this is going to be a brilliant piece of art. I would get rid of the quotes and stuff, and choose each and every word very carefully. Also, make sure spelling is correct (distastful = distasteful) Great job!! Looking forward to reading your revised edition if you choose to do so.

Sinbadthesailorman

18 years 7 months ago

Thanx I don' really think these things out for I screw them up

So badly when I try I just let them come and then later in time they gradually get fixed I am A strong Beleive in what come what may if that makes any sense I'am A pure amature and lack the tecnomacinics to fix them with out destroy them I Just recently Started writing again and I' am working these poems of Mine into ABook Idea OF fiction msyter suspenes SO I need all the help I can Get Hope to Have A short ready soon But No way I be able to get it to you all on the Berry's computer

Ancientone

18 years 7 months ago

That's a beaut....

is it based on a true story? nicly done and made me teary eyed. Have a good day Sin Bad. :) Patrick/AO

Sinbadthesailorman

18 years 4 months ago

Yep My daughter was life

Flighted to Chicago Children Hospital Back in july And the Ex daunted and flaunted on her new man which is only natural for her if you can't tell I still in will always be in love with her but that is where I got Ideal for it

Sinbadthesailorman

18 years 4 months ago

I have revise this poem its out there some where

hope you like the new version

pinksheep

18 years 4 months ago

The Title

Poignant and magnetic- Sincerest Regards Lesley

Sinbadthesailorman

18 years 4 months ago

Thanxs again there is a revison out there some where

I will try and return the reads as soon as I get some posting done and catch up on comitting on my buddy list Thanx Donnie/ Sinbad

Sinbadthesailorman

16 years 5 months ago

Thank you. I been kicking this one around as of late

as I hope to do some of the others I have here. I love the face of this tortise did you doctor up the eye? I can recall ever seening so much white in one before. Donnie/Sinbad

seabhac

16 years 5 months ago

I have read some of your work before

I like the rawness of the way you write from the core of yourself. This surpasses anything you have previously written Just beautiful... Seabhac

Sinbadthesailorman

16 years 5 months ago

Thank you This is one is one of my first here a Neo

But I haven't messed with it for a while I am trying to get my works to be at least correctly done if nothing esle I have written alot things that I haven't posted and I need to get them up so I can see them and work them I hope there will be others that will get received as some of those I have here. Donnie/Sinbad